dVerse — Poetics — This being human is …

Artists who are inspired by water

This being human is water,
blue blankets, morning mists, and waves,
green sea foam, slick pools in blae caves,
bubbling, then steeping morning tea.

Pushed by seasons, pulled by physics,
this being human is water.
Warm and greeting, cooled receding,
ice-stretched hinterlands. Temporals

shaping our molecule’s context.
Single teardrops and moon-tide swells,
this being human is water.
We wander from mud to rainbows.

We’re pulsing whooshes, boggy splash,
we’re tinkling rain on duckweed ponds,
we’re airborne raging white cascades.
This being human is water.

 

 

Today’s offering is in the quatern form.
Top image:  “Breaking the surface,” by Samantha French

Kim of Writing in North Norfolk is today’s host for dVerse’ Poetics. Kim says:
The challenge is to write a metaphor poem that starts with the words ‘This being human is…’ It does not have to be in the same format or style as Rumi’s, and you can compare being human to anything you want: a building or place, an object, something natural or something manufactured, a ritual or an everyday act. It is up to you to explore whatever it is in your poem.

86 Comments Add yours

  1. kim881 says:

    I love the circularity of this poem – like a ripple in water, Lisa! I also love the use of colour and the different shapes. Being human is definitely ‘Pushed by seasons, pulled by physics’ and ‘Temporals shaping our molecule’s context’. A poem to swim through.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Kim so glad you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for the wonderful prompt that sparked it.

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  2. I love this.. always returning to water… and it’s very much correct… we are lots of water.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Bjorn.

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  3. calmkate says:

    I was washed along with the tide of this .. perfect metaphor Lisa and you described it so vividly!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Kate, thank you and very glad you liked it.

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  4. Ron. says:

    I’m loving it all, Lisa, but that last verse is beee-YOND merely good.
    And that wandering from mud to rainbows is one mind-blowingly good line, too. Write on Sister!

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  5. Beverly Crawford says:

    Water. What a uniquely creative metaphor. Beautiful write!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      So glad you enjoyed this, Beverly. I’m a water baby so it felt natural to use water for the metaphor 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, D!

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  6. The flow of this poem is very soothing, I quite enjoyed it! The line “we wander from mud to rainbows” is my favorite!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Very glad you found it soothing, Evan and liked that line. Thank you 🙂

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  7. sanaarizvi says:

    I so adore this! Especially; “Temporals shaping our molecule’s context.” You rocked the prompt, Lisa 😀

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sanaa so glad you enjoyed the poem, thank you ❤

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  8. I LOVE this, and now I’m gonna attempt a quatern. It just fits this prompt so well! My favorite line: “We wander from mud to rainbows.”

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Good, I hope you do and that you share it with your readers. Glad you liked it, Tricia, thanks!

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      1. Yes, going to post in a minute. 💝

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      2. I just realized I missed the part about the quatern being 8 syllables! 🤣 So no, mine is not a quatern, 😞 but hey your poem still inspired it!!

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        1. msjadeli says:

          You’ve heard of the term “poetic license.” I love the poem!

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          1. Yes! I think the spirit hit me and not in 8 syllables this time! 😂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks for the nod, Tricia! ❤

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  10. Ron Rowland says:

    Great job – love the form

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Ron. This form wasn’t as difficult as some because there is no metric feet requirement on it. It’s a great way to examine one topic.

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  11. Suzanne says:

    That’s a very interesting way of looking at life. Your poem flows like water. It makes me want to visit the sea.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Suzanne. I can’t wait until summer gets here so I can jump in Lake MI.

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  12. lynn__ says:

    We gotta jump in and keep swimming…wonderful watery metaphor, Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Lynn, thank you very much 🙂

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  13. I find it quite interesting how reading a piece of poetry can spark so much feeling. Right now I am going through a bit of a tough time and to me water is a struggle. It was just a great metaphor for me to relate to.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sending you a virtual {{{{{{{HUG}}}}}}}

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      1. Thank you so very much!

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  14. rothpoetry says:

    I love your metaphor for being human! You are exactly right… without water we are just dust to dust and ashes to ashes!!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Good way of putting it, Dwight! So true!

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  15. Sadje says:

    We are almost 60% water by weight. Great writing Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje!

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome 😉

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  16. Ingrid says:

    I love the flow of this, like water, and the repetition of the line ‘this being human is water.’ One of my favourites!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you much, Ingrid 🙂

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  17. This is incredibly clever and beautiful, Lisa, and, dare I say, scientifically true? 😀

    Yours,
    David

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, David 🙂 Water metaphory plays a big part in daoist philosophical texts.

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  18. memadtwo says:

    We wander from mud to rainbows…exactly. Great imagery. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Kerfe 🙂 How is the move going??

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      1. memadtwo says:

        I’m trying to deal with the things in storage first. My biggest problem is getting so overwhelmed that nothing gets accomplished. I’m working on it. If I could just take public transportation everywhere it would be a lot easier.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Sounds like it’s been challenging. Good luck and hope you’re in your new place soon.

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  19. Xan says:

    Your slowly sinking repeated phrase is such a clever, subtle reinforcement of the metaphor. I found myself gasping for breath a little!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I’m glad you connected with it, Alexandra. As soon as I picked water for the metaphor I knew I wanted to use a repeating form.

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  20. I love this poem so much, Lisa. I think about how much water we have in us often. I love the way you use the different forms of water. It really spoke to me.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Sarah and glad the poem spoke to you ❤

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  21. I like the tides aspect of this, our moods affected, pushed & pulled, by our surroundings and experiences.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Ken.

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  22. Sherry Marr says:

    I LOVE this poem. All the ways of water – I love all the sounds and images of it making its way. Yes, we are water.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Most pleased you connected with the poem, Sherry, thanks!

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  23. Lisa, you had an excellent idea on being human, and conveyed it in ways easy to understand.
    Water is life and it takes different forms and still exist as water. So are we. Different but still human.
    Hope we could all see the wonderful thoughts — of being likened to the majesty of water — as the poem brings to mind. This makes me appreciate myself more as a being.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Biko, thank you for reading. I appreciate your thoughtful comments and glad you connected with the poem 🙂

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  24. Great metaphor! I especially liked, ‘Single teardrops and moon-tide swells’

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much.

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  25. Kshama says:

    Whoa that is so cool

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Kshama!

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  26. robtkistner says:

    You are do right Lisa, this being human is water — beautifully rendered piece. The pessimist/realist in me adds — “and we are all evaporating slowly”… sorry to be a smudge on your fine painting. Love you friend!

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      1. msjadeli says:

        Yes! This artist is fabulous!!!!!!!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rob, there is noplace water doesn’t go. We evaporate, gather in the clouds, then fall again as gentle rain ❤ Thank you for reading and your thoughtful comment, my friend.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, JP! 🙂

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  27. Zelda Rene says:

    Wowza, beautifully crafted within the form–Exquisite…I kind of felt my breathing change a couple times 😉

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Zelda 🙂

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      1. Zelda Rene says:

        You’re totally welcome!

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  28. Yes, this being human is water. Well done, Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Sara 🙂

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  29. Truedessa says:

    A wonderful take on being human as we are made of water. Connected physically and emotionally to the element.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad you felt the connection, Truedessa, thank you.

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  30. sean@bogie says:

    We are water and without water we are nothing. Beautifully captured.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I’m glad you see that. Thank you for reading and commenting.

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  31. Colleen@ LOOSELEAFNOTES says:

    We are made up of mostly water. Your poem is making me think in a whole new way of going to the lowest level or pushing, pulsing and wandering. We do it all.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Colleen, thank you. Yes we do!

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