dVerse — OLN 280 — Ask not…

Moth Digital Art - Like a Moth to a Flame by Daniel Eskridge

Ask no questions of the moth in the candle flame
–Attar

A lowly larvae at the start,
she crawls and eats from forest floor.
Machinic munching, Darwin’s art,
yet lonely larvae’s yearning starts.

An ache that niggles in her heart,
she weaves a pod — she senses more.
Transformed, no longer bound to earth
Consuming need, to heaven soars.

She pirouettes in heat’s delight
Confusing candle for the moon
Oblivious, wings’ dust ignites
She dips in dying spiraled swoon.

Hush, child,” sings Luna’s silver light.
Rest now, be still, rise to me soon.”
Antennae twitch as dreams take flight
Wrapped safe in kindness’ warm cocoon.

 

This one is a double modified triolet using one of Laura’s wonderful, mystical prompt lines.
Image:  “Like a Moth to a Flame,” by Daniel Eskridge
Bjorn is today’s host for dVerse‘ Open Link Night.

 

47 Comments Add yours

  1. Love this story … flying too high is better done dreaming than for real…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Kindness beats heat hands down. Thank you, Bjorn. Hoping I didn’t sound too horrible reading. My throat got tight. Maybe next time will practice ahead of time and not think about all of those ears listening.

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  2. Lucy says:

    Quite a beautiful, captivating poem. It was wonderful to hear you read it!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Lucy. Wish I could have heard you read yours. Maybe next time!

      Liked by 1 person

  3. erbiage says:

    The moth gets to that moon one way or another.

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  4. sanaarizvi says:

    Love this! It was wonderful to hear you read this aloud at the LIVE event, Lisa 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sanaa thank you very much. It worked much better for quality with just the sound.

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  5. Ron. Lavalette says:

    I could hear you again as I read & re-enjoyed it immensely. Thanks for sharing, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Ron, thank you very much. It was fun hearing your recite your tongue-twisting poem today.

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  6. memadtwo says:

    Another poetic form that weaves a circle. The final stanza is like a lullaby. (K)

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  7. Sadje says:

    Another beautiful poem Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, my friend.

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome 😉

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  8. Max says:

    Lovely poetic form! Such a reassuring message: even through misadventure and adversity we may reach our mystic goal. Thanks for this, I really like it.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thank you.

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  9. rivrvlogr says:

    This is a wonderful story, giving loving detail to such a short life.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ken.

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  10. 3 thoughts:

    1) WOW!
    2) I love the word ‘niggle’ 😀
    3) This was, for me, surprisingly positive at the end! My moth is definitely jealous of your moth!

    Yours,
    David

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Laughing at your enumerated list. I like the idea of the moth surviving its dance with death. I like your wicking moth that burns so bright.

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  11. Chris Hall says:

    Lovely, Li. Poetry should be read out loud! I’ll have to see if I can catch the live readings.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you! My reading is not good (need more practice) but there are some excellent readings by others this week. Chris, this should take you to the dVerse channel:
      https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCnHL41yjLUnOwdUlcy5VUWg

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      1. Chris Hall says:

        Thanks so much for the link, Li. That was awesome! What a fantastic idea; I shall follow with interest.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          My pleasure, Chris!

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  12. Smita says:

    What a beautiful craft. Loved the story.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Smita.

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  13. The moth and the candle flame, so old and mysterious. Like the moon, same vein. I like how you wrap them all together in mystery.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      It has all of the makings of a Hallmark special 😉

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  14. kim881 says:

    I’m so glad we got to hear you reading this poem at OLN Live, Lisa! No longer a silent circle on the screen. This is a magical story of an ephemeral creature. I love the thought of that transformation, ‘no longer bound to earth / Consuming need, to heaven soars’, but how sad the ending, even though we know that’s what happens.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, finally, after several tries, it felt good but a little nerve-wracking to be able to read. It can only get better, right? I didn’t intend this to be a sad ending, more a new beginning. She’s fine, in her cocoon of kindness now.

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  15. Ingrid says:

    This reads like a lullaby for the moth drawn to the light. It was wonderful to hear you read, Lisa. I’m glad she found a peaceful place to rest.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Ingrid, thanks, yes, she did 🙂

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  16. Lona Gynt says:

    I feel compassion in this lovely poem. We can judge, or we can recognize that the quest fro what draws or desires us may consume us. Was it better to stay the machine on the forest floor? this is kind Lisa

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I’m glad you see what I was trying to say, Lona. Thank you.

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  17. merrildsmith says:

    This is lovely, and I so enjoyed hearing you read it. I like narrative of this–the moth drawn to the flame, and the moon’s tender message.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Merril. Slow to adjusting to new things, maybe more reading will improve it over time. Glad you enjoyed the narrative 🙂

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      1. merrildsmith says:

        You’re welcome, and I did. 😀

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  18. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    I chose that quote too, but got enmeshed in metaphysical meanderings. I like it you stuck to the moth metaphor. My goodness, “a double-modified troilet.”
    I can hardly say it, and couldn’t do it; kudos.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thank you, Glenn.

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  19. kaykuala h says:

    Transformed, no longer bound to earth
    Consuming need, to heaven soars.

    Success is achieved when properly nurtured as possibilities are endless! Wise words Jade!

    Hank

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Hank.

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  20. The ending is nicely done, “Antennae twitch as dreams take flight, Wrapped safe in kindness’ warm cocoon.” That’s how I would want to go if I were a moth! I think the Moon’s loving words do pair well with Attar’s quote to “ask no questions” there is no judgement for mistakes, only love here. Sorry I missed the live readings, it was fun hearing your voice, I love to hear the accents from all over. I will try to be on the next one! ✨

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks for the wonderful feedback and really hope to hear you read at the next live event.

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  21. Colleen@ LOOSELEAFNOTES says:

    Such an inspiration. Love the niggles and antennae twitch.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Colleen!

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