Day 6 — Look Up

Alcmena and the Nephelae

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The form is a rondeau. A Rondeau is a French form, 15 lines long, consisting of three stanzas: a quintet, a quatrain, and a sestet with a rhyme scheme as follows: aabba aabR aabbaR. Lines 9 and 15 are short – a refrain (R) consisting of a phrase taken from line one. The other lines are longer (but all of the same metrical length).

This poem has been the most challenging one to write so far.  It has been a learning experience.  The most important bit learned today is that the rhyming continues from stanza to stanza, so it is best to choose words that have lots of others that rhyme with them.  I liked the first stanza and didn’t change the “a” word to make it easier.  Live and learn!

OctWriPoMo’s prompt for the day was conquered.  Brutish ways conquer through sheer force.  I wanted to present conquering through another way.


We shelter you from Helios,

Tall arched puffs and pink woven swaths.

You watch and think, we simply play.

We Nephelai, keep scorch away.

Ôkeanos’ nymphs, protective joss.


Diaphanous as moonbeam floss,

Our skirts hold rain, from which we toss,

Soaking Gaia keeps drought away,

We shelter you.


When anger comes, oppressive loss,

Sorrow grows large, heart fills with moss,

Nephelai swirl, they dance, they sway.

Eros then hopes he’s asked to stay.

When hurts happen, and pain is boss,

We shelter you.



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4 Comments Add yours

  1. kiwinana says:

    That’s a great form of poetry, I like what you did with it, I haven’t written that form yet, might try it but it looks like a big challenge. Hope you are having a great weekend.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      yes it was. thank you. i kept having to rewrite it and it took a long time. i am enjoying the weekend and learning more about poetry through this challenge

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  2. Cara Hartley says:

    I’m something of a mythology buff, but I didn’t recall these ladies. Thank you for sharing them through your wonderful poem.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      you are welcome. that site i found them at is pretty impressive and very well cross-indexed!


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