The Sunday Muse #149 and earthweal OLW #58 — Beyond the veil

light shines, filtered
through a
chlorophyllic matrix,
conning
my plant eyes. swaying
with hope,
rooted as static beckons,
i see
beyond moss crepe sheets
a place
where fresh air plays
beyond
algal curtains and
rank gloom.
the green mirror’s
dispelled
shattered shards rise,
redeemed,
twirling in the bright
reborn.

I’ve only used Candace Kubinec’s form, the Waltmarie, one other time but like it so much I am using it again here.

The form is 10 line poem, any subject, even numbered lines are 2 syllables and form their own poem when read separately. Odd lines are longer with no specific syllable count. I doubled the length here because 10 lines wasn’t enough for what I wanted to say.

Chrissa is today’s host for The Sunday Muse
I’m also linking this with Brendan’s earthweal‘s Open Link Weekend.

36 Comments Add yours

  1. Helen Dehner says:

    WOW! A Chained Waltmarie …. and a beautiful one at that! I see those hues of green.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Helen.

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  2. Beverly Crawford says:

    An ambitious Waltmarie, beautifully crafted!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Beverly!

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  3. Portofino says:

    “conning
    my plant eyes. swaying
    with hope…”

    A poem that takes us into a story. Into a mystery, perhaps. Love it!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks 🙂

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  4. Alexander De says:

    This form! I HAVE to try this one! It is a puzzle, a poem with in a poem – intriguing. Love the vision of this – a place reborn. Wonderful!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I hope you do! Glad you enjoyed the poem, Zander.

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  5. Sherry Marr says:

    an intriguing form. I love the green images and the hope.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Sherry.

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  6. Carrie V. H. says:

    Amazing form Lisa! Love the hope that illuminates here! Gorgeous!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Carrie!

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  7. Sadje says:

    As always, a unique take!

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome Li

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  8. Jim says:

    This is a nice double Waltmarie, I recognized it before I read the bottom. I wrote one for Wednesday, once I had a formula figured out it became a fun write. Yours is a fun read.
    ..

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks a lot, Jim, and I agree it’s a fun form to use.

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  9. robtkistner says:

    Well written Lisa, and wonderful use of the form.

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  10. wyndolynne says:

    Loved both poems & thanks for introducing me to this form. Very cool.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much and you’re very welcome 🙂

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  11. Gillena Cox says:

    Very interesting use of the form
    Happy Sunday. Nice wordsmitting.

    Much💗love

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Gillena!

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  12. Ingrid says:

    A great weaving of a poem within a poem, Lisa – and I love all the algal imagery!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ingrid. I channeled the algae 🙂

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  13. earthweal says:

    Deep dive into the fungal mass whose mess we are. I love breathing at this level. – Brendan

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Brendan.

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  14. memadtwo says:

    I love the 2 word poem especially–dispelled, redeemed, reborn. Yes. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thanks, K.

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  15. qbit says:

    “conning
    my plant eyes” — Oooh!! Great!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thanks!

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  16. Susie Clevenger says:

    I’ve never heard of that form, but I can see you have written a beautiful poem with it. Fantastic writing.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Susie, many thanks. It’s a new one for me but one I’m liking.

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  17. Gorgeous use of the form, Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sara, thank you, I’m liking the form a lot.

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