Merril is the host of dVerse today. Merril says:
*Write a poem, of any style in 44 words, not including the title. Include the word or derivative of the word, “rise”.
My offering today is a quadrille in triolet form.
Waiting Birds Rise
As northern air grows warm,
Waiting birds begin to rise.
Home, northbound, a million feathers skirt harm.
As northern air grows warm
From traveler to builder, they transform
Sticks to nests, charm their prize;
As northern air grows warm,
Waiting birds begin to rise.
Beautiful! I love the triolet form, but have never seen one that doubled as a Quadrille. Well done.
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🙂 Thank you Linda. It was an experiment.
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A successful one, I’d say!
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I agree that it’s impressive to fit a triolet into the constraints of a quadrille. Nicely done!
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🙂 Thank you, Merril. It went through some morphs to get there.
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I admire how you managed that! And that bird is a real little balloon 🙂
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Technical kudos, tamping a functional triolet into a quadrille; niçely done.
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🙂 Thanks Glenn, Merril gave me the idea when she said use any form.
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I never tire of the first morning I hear birdsong and know that Spring has arrived. Those tiny harbingers who find their way on the warm winds of Spring to the North are ever a welcome symbol of the end of winter.
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I appreciate your poetic feedback, Beverly. They sure are a welcome symbol.
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Very well written! I love how you combined the quadrille and triolet – 2 of my favorite forms!
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Thank you very much!
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ooh, I love this poem, Li! It fits right in with the warmth of spring. The Q44 is fun, isn’t it! I haven’t done them in a long time, but should again. 🙂
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Thanks, Barbara. I like your nickname for them: Q44.
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Exquisitely written, Jade! Paired with a beautiful watercolor too.
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Thanks Lynn!
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Wow…a nice combination of triolet and quadrille. It is so uplifting to finally hear the birds singing. I think I can safely say that Spring is here.
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Thank goodness. I’m listening to many many peepers right now. When the snow came last week, I prayed the cold didn’t kill them.
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You’re in fine form. It really works. I see and hear those birds!
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❤ I'm glad.
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That was wonderful Jade! I have not written a triolet since the days of Poetry Thursday years ago. I like this turn back in content…
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Thank you, Rob. I went to shadowpoetry.com and scrabbled to find a form I could do in 44 words and that one worked.
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I haven’t written in this form in a while, you did a wonderful job with the word restraint. The birds have been very busy around here.
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Thank you very much, Trudessa.
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I like your repetition here and the progression from traveler to builder1 Very nice!
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Thank you very much, Dwight. The poor birds, not enough they have to fly thousands of miles to get home, then they have to get started building a home — year after year! Us humans have it easy compared to them.
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Nice line: “Sticks to nests, charm their prize;”
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Thank you, Frank!
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What a lovely Triolet Jade!
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Thank you Linda 🙂
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Impressive poetic crafting skills there! The repetition of “Norhtern air grows warm” highlights the fact that the change of seasons affects our flora and fauna.
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Very much appreciating your feedback, thank you.
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What a lovely variation on the triolet… and the bird is such a sweetie.
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Thank you very much, Bjorn. Glad you liked the bird 🙂
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There’s a nice peaceful feel to this.
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Thank you, Ken, glad you got that from it.
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I really enjoyed this Jade, just delightful and refreshing.
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Thank you and glad you enjoyed it, Paul.
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