The Sunday Muse 156 — Upon a Walk

Upon a walk, his heart did spy
Fair blushing bud; his love did swell.
She smiled, a twinkle in her eye.
Upon this hope, his heart did fly.

For years, her love to gain he’d try
Her frown declined and darkness fell
Upon a walk, he took her life
In shining blood; her love does tell.

Today’s offering is in the triolet form.

Shay is today’s host for The Sunday Muse.

32 Comments Add yours

  1. That made me shiver Lisa 😳 Well written my friend!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      The look in his eye tells me he’s gone round the bend. Thanks, Christine!

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  2. Carrie V. H. says:

    A chilling yet wonderful triolet Lisa!!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Carrie!

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  3. coalblack says:

    Reminds me of the folk song Tom Dooley. Enjoyed.

    –Shay

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Shay!

      Like

  4. Sadje says:

    This is dark. But very well written.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje.

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      1. Sadje says:

        My pleasure

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  5. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    What is he wearing? I agree with the others…dark…but I like dark.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I don’t know but he looks demented. Thanks Max 🙂

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      1. badfinger20 (Max) says:

        I thought it was like jewelry glasses or something…yes he is out there.

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  6. Jim says:

    “Fair blushing bud; his love did swell.” You know boys, too bad this one couldn’t control himself.
    Nice with form.
    ..

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Jim, yes it is.

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  7. memadtwo says:

    Like an old ballad…happens too often, too. (K)

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  8. Gillena Cox says:

    To the dark side & Skillfully wrought.
    Stay safe a nd creative

    Much💛love

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Gillena thank you, that picture set me off.

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  9. wyndolynne says:

    Creepy–it does seem like a ballad.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks for reading and commenting!

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  10. othermary says:

    The formal verse makes this sooo chilling!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for reading and your comment. The photo inspired it!

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  11. Susie Clevenger says:

    Yes, the formal verse makes the ending even darker. 🙂 Love it!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Susie!

      Like

  12. Alexander De says:

    Caution: This poem should be read in broad daylight; reading it in the middle of the night may be hazardous to your sense of safety in this tenuous world. The form, however, will give you something firm on which to hold. (Love it!)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Zander, thank you for your perspective on it, where the form is a firm place to hang on. Glad you enjoyed — despite being frightened — the poem 🙂

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  13. Beverly Crawford says:

    An interesting arrangement of “Tom Dooley” fits beautifully with you dark poem!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I think “Tom Dooley” is the sequel, you’re right, Beverly!

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  14. Helen Dehner says:

    Oh My! Your triolet lists toward the terrifying. And it reads terrifically.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Helen, I think women have had to be careful about who they smile at for a very long time.

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