dVerse has us writing lai and lai nouveaux form poems for a month. This is my second lai, which is wordplay for lai=lie.
When asked to write lais
Inhale, then big sighs —
For real?
With truth, my heart lies,
Its pathway is wise
I feel.
With poems words rise —
Truth or lie, its prize
revealed.
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Another good lai!! Well done Lisa 🙂
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It was spurred from our exchange on yours a day or so ago. Thanks Christine :)
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Encouragement certainly pushes us doesn’t it? I think you have found a new favorite 🙂
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anything without meter is a friend of mine
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🙂💕👍
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Nice. I accidentally put three syllables into each of my b lines
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well you have 2 choices, edit or not.
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Thanks I’ve edited it.
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Just read it, it really gets the point across.
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Thanks
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YW
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Not easy to do … the lai is a challenge to get fine.
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I always like a little ambiguity in the sounds of words–I hadn’t even thought of lai/lie, but you used it well. (K)
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Thank you again!
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It’s a trickster of a form, that’s for sure. I got a chuckle out of your wordplay. :)
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Thank you, Barry :) Trickster is a good term for it!
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So very true!
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Hmmm, this one is tricky for me to get a meaning out of — to vague for my somewhat analytic mind. I love the picture of the fish — did you do that????? Very nice.
The first three lines are obvious, a few folks wrote anti-lai rebellion lines. Did I hear someone say that “lai” in French is pronounced like the English word “lay” — if so, the rhyme police may be showing up soon. Smile.
Ah , the second line, I see that you are saying “My heart abides with truth” — at first I thought of “to tell a lie”. Got it — but not sure how this relates to the first 3 lines. So, I move on.
Third stanza, that is what I don’t get. And as I read the comments so far, no one writes anything that points toward your meaning. Wonder if they got it. Are you saying that only truth-speaking poems should be prized, or that …. hmmm, no other guesses.
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Yes on the picture, but I only colored it, not drew it. I do one coloring a day, with music, on my blog. I lai/lie, not lai/lay, rhyme police be damned. Tomato/tomato defense. The third line, which is:
With poems words rise —
Truth or lie, its prize
revealed.
It doesn’t matter if a poem is true (literally) or a lie (a formed reality) as long as the meaning/intent rises with the words and can be understood. The 3rd stanza stands alone, but it is also connected to the first two because it’s arguing the merits of truth and lais/lies.
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Ahhhh, truth or lie, fact or fiction, intent is what matters. Got it. Thanx
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You are welcome.
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Well done! By the way, I Googled pronunciation and a video voice told me it’s lie (lai). That solves that, at least. I took another stab at it, but ended with couplets not rhyming and too many syllables here and there. Allowing myself that largess, however, I actually had a bit of fun.
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Thank you, Beverly. Glad you got the clarification of pronunciation, will check yours out soon.
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Hi Jade! Nice to read your poem. I’m trying to get into some creative writing. I love your coloring. I’ll try to write a poem soon.
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Thanks on my poem and coloring. I look forward to reading it. Creative writing is like chicken soup for the soul to a lot of people.
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Truth or lie, only the poet or writer knows. Thanks for the stab at the lai form.
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:) Thank you, Grace.
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Excellent Jade, love it.
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Thanks Paul. The wordplay is fun with these lais.
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Sure is.
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I like the association of “lais” with “lies”.
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Thank you, Frank :)
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