dVerse — MTB — No More Chocolate Before Bed

The Tilled Field, 1923 - Joan Miro

When the teats on the cows
were so tight, and the balls
on the bulls were just right;
when the corn danced tango
on the ass of a pig;
when the rat consorted
with the goat and then birthed
ghoulish vermin, I woke!

image:  Joan Miró, “The Tilled Field” (1923)

I love Dr. Seuss and read so many of his stories over and over to my kids when they were small, always using different voices as I read them.  This one, “Horton Hatches the Egg” was one of their favorites (or was it one of my favorites?):

Björn is today’s host for dVerse’ Meet the Bar. Björn says:
So today I would like you to try your hands at anapestic tetrameter form, you can do it with rhymes or without. You can break up your 12 syllable lines, and add little flaws. It can be funny or stark, but listen to the hopscotch rhythm and after a while you’ll be hooked.

42 Comments Add yours

  1. I wish you could hear me laughing out loud!Jackson think I’ve lost it. 🙂 Well done Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Ha ha! I love the image of you laughing and Jackson staring at you. Much obliged Linda ❤

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  2. This was so fun… I wonder how you feel when you wake up laughing.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Bjorn, eat chocolate before bed and see 😉

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  3. Ingrid says:

    This is wonderfully surreal just like the Miró: I remember being enchanted by this painting as a kid, and I think it’s the first time I’ve seen it since then!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ingrid. I adore the internet because you can find exactly the right image for whatever the need might be. So very awesome you remember this from your childhood and were enchanted by it then.

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  4. merrildsmith says:

    So funny! I had a weird animal dream the other night, but not this surreal. 😀
    The Miro is perfect.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      LOL thanks, Merril. I bet you weren’t dreaming in anapestic tetrameter 😉

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      1. merrildsmith says:

        No, but I have dreamt poetry. And I have read words in my dreams–apparently that’s a poet thing. 😀

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        1. msjadeli says:

          I’ve dreamt words, numbers, names, and phrases. I’d love to dream a poem ❤

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  5. robtkistner says:

    Fun fun write Lisa, nicely nonsensical. Wonderful… 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Rob!

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  6. Milk chocolate I’m guessing by the opening line, but it was just a wild ride after that. I am grateful that you woke. And that you penned these lines (if not the animals)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      LOL, such a fun comment, D, thank you.

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  7. Sadje says:

    Haha, this is good Li

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thanks, Sadje.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome 😉

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  8. rothpoetry says:

    This is too cute! I love your goolish nightmare!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Dwight!

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  9. memadtwo says:

    A surrealistic Seuss! wonderful! (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thank you, K!

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  10. Dora says:

    Phantasmagorical, Lisa, and fantasitc fun. 🤗

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks so much, Dora. As things started to go awry, so did the rhythm…

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  11. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    A goat rat…that I would love to see…NOT… That was a good laugh before I go to bed.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Max! I wanted it to be strange but not logistical 🙂

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  12. Mish says:

    Well that was entertaining! The randomness of dreams is fascinating. You definitely captured it here. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Mish! You’re right, you just never know with dreams.

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  13. Reena Saxena says:

    Dreams become stand-up comedy artists 🙂 packed with punch lines.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Reena, I love your description, thank you 🙂

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  14. kim881 says:

    I love the Miro painting – but what a dream, Lisa! Colourful nonsense with a touch of the macabre.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Kim 🙂 It did take a turn didn’t it.

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  15. Ron Rowland says:

    I’m still smiling and laughing

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  16. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    Just too much fun was had here. I struggled with mine, wanting to create a semblance of 12 syllable lines. Many of you went with the Seuss limerick version. I wish I had; loved this.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Glenn. It’s a form I’d like to try again but on a more serious subject, as the ones Bjorn and Linda wrote turned out so well.

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  17. writingallsorts7909 says:

    The Miro goes perfectly with your funny phantasmasgorical poem. Loved it.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you! It took me a bit to find the right image to go with it.

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  18. writingallsorts7909 says:

    Sorry, that should read ‘phantasmagorical’!

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  19. Helen Dehner says:

    OMG this is so funny / creative, I could roll around on the floor laughing. GREAT write.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Helen, I’m glad it made you smile 🙂

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