dVerse — Lost in Translation — Twisted

Image result for hell painting
“Heaven and Hell” by Sergio Arcos

I am choosing the first poem, by Desanka Maksimović, to interpret. Desanka’s poem:

Migratory Birds

Through night and moisture
wild geese go south
crying in painful glory.

I feel like writing
a dark story:
Them carrying away
on their two white wings
I don’t know where,
I don’t know what
of my soul’s dearest things.

 

My interpretation:

Twisted

Warped by foul globe’s spin,
I wail I’m alive even as I bleed out.
My soul travels to new places…
Into a dark crevasse, blind,
Mind twisted vine,
Unsure whether to crawl
Up or down
A dreamless sleep.

 

 

Laura is the host of dVerse today.  Laura says:
The Poetics Challenge here is to select ONE of the poems and write your own interpretation – what the poem conjures for you, what personal feelings it touches on. You may want to use the title or make use of some of the words or just try to keep the flavour of the poem.  After all, the originals were not in English – but that is the point – we can get lost in the translation!

29 Comments Add yours

  1. I love how you found your migration in that sleep… soon going to find my wings of dreams.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Bjorn, and may you glide on warm currents as you do.

      Like

  2. wow! this is almost a dark night of the soul carried on night migratory wings – thank you for joining in with the prompt

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Laura and thank you for the prompt.

      Liked by 1 person

  3. Beverly Crawford says:

    You went to a dark place with this one. Eloquently hopeless!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Beverly. To me, the first stanza sets a dark tone and the rest emphasizes it.

      Like

  4. Lisa, this is brilliant! Very well done. 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Susan, thank you so much.

      Like

  5. Beautiful with its darkness!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks Linda.

      Liked by 1 person

  6. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    I love any poem with “crevasse” in it.I like it when you turn to the dark side.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      I almost misspelled it! Glad you understand about the dark side.

      Like

  7. calmkate says:

    like it, topical with our climate change it does impact our psyche!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Kate.

      Liked by 1 person

  8. robtkistner says:

    Powerful interpretation LISA, and you hit right to the essence — excellent!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Rob, thank you for seeing it.

      Like

  9. memadtwo says:

    You’ve captured the atmosphere of the poem. (K)

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, K. That part about the wings carrying away things filled me with dread.

      Liked by 1 person

  10. rothpoetry says:

    I love your dark story of a twisted dreams! The geese will carry it away with their honking in the morning light!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      lol something like that. Let’s hope.

      Liked by 1 person

  11. Excellent! Our mind can certainly take us to dark places.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      This was my interpretation of the poem, but you’re right my mind doesn’t need much encouragement.

      Liked by 1 person

  12. kim881 says:

    I am familiar with migration in dreamless sleep and the uncertainty of whether to crawl up or down that mind-twisted vine. You’ve captured it well, Jade!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for the compliment, Kim. I’m sorry you’re familiar with it.

      Liked by 1 person

  13. pvcann says:

    I especially like “my soul travels to new places.” ever seeking, ever becoming.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      I wondered what you would think about this one.

      Liked by 1 person

  14. rothpoetry says:

    I really like this! …I am alive as I bleed out;;;; great image!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks Dwight 🙂

      Liked by 1 person

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.