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#Haikai Challenge #106 — Rosh Hashanah

Remembering when
God’s rough forms joined the world stage
Two breathed one air.
Clear the head.
Set the tone.
Celebrate!
Toot horns!
Eat! Drink! Pray!

Frank Tassone is the host of Haikai Challenge.  Frank says:
Let’s say “Shana Tovah!” to our Jewish brothers and sisters this week. Write the haikai poem (haiku, senryu, haibun, tanka, haiga, renga, etc.) of your choice that alludes to Rosh Hashanah!

I chose to write a tanka, where shadowpoetry indicated one form it could take is a poem of 31 syllables or less, with no set number of syllables per line.  If this is not right, someone please let me know, thank you.

image link is here

13 thoughts on “#Haikai Challenge #106 — Rosh Hashanah

  1. While tanka traditionally have been translated into English using five lines, I do like the celebratory spirit of presence evident in your poem. The standard 5/7/5/7/7/ syllable count add up to 31; however, I’m not a fan of strict syllable counting. Japanese on are shorter than English syllable, so 5/7/5/7/7/ tend to run too long, anyway. Beautiful work, Jade! Thanks for sharing!

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  2. I think there are many definitions a currently acceptable in the transliteration of haiku and other various Japanese style inspired poetry. So that not one is the correct one, and in poetry why does there have to be?

    Lovely sentiments and I really like that illustration.
    So I say – well done!

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  3. Jules thank you much for the validation and the poetry philosophy. I like free form but like forms also. Japanese style inspired poetry is something I hope to get better at over time (along with all the rest of poetry!)

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