dVerse — quadrille — Waiting Birds Begin to Rise

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Merril is the host of dVerse today. Merril says:

*Write a poem, of any style in 44 words, not including the title. Include the word or derivative of the word, “rise”.

My offering today is a quadrille in triolet form.

Waiting Birds Rise

As northern air grows warm,
Waiting birds begin to rise.
Home, northbound, a million feathers skirt harm.
As northern air grows warm
From traveler to builder, they transform
Sticks to nests, charm their prize;
As northern air grows warm,
Waiting birds begin to rise.

 

40 Comments Add yours

  1. Beautiful! I love the triolet form, but have never seen one that doubled as a Quadrille. Well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thank you Linda. It was an experiment.

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      1. A successful one, I’d say!

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  2. merrildsmith says:

    I agree that it’s impressive to fit a triolet into the constraints of a quadrille. Nicely done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thank you, Merril. It went through some morphs to get there.

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  3. I admire how you managed that! And that bird is a real little balloon 🙂

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  4. Glenn Buttkus says:

    Technical kudos, tamping a functional triolet into a quadrille; niçely done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thanks Glenn, Merril gave me the idea when she said use any form.

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  5. Beverly Crawford says:

    I never tire of the first morning I hear birdsong and know that Spring has arrived. Those tiny harbingers who find their way on the warm winds of Spring to the North are ever a welcome symbol of the end of winter.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I appreciate your poetic feedback, Beverly. They sure are a welcome symbol.

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  6. Very well written! I love how you combined the quadrille and triolet – 2 of my favorite forms!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much!

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  7. ghostmmnc says:

    ooh, I love this poem, Li! It fits right in with the warmth of spring. The Q44 is fun, isn’t it! I haven’t done them in a long time, but should again. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Barbara. I like your nickname for them: Q44.

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  8. lynn__ says:

    Exquisitely written, Jade! Paired with a beautiful watercolor too.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks Lynn!

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  9. Mish says:

    Wow…a nice combination of triolet and quadrille. It is so uplifting to finally hear the birds singing. I think I can safely say that Spring is here.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank goodness. I’m listening to many many peepers right now. When the snow came last week, I prayed the cold didn’t kill them.

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  10. You’re in fine form. It really works. I see and hear those birds!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      ❤ I'm glad.

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  11. robtkistner says:

    That was wonderful Jade! I have not written a triolet since the days of Poetry Thursday years ago. I like this turn back in content…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Rob. I went to shadowpoetry.com and scrabbled to find a form I could do in 44 words and that one worked.

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  12. Truedessa says:

    I haven’t written in this form in a while, you did a wonderful job with the word restraint. The birds have been very busy around here.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Trudessa.

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  13. rothpoetry says:

    I like your repetition here and the progression from traveler to builder1 Very nice!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Dwight. The poor birds, not enough they have to fly thousands of miles to get home, then they have to get started building a home — year after year! Us humans have it easy compared to them.

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  14. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice line: “Sticks to nests, charm their prize;”

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Frank!

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  15. What a lovely Triolet Jade!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you Linda 🙂

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  16. Impressive poetic crafting skills there! The repetition of “Norhtern air grows warm” highlights the fact that the change of seasons affects our flora and fauna.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Very much appreciating your feedback, thank you.

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  17. What a lovely variation on the triolet… and the bird is such a sweetie.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Bjorn. Glad you liked the bird 🙂

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  18. rivrvlogr says:

    There’s a nice peaceful feel to this.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ken, glad you got that from it.

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  19. pvcann says:

    I really enjoyed this Jade, just delightful and refreshing.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you and glad you enjoyed it, Paul.

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