#FF — Excess


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Blanche’s predilections were closing in. She’d had them under control until she met Cushman. Cushman’s addictive personality was contagious, and soon she was infected. Spending with plastic at overpriced boutiques, gorging on junk food with wild abandon, riding everywhere in a limousine, Tinder trios and EDM clubs seven nights a week; her Puritan sensibilities drove her guilt into toxic overdrive.

Cushman was Blanche’s biggest addiction. He had to go. She tried to kick him a couple of times but relapsed. Cushman was in her life for good, unless…

Dr. Lo positioned the orbitoclast on her temple and raised the mallet.

 

 

 

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the illustrious host of Friday Fictioneers.

65 Comments Add yours

  1. Dear Lisa,

    That ending made me cringe. Doesn’t seem like a viable solution to me.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Rochelle, me neither. The character is desperate and desperate people often do desperate things. Thank you for reading and commenting.
      Sincerely,
      Lisa

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  2. Neil MacDonald's avatar neilmacdon says:

    An excessive solution to a problem of excess

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Exactly, Neil!

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  3. ceayr's avatar ceayr says:

    Eeeyow!
    A bit drastic…

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Indeed. Thank you for your comment.

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  4. michael's avatar michael says:

    I enjoyed the flow of this, but Dr Lo sounds dangerous to me.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Michael. It’s chilling to think this used to be considered a viable option for anything healthy.

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  5. Doctor Lo sounds a little like Doctor Freeman. “I cured Rose Kennedy of her waywardness,” he claimed, driving his Lobotomobile from town to town. Well done.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      OMG, J, are you serious about the Lobotomobile?? Trying to understand how this reality fits into sanity. Thank you very much for your comment.

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  6. Iain Kelly's avatar Iain Kelly says:

    An extreme solution, not sure it’s the way to go. Besides, sounds like she was having a blast anyway with Cushman! :-)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Just like The Narrator and Tyler Durden in Fight Club. Maybe they’ll blow up a skyscraper next! ;)

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  7. 4963andypop's avatar 4963andypop says:

    Disturbing the things that sometimes pass for medicine.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      History is filled with a House of Horrors that pass for cures. Fortunately much of it is in the past, but unfortunately not all of it is. Thank you for reading and commenting.

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  8. I have had several lobotomy procedures performed on me and I never enjoyed any of them.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      I hope and pray you are joking, Jim!

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  9. Badfinger (Max)'s avatar badfinger20 says:

    There is the ending I was looking for! Of course not in real life but that came out of nowhere. I liked it.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Good, I’m glad you weren’t expecting it!

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      1. Badfinger (Max)'s avatar badfinger20 says:

        Everyone is going to think I’m sick lol but I love those endings!

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        1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

          Well I have to be sick to write them, so we are in the same boat. I have to wonder about writers who are known for horror, like King and Rice. Where do they get their ideas from?

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          1. Badfinger (Max)'s avatar badfinger20 says:

            Glad to share the boat with you.
            I wonder about King…his childhood was different…I read where a kid he knew got killed by a train that hit him…sounds like Stand By Me

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            1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

              Interesting. Trauma does do things to the mind.

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  10. Irene's avatar Irene says:

    No, Blanche! Switch doctors right now!!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Too late. Blanche doesn’t remember Cushman — or her own name — anymore :(

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      1. Irene's avatar Irene says:

        😲 yikes, poor Blanche!

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  11. Christ, I had to googlee that one! I’d rather have a bottle in front of me than a full frontal lobotomy.
    Great stuff

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      You and me both, Shrawley! Cheers!

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  12. Dale's avatar Dale says:

    Dr. Lo seems a “tad” excessive… Methinks we should try therapy first? ;-)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Methinks you’re right. Thanks for reading and commenting, Dale :)

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  13. Abhijit Ray's avatar Abhijit Ray says:

    Alas! Blanche may never see Cushman again. Her good days are probably going to be over.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      I fear you are correct.

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  14. plaridel's avatar plaridel says:

    it was an ending i didn’t expect. i find the action of the doctor very suspicious. :)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Lots of that kind of suspicious activity used to be going on with doctors — and still is!

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  15. draliman's avatar draliman says:

    Eek! Maybe a self-help group might have been a less extreme place to start…

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      I think so also. Maybe Blanch had some soul searching to do instead of turning it over to a ghoul to fix.

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  16. Carol anne's avatar Carol Anne says:

    Awesome! Your talented!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks Carol :)

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  17. She needs to find some better friends and a better psychiatrist. Kicking Cushman to the curb is a wiser plan than getting a lobotomy.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      All better options than the excessive one she chose, you’re right! Maybe Cushman is the real her and she just needs to get him under control?

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  18. GHLearner's avatar gahlearner says:

    Ouch, that was drastic. I didn’t see it coming.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks for reading and commenting :)

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  19. well, ouch. That kind of therapy seems to cause physical pain!

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  20. pennygadd51's avatar pennygadd51 says:

    Guilt does very strange things to people. You hint that it was her guilt that drove her to such a drastic action, and I think you’re probably right. She felt she deserved horror as a punishment or expiation of her ‘sin’.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Exactly, Penny. She had been conditioned that fun was wrong, so when a part of herself decided to have too much fun…

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  21. pennygadd51's avatar pennygadd51 says:

    Guilt does very strange things to people. You hint that it was her guilt that drove her to such a drastic action, and I think you’re probably right. She felt she deserved horror as a punishment or expiation of her ‘sin’.

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  22. She IS desperate to get rid of her addiction. Drastic measures, for sure.
    Isadora 😎

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks for reading and commenting, Isadora.

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  23. Oooo. Shocking way to release an obsession.

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  24. Dr Lo may be the answer. It’s worth a try. That or self-restraint.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Blanch needs to sort a few things out, for sure.

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  25. If she goes through with that procedure she’ll get rid of much more than Cushman. I hope she prepaid for a room at a nice sanitarium where she can spend the rest of her days. A good story with building tension, Jade. —- Suzanne

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you for your thoughtful comment, Suzanne. I don’t think getting rid of Cushman is the answer.

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  26. James McEwan's avatar James McEwan says:

    Addiction, if all else fails the mallet to the head will do the trick. A bit drastic but effective.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      I’m sure to an addict it feels that way sometimes.

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  27. Mags's avatar magarisa says:

    Whoa, what an extreme measure to take! Sounds like a desperate last resort. I suppose she must’ve taken all sorts of medication and gone through lots of therapy, to no avail.
    Your story’s reference to lobotomy made me think of the one Rosemary Kennedy underwent, leaving her unable to care for herself for the rest of her life.
    A good build-up of tension in this story.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Magarisa, I don’t know her whole story, I just know she had reached a point where she was willing to do whatever it took to make it stop. As she was a creature of excess, she chose an extreme remedy :(

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      1. Mags's avatar magarisa says:

        She certainly seems to be prone to extremes, so that would make sense. A fascinating character.

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        1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

          Thank you :)

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          1. Mags's avatar magarisa says:

            You’re welcome, Li. :-)

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  28. Laurie Bell's avatar Laurie Bell says:

    That is certainly an extreme reaction. Ouch

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      The story is a study in excess, isn’t it. Thanks for reading and commenting, Laurie.

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  29. Nobbinmaug's avatar Nobbinmaug says:

    Hold the mallet, please. Minus the junk food, it doesn’t seem like such a bad life for the short term. Though, I can see why it’s not sustainable long term, and why she would want out. Addiction is a horrible, dangerous thing. Then again, mallets can be, too.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      You are a kind soul, thank you. She may reconsider :)

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  30. Alice Audrey's avatar Alice Audrey says:

    That measure might be a little to drastic.

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