dVerse — Haibun Monday 94 — Summer Storm

The afternoon was sunny but the sky was a different cast of yellow than usual. The shade of yellow that portends a storm, weak with an orange-y shade of green to it. All there was to do was wait. There in the distance, a deep rumbling, as a bear or a dinosaur might make when it rises from a nap and begins to move.

Like an eyelid closing the grey was pulled over the sky. The rumbling grew louder, accompanied by day twinkles of lightning flash. From the west they came, the lumbering dark grey clouds, inked with black.

The sky now echoing with thunder and flashing with lightning, the clouds picked up speed and the heavy sheets of rain soaked everything below them. The closer they came the heavier and louder the sound of the water pouring out of the gutter and filling buckets put outside to catch water for the houseplants.

I stood out under the carport and watched the storm move over and eastward, inland. Soon all that was left of it was refreshed air, worms stretched on the driveway, and puddles.

Summer afternoon
weather’s traveling circus –
birds wait in the trees.

Kim is today’s host for dVerse‘ Haibun Monday. Kim says:
This week, I would like you to write about a time when you last watched stars, a storm, the sea, an animal, or something else in nature that left you with a sense of wonder or awe. Aim to write no more than three tight paragraphs, followed by a traditional haiku that includes reference to a season.

34 Comments Add yours

  1. A thunderstorm can be amazing when you watch it from a safe and dry spot… love the way it feels afterwards as well

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, this was a beautiful one to watch.

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  2. merrildsmith says:

    I like the image of the eyelid closing on the sky. It’s amazing to watch a thunderstorm rolling in–as Björn says when you feel safe. And I love clean air smell afterwards, too (when it doesn’t go back to summer stickiness right away).

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  3. Lucy says:

    So very vivid!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Lucy 🙂

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  4. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    You had me right there alongside you, so vivid and visceral. We get those summer thunder storms too, but the high winds bring down trees and cause power outages.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glenn, we get those kind also. This was one of the more gentle ones without much wind.

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  5. Ingrid says:

    That certainly looks like quite a storm! I love how you describe it like a lumbering beast, heard from far off to eventually come crashing in and just as quickly leave again.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ingrid. That’s just how it felt!

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  6. sanaarizvi says:

    “Like an eyelid closing the grey was pulled over the sky. The rumbling grew louder, accompanied by day twinkles of lightning flash,”…. sigh … Your haibun reminded me of the thunderstorms we had here during June-July! 💝 Love how you describe it 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sanaa, many thanks and glad you connect with the experience 🙂

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  7. calmkate says:

    wow Lisa you really captured the seasonal sensations vividly … reminds me of watching the big storms roll in from over the sea. Your analogies of slumbering bear or dinosaur awakening really appeals!

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  8. Beverly Crawford says:

    I’ve always loved to watch storms (from a safe place, of course). Our thunderstorms in the midwest can be awesome, but the fresh wonderful smell after they’ve power washed the air is marvelous.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes indeed 🙂

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  9. Ron. says:

    Carport / observation deck. Great write, Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ron!

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  10. rothpoetry says:

    Summer storms put on quite a show. A traveling circus indeed!! Very good haibun Lisa. You were hanging with the birds!!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes they do. Thanks, and yes I was!

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  11. Sadje says:

    Your last paragraph reminded me of similar scenes after a summer cloud burst. Very well portrayed Li

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje!

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  12. That’s how it feels sometimes, a show just for our benefit!

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  13. Francis says:

    Vert atmospheric, you’ve captured this well. I love the smell of tarmac after summer rain.

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  14. kim881 says:

    You captured that yellow that comes become a storm, Lisa (I call it nicotine yellow), it is indeed a portent and one that demands to be noticed. I love the way you describe the deep rumbling ‘as a bear or a dinosaur might make when it rises from a nap and begins to move’, and the simile ‘like an eyelid closing’ is perfect for the image in your video. I also love the way you bring the storm to a climax, with the thunder and lightning, the clouds picking up speed and the water pouring out of the gutter. I know I shouldn’t, at least until our roof is fixed, but I long for an exciting summer storm like that!

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  15. M Jay Dixit says:

    I too like the summer storms very much as long as I am in the safety of my home, haha. “Like an eyelid closing the grey was pulled over the sky” This was superb!

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  16. memadtwo says:

    Your words gather momentum like the storm and the haiku returns us to a world washed clean. Well done. (K)

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  17. Dale says:

    I love watching a summer storm come in (when I’m protected, of course!) I was right there with you, Lisa.

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  18. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    I love those thunderstorms UNLESS…they cause power outage…I’m selfish that way. You can feel and smell the rain sometimes and I love it.

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  19. Dave says:

    Same here, I love watching thunderstorms as long as I’m inside or in a car. We got ’em forecast for tonight!

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  20. Helen Dehner says:

    I am a HUGE fan of thunderstorms … the description in your prose poem is stunning .. I felt as though I was standing next to you. Great job.

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  21. Gillena Cox says:

    You took us there. Very vividly described

    Much🖤love

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  22. “Like an eyelid closing the grey was pulled over the sky. The rumbling grew louder, accompanied by day twinkles of lightning flash. From the west they came, the lumbering dark grey clouds, inked with black.”

    I love the analogy of an eyelid closing. Gorgeous, descriptive haibun, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sara, glad you enjoyed the poem, thank you.

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