Today’s offering is in the following form:
The Blitz Poem, a poetry form created by Robert Keim.
The prompts for today’s OctPoWriMo includes, “If I Were You. Are there things you sometimes need to get off your chest? When was the last time you felt strongly that someone needed to see things from your point of view?”
I’m a 60 year-old woman and you would think by now I’d have this all figured out. It sadly may never be. And that’s OK, even if it hurts.
Attitude and Price
kill the ego
kill the attitude
attitude of over
attitude that maims
maims equal
maims comfort
comfort needed
comfort denied
denied warmth
denied relationship
relationship with mother
relationship with daughter
mother punishes
daughter rejects
rejects old patterns
rejects being played
played against siblings
played as a puppet
puppet for control
puppet wants to be real
real, not puppet
real in your eyes
eyes blinded
eyes empty
empty of caring
empty when rejected
rejected brings evil
rejected brings pain
pain in yearning
pain needs relief
relief in distance
relief in forgetting
forgetting our pattern
forgetting our pattern?
pattern remembered
pattern avoided
avoided means free
avoided means goodbye
goodbye mom
goodbye pain
pain in goodbye
pain of no mother
mother’s arms
mother’s love
love of a parent
love with a price
price of pattern
price non-negotiable
non-negotiable
pattern
Tao Talk 
A beautiful follow up from yesterday’s poem.
You HAVE learnt. Ye, I think, like me, you’re the eternal optimist, hoping maybe they gave up on the toxic patterns…
XO
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i think if i can put that pattern down into words, maybe i can send it to her, and if she can see it, maybe… yes i am an eternal optimist, no matter how much it hurts sometimes
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Well, you just did put it into words, did you not?
I hear you about the eternal optimist part.
Your Mom is probably closer in age to my Gran, and I know some of the things that prevent my Mom from telling her off is 1) she’s the only one she’s got left and 2)she’s so old now, she’s not going to change. A close 3) I believe is that she’s afraid that, if she tells her off, she’ll kill her.
In the mean time, my Gran is slowly killing my Mom with her passive-agressive, shame-on-you ways.
Sigh!
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i think you have a good handle on the dynamics i’m dealing with 🙂
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Yes, unfortunately…
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I feel your pain. Very well expressed.
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it was/is painful yes. thank you
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I found this so raw and moving. Thanks for sharing!
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you’re welcome. thanks for reading
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I really enjoy your work
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thank you, Sam. I really enjoy yours as well 🙂
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It really says everything, and the blitz form brings out the poignance of it all so well.
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thank you i’m glad it got the feeling across
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I am often known for saying this with regards to various things, but “there is something very cyberpunk about this.” Now that is just a feeling, onto more solid impressions: I like how the words repeat a pattern, not just within the context of the form, but also the poem. It illustrates not repeating patterns and the often-present inability to completely break away from them perfectly. So by way of saying what you wanted to say, I believe you have.
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thank you for your kind words. i’m glad it got the message across to you
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