“Trust N Love” by Mallika Batra
Edited for next to last line word length:
A question of trust
Trust is like knowing each day brings weather.
Mistrust, never knowing what it will be.
Trust soothes like light brushes with a feather.
Mistrust, combo poison ivy and fleas.
Thanking stars or cursed, I’m brought to my knees.
Is it taught, is it learned, this thing called trust?
Through observing? Receiving? I’m nonplussed.
Is it either-or? Worth the consider?
Would it feel like being hocus-pocused?
Conclude: no space in my heart for fibbers.
Original:
A question of trust
Trust is like knowing each day brings weather.
Mistrust, never knowing what it will be.
Trust soothes like light brushes with a feather.
Mistrust, combo poison ivy and fleas.
Thanking stars or cursed, I’m brought to my knees.
Is it taught, is it learned, this thing called trust?
Through observing? Receiving? I’m nonplussed.
Is it either-or? Worth the consider?
Or it’d feel like being hocus-pocused?
Conclude: no space in my heart for fibbers.
Frank is today’s host for dVerse, where he talks about the finer points of the dizain form.
Tao Talk 
Good observation of caution about fibbers.
Nice lines: “Mistrust, combo poison ivy and fleas.
Thanking stars or cursed, I’m brought to my knees”
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Thank you, Frank 🙂
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Difficult concept Lisa, this thing called trust. Not easy to give, impossible to take. All one can do is stand in the possibility, and hope it’s present. Like the pic! 🙂
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I like the way you put it, Rob. Glad you like the pic and think it is good for showing trust.
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Nice use of the form; loved the Billy Joel video; he sounded a lot like Bruce Springsteen in this one. Trust is always a slippery slope. Thanks for your wonderful comment over at my blog.
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Glenn, glad you liked the dizain and the slippery slope is something I’m tired of trying to climb. Yes, Billy Joel outdid himself with this song and the video is superb (always has to be one naysayer in the crowd! lol) You are very welcome on the comment.
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For me, trust is earned, slowly but surely. Mistrust is poison. I like your concluding line:
Conclude: no space in my heart for fibbers.
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Yes, with time-tested validation on trust. I don’t like to mistrust but sometimes have no choice. How does one avoid the poison? Thank you for reading and your thoughtful comment, Grace.
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Trust, once lost, never comes back. I would like to be trustful, but as you point out, experience makes it hard. (K)
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Can’t argue with the message, and I enjoyed the creative, fun use of language to fit the demands of the form. (I read second-last line as being one syllable too long.)
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Thank you for the feedback, Rosemary. I did try to lighten it up a little from the usual poem on relationships. Maybe I’m healing? About the extra syllable, I know that “it’d” can sound like two syllables but I checked multiple dictionary websites and they all said one.
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Rosemary, I edited that last line on the poem but kept the original just below it.
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Thanks, Jade. I hadn’t realised that the elision would be regarded as one syllable; my apologies. However, I’m glad you changed it as I think the new line works even better. It flows better, don’t you think? And what you are saying in that line seems to me even clearer now. I think this poem well worth the extra work.
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Rosemary, after I changed it I wondered why I hadn’t said it the changed way initially. Yes, it is clearer for meaning and flow. Thank you for your guidance ❤
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I am so glad, during this challenge, to have become better acquainted with your lovely poetry, Jade.
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❤ 🙂 Thank you very much, Rosemary.
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