dVerse — Christmas Mourn

Watercolor Painting - Children Playing In The Snow  by Catherine Bradbury

Bells, loud echoes of the day
Hearts stood still and teeth did knash
Gone now, never gone away

Ripple in from yesterday
Rest you now, returned to ash
Bells, loud echoes of the day

Children in the snow, at play
Miss one, now in frozen grass
Gone now, never gone away

Cap and mittens still displayed
Pictures, toys rest in a cache
Bells, loud echoes of the day

Christmas morn now filled with grey
Running footsteps never pass
Gone now, never gone away

Under tree wait gifts today
Glittered paper, mem’ries flash
Bells, loud echoes of the day
Gone now, never gone away

 

Merril is today’s host of dVerse.  Merril says:
[F]or today’s Poetics challenge, I’d like you to write something about echoes. You can write actual echo poetry—where you repeat the end word or syllable or echo sounds.
OR—you can write a poem about some sort of actual echoes.
OR –you write about the myth of Echo.
OR—you can combine any or all of these.

Today’s offering is a villanelle form poem.
image:  “Children Playing in the Snow” by Catherine Bradbury

38 Comments Add yours

  1. Sad. Echoes that will never die.

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  2. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    You whip this villanelle into pragmatic shape, with refrains tolling poetic echoes; very impressive. Lots of artful variety out here on the trail; hooray.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Glenn, and yes, so much wondrous poetry to enjoy.

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  3. I love the villanelle, it’s beautiful Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Linda.

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  4. Sadje says:

    Beautifully written Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje.

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  5. Xan says:

    It’s got a rhythm of a winter holiday, and /perfect/ villanelle rhyme scheme too. Wonderful.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Xan thank you.

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  6. calmkate says:

    beautiful composition, lots of effort in this one 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Kate!

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  7. lynn__ says:

    Wow, Lisa! Grief echoes like bells in your poem of mourning…ashes to ashes, we all fall down.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Lynn.

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  8. Reena Saxena says:

    I like the refrain of “Gone now, never gone away”

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Reena 🙂

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  9. kim881 says:

    So many echoes of Christmas past in your poem, Jade, including friends who are gone but still in our minds and hearts. We don’t often hear bells or children playing outside these days, although we do still get carol singers. The Villanelle rhyme scheme and refrain work well.

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  10. merrildsmith says:

    What a wonderful, splendid villanelle! Bittersweet echoes and tolling bells. Thank you for joining in.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Merril, and you are welcome.

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  11. Frank Hubeny says:

    I like this echoing line: “Gone now, never gone away”

    It is amazing how the repetitions in the villanelle’s structure sets up an echo.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 So glad you liked the poem, Frank.

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  12. Jane Swanson says:

    You captured grief in a memorable villanelle.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Jane, thank you for reading and commenting.

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  13. Gone now, never gone away. These words echo the many memories this season brings. Your words were a great stroll down memory lane.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Astrid thank you. Glad you connected with it.

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  14. Artful repetition and echoes in this one! Loved it.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Phillip, glad you enjoyed it 🙂

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  15. memadtwo says:

    Villanelle is another great repeating form.
    And the aftermath of death is very like an echo. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Like you (I think it was you) said, we see the light of stars long dead…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for reading and commenting.

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  16. felt like a merry song to me!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I’m glad you connected with it. Thanks for reading and commenting 🙂

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      1. My pleasure, Ms. Jade!

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  17. Very spooky – could as easily be an incantation as a dirge. Very powerful and deceptively simple, like one of those children’s rhymes which are loaded with double meanings like Ring Around the Rosy.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I appreciate your take on it. It was meant to be haunting. I didn’t make a comment on your poem but I’ve been thinking about it off and on ever since!

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  18. I saw some pictures from my youth… so much is missed… my parents, the house we used to live in… and as you say it echoes into now.

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