#FF — A Dream Deferred

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PHOTO PROMPT © Brenda Cox

There are no surveillance bulbs in the market corridors. That job remains with the eyes of the vendors. Where cameras take in impersonal grainy images, sharp eyes recognize shifty movements and remember patterns.

I begin taking produce bins. My goal is to have ninety by the time the baby is born. We need shelter and I have a safe place to build it.

Vendors share with each other about missing bins. I get to eighty when they catch me.

Nowadays I lay on my jail bunk and weep, imagining Maya and our child huddling between dumpsters with the rats.

[99 words]

The title is taken from a poem by Langston Hughes.

Rochelle Wisoff Fields is the effervescent host of Friday Fictioneers.

71 Comments Add yours

  1. Sadje says:

    A sad story

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes it is 😦 I had no idea what I would write when I started. I read Langston Hughes’ poem the other day and it stuck with me, which probably directed the story.

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      1. Sadje says:

        It’s often that way. But very well written

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Thank you, Sadje.

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          1. Sadje says:

            You’re welcome my friend

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  2. What a clever and sad little tale.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Mason.

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      1. You’re welcome.

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  3. Helen Dehner says:

    A punch in the gut ~~~ beautifully done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Helen!

      Like

  4. neilmacdon says:

    Well, that was a bleak and dystopian tale for you

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sometimes I waken from my virtual world and look at the real one. Only tolerable in small doses these days. Thanks for reading and your comment, Neil.

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      1. neilmacdon says:

        If it captured your mood, you succeeded

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Thanks, Neil, true.

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  5. Iain Kelly says:

    Depressing story really, with little hope for a happy ending!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes it is, Iain. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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  6. Fandango says:

    A very sad tale, Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      😦 I wish it wasn’t so.

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  7. ghostmmnc says:

    You do what you have to do sometimes to get by. Sad but true. This was good, and probably happens for real somewhere. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      You’re so right, Barbara. I’m sure it does.

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  8. Nobbinmaug says:

    Deadbeat dads are the worst. He goes off to live in his cushy cell leaving his wife and child to live by dumpsters. Maybe she can learn from his example and get a nice cell of her own.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Now there’s a thought. The rats in the jail are probably well-fed so won’t nibble on her and the baby in the night.

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  9. I love the inspiration I get from the main character who only wants to do best for their family. It’s sad it didn’t work out, but sad endings are more important sometimes.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Emine. It makes me wonder how they found themselves in their situation. It can happen to anyone 😦

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      1. Definitely it’s shocking. Makes me think of refugees as well, that could be us anytime with current political status!

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  10. GHLearner says:

    Very sad. Shame on the shop owners to want the guy punished even after they must have learned his story.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Maybe they will pool resources and get them a place to stay? I hope so.

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  11. memadtwo says:

    and the bankers who steal millions go free…(K)

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  12. Dora says:

    This got to me. The struggle for survival ought not to be a crime.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I know. I also have known people to commit crimes just to get locked up so they don’t starve 😦 There is something wrong when people are forced into desperate acts to stay alive.

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  13. Such a well written, albeit sad tale Ms. Jadeli.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, GiN.

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  14. draliman says:

    A tragic story of a hard life.

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  15. Sandra says:

    That was very sad. Well done. A great take.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sandra, thank you.

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  16. jenne49 says:

    What a good, gut-wrenching portrayal of one family’s struggle, determination and sadness in defeat. Makes me realise how lucky I am.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Jenne, same here.

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  17. ahtdoucette says:

    Painful to read and yet I feel you’ve honored Hughes in writing it. Lots of civil rights/social justice overtones here, as I see it. Well written.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      You’re on the money with your assessment and I appreciate your feeling I’ve honored Hughes ❤

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  18. Mike says:

    This so sad, I have seen quite a few hovels/homes constructed out of plastic bottles.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      It truly is heartrending.

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  19. plaridel says:

    it’s the sign of the times made worse by the pandemic.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, Plaridel. My heart goes out to all those struggling just to stay alive 😦

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  20. Stark and powerful.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sascha.

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  21. James McEwan says:

    Poverty is the pits. A helpless situation indeed.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      The helplessness yes, the essence of it 😦

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  22. A sad tale. You captured well real life for far too many. Nicely done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Brenda, thank you very much.

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  23. earthskyair says:

    Sad, difficult to contemplate the realities with which too many live.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for reading and your comment.

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  24. Dear Lisa,

    The despair is palpable in this tragic (and all too real piece). Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rochelle, thank you very much.
      Shalom,
      Lisa

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  25. God you’re good! That was a piece of work, brilliant. Plus my daughter is called Maya and I hope she docent end up in the bins!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      When crates in alleyways start looking inviting it should be your wake-up call. Maya is a beautiful name.

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      1. Indeed, regarding the crates, and doesn’t my daughter know it!!

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  26. granonine says:

    What a world to be born into.

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  27. subroto says:

    Battling to survive and yet surrounded by unattainable items. A sad story of want in the middle of prosperity.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      No matter how I try I can’t reconcile that discrepancy 😦

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  28. Laurie Bell says:

    Gosh this is heartbreaking

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I hope the vendors help her out.

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  29. notestowomen says:

    What a tragic tale, Lisa. He’s in jail but he’s better off than his wife and child. I hope someone finds and rescues them.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for your thoughtful comment.

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  30. magarisa says:

    A poignant tale.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Magarisa.

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      1. magarisa says:

        You’re welcome, Li.

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  31. benmc47 says:

    Well, that was a sad story. I hope Maya is able to find a safe place to stay. -Johanna

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks for reading and commenting, Johanna. I do too.

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  32. Carol anne says:

    that is very deep! ❤ ❤ well done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Carol anne.

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