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Outside My Door

The driveway’s wet sloping back ends
at a green-fringed white-crystalled skirt
that traps tantalizing fragrance within
its folds. Trauma-stilled, crunchy steps
imprint on a swollen body that one day
will melt away to nothing but mud.

 

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Grace is today’s host for dVerse’ Poetics. Grace says:
The Writing Challenge: Write a poem utilizing either Personification (giving human characteristics to objects, animals, or ideas) or Imagery (appealing to the senses). If you want to combined these poetic devices in one poem, its also okay.

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  1. Ingrid says:

    A stark warning in your poem here, Lisa. Or is it too late for warnings? I feel like I’m about to fall just looking at that ice!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Ingrid, good call!

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  2. hanspostcard says:

    that photo makes me wish for spring!

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  3. sanaarizvi says:

    This is chilling, Lisa! It is and can be extremely dangerous if one is not careful 😮

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes it helps to know what the temp is before stepping on it. I also use the birdbath and the gutter to tell me how cold it is out there. If it’s dripping I’m safe.

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  4. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    Your imagery is stark, chilly, and pugnacious, embracing olfactory and visual clues; nice job.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I’m glad you picked up on the pugnaciousness. How dare the snow trap all of the wonderful smells that spring, summer, and fall hold.

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  5. calmkate says:

    a chilling warning, nice personification!

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  6. Ron. says:

    Succinctly wonderful work, Lisa. Nailed the prompt fer sure.

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  7. Beverly Crawford says:

    Brrr! I’d be pugnacious too. This is an accident waiting to happen.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks Beverly!

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  8. Grace says:

    You painted a scary and chilling imagery of that chilly ice. I have fallen on one so I know it can be dangerous.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      And the older one gets the more dangerous it is!

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  9. kaykuala h says:

    a swollen body that one day
    will melt away to nothing but mud

    They’ll end the way as expected without impinging on any others. Short and sweet, Jade!

    Hank

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Just like a snow(wo)man 🙂

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  10. -Eugenia says:

    Wow! Gelid imagery making a point in short order, Lisa!

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  11. Sadje says:

    You’ve the gift of giving voice to inanimate objects. Well done. One should really be careful here

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  12. rothpoetry says:

    I love your picture and your poem. The swollen body of snow is a great image…. all eventually turning to mud … just like us! :>)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Dwight. Indeed!

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      1. rothpoetry says:

        you are welcome!

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  13. memadtwo says:

    What beautiful patterns! Look, don’t touch I’d say. (K)

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  14. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    I really like green-fringed white-crystalled skirt… good line Lisa

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Max, thank you and glad you like it 🙂

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      1. badfinger20 (Max) says:

        Automatically I think…”She had a green-fringed-white crystalled skirt”… I’ve never seen one but I now know what one would look like. That is a sign of a great description line.

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  15. theresaly520 says:

    This is fantastic! tantalizing fragrance within its folds… really enjoyed all of these phrases.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sa, thank you and glad you enjoyed them 🙂

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  16. kim881 says:

    I am glad your driveway is dressed, Lisa, in this chilly poem, and the use of alliteration in ‘traps tantalizing fragrance within its folds’, creates a crisp, fresh atmosphere. I feel sorry for its ‘swollen body that one day will melt away to nothing but mud’, which has a touch of crime scene.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for your perspective on this and fresh atmosphere is good. I like watching how the temperatures affect the snow’s shape and texture.

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  17. Trauma-stilled, crunchy steps

    I literally shivered when I read this line, Lisa 🥶

    You conveyed the sensations perfectly to me!

    Shabbat shalom,
    David

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    1. msjadeli says:

      David, glad you connected with the line.
      Shalom,
      Lisa

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  18. I hope the ‘swollen body’ really is just poetic licence!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Maybe that’s what makes the strawberries grow so well in the not a bubble bath?

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  19. Helen Dehner says:

    Your poem packed quite a punch ~~ well done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Helen, thank you 🙂

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  20. Mortality here. Along with the mortal danger there’s trauma-stilled which, in the end with spring and the melt, will pass. Such a lot about life here in this pile of snow. Great stuff.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I still remember the video you posted with snowball throwing as the person rode through on their bike. Thank you for seeing.

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  21. Xan says:

    That feeling when even the grass has turned to ice from people walking on it because the sidewalk is too icy! (and knowing the mud that’s coming, ugh)

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  22. Ice on the driveway is an accident waiting to happen… Here in Sweden they have sand available so we can sand ourselves if it gets too icy.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      We have rock salt and also kitty litter can be used. The day I looked out it wasn’t frozen as things were melting.

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  23. Dora says:

    A chilling ending awaits the slippery sidewalk — Goosebumps, Lisa! What awaits us?

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Indeed, Dora! You never know what the weather will bring…

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