TSM 169 — Sun on my face

When the sun warms my face,
when the wind blows my hair,
I can feel grey erase.

A direct shot of grace,
it reads like a prayer
when the sun warms my face.

Benediction in rays
to disperse earthly cares,
I can feel grey erase.

I forget my mistakes,
cast my doubts to the air
when the sun warms my face.

Content thoughts interlace
in the now, unimpaired,
as I feel grey erase.

There’s nothing that weighs;
a prescription most fair
when the sun warms my face
as I sigh, grey erased.

Β 

Today’s offering is in villanelle form.

Carrie is today’s host for The Sunday Muse.Β 

57 Comments Add yours

  1. Sadje says:

    What a beautiful poem Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much. It’s exactly how I feel with the sun on my face.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’ve conveyed the feeling very well.

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  2. Carrie V. H. says:

    Such an amazing poetry form here Lisa, and the message is one I can relate to deeply. I love where you headed with the image! Wonderful!!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you so much and glad you relate to it, Carrie πŸ™‚

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  3. Rall says:

    Great job with the villanelle Your sunny poem has inspired me to write one.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yay! Thank you and glad to have inspired you.

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  4. love this.. very beautiful and so happy to be following each other.
    Thanks for checking in and visiting. now I’ll get all of your posts up close and personalπŸ’–πŸ’–

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Cindy. Will definitely be checking out some of your yoga videos πŸ™‚

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      1. You’re so welcome… oh great.. hope you enjoy them.. πŸ’–πŸ’–

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  5. Sun definitely is a beautiful thing that can keep the blue at bay. That being said, perhaps with music being the only exception, I’d say everything in moderation! πŸ™‚

    I just came back running some Saturday errands. The sun is great, except it feels like a 100 degrees in my area, though it looks like inclement weather is coming. We’re on severe thunderstorm watch.

    When that happens, especially when combined with high wind, I always get a bit uneasy, since we have a million tall trees around our house, and they don’t seem to be in the best shape.

    Oh, well, I guess sometimes you just can’t win! πŸ™‚

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Happy to hear from you about your day, Christian. I went to see my grandbaby this afternoon. She is an adorable little bundle of happiness.

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  6. Paula Light says:

    Nice villanelle ❀️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Paula thank you ❀

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  7. Shay says:

    Ohhhhhh, not only is this soothing and wonderful, but you’ve tackled a form that always gives me fits before I give up. Bravo.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Shay thank you. It didn’t help that when I was about halfway through the screen went blank so I was forced to turn the computer off “cold” and when I came back it hadn’t saved. Not a happy camper!

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  8. Beverly Crawford says:

    A great villanelle …. and I feel the same about the sun on my face!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Very happy you connect with it, Beverly, thanks much ❀

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  9. SO SO SO lovely, Lisa! Gray erased, indeed!

    ❀
    David

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    1. msjadeli says:

      David thank you ❀

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  10. Helen Dehner says:

    An exquisite Villanelle that also feels like a chant … I love this.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Helen, thank you and with the repetition, yes I see what you mean.

      Like

  11. Sunita Prasad says:

    Amazing poem. Every stanza speaks!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sunita πŸ™‚

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  12. It’s a wonderful feeling to bask in the sun. You forget about all your troubles and relax in the golden showers. Beautifully written, Li

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Shweta!

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      1. You’re welcome 😁

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  13. Li, your words carry the warmth of the sun! ❀️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      ❀ I'm glad you can feel the warmth, Punam.

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      1. ❀️❀️

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  14. writingwhatnots says:

    I could feel the sun on my face as I read this – uplifting and warm.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, WWNs πŸ™‚

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  15. wyndolynne says:

    Wonderful mix of form and lyric and prescription.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much for your feedback, Wyndolynne.

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  16. gillena says:

    Praise for the beautiful warming sun. I carry it in my heart today.
    Happy Sunday

    MuchπŸ’œlove

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    1. msjadeli says:

      What a wonderful place to carry it, Gillena. Happy “Sun Day” to you my friend ❀

      Like

  17. memadtwo says:

    Exactly. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Kerfe, I got your postcard today ❀ πŸ™‚ To have one of your creations in my hands instead of looking at it on a screen is a very cool feeling. Love the art and love the verse. What a neat stamp on it also!

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      1. memadtwo says:

        I’m glad it arrived! Our post office only delivers mail when they feel like it, so I may have to wait for yours…(there was even an article in the paper about how bad they are)

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Dang. As long as it gets there, I’m happy.

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          1. memadtwo says:

            They delivered nothing for the last 2 days so maybe today. I did get one postcard last week. And I have another batch ready to mail.

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            1. msjadeli says:

              I got 1 other card so far. I have 3 more to do and am done. It has been so much fun putting these together.

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              1. memadtwo says:

                It came! I love all the layered colors. And the poem is just right. Thanks!

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                1. msjadeli says:

                  Awesome, Kerfe! Thanks and you are welcome. Glad it got there.

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  18. Susie Clevenger says:

    I so love the repetition. I can feel light erasing the gray as well as seeing it. Beautiful

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Awesome that you connected with it, Susie, thank you ❀

      Like

  19. Jim says:

    Reading this makes me, now old, feel young again. For a moment, just a moment. Then I feel my aches and pains again, see the red spots all over my body, and scratch the dermatitis bumps in my balding spots. I feel very old again.
    But wish I was on that speeding boat once more.
    ..

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Jim, thank you so much for your lovely comment. I can totally related to when the moment passes.

      Like

  20. Anonymous says:

    I love the openness of this Villanelle poem, your words are so refreshing.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, “Someone”

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  21. selizabryangmailcom says:

    Haha. Thank you, “Someone” lol
    I like how everyone’s so nonchalantly saying, “Great villanelle.” “What a wonderful villanelle!” while I have to go look it up ’cause I’ve never heard of it! Quatrain–yes. Tercets–no !! hahaha
    Was I actually an English major or was I a bimbo posing as a college student, lol ??:!!!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      You showed up as “Someone” on the comment; I didn’t refer to you as that because you didn’t know a poetry form! lol Stacie, as of 2018 I knew the names of just a few. Being in poetry groups and bookmarking websites full of forms has been a fun learning process.

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  22. selizabryangmailcom says:

    PS: And I, too, loved your villanelle! πŸ™‚

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you! πŸ™‚

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  23. selizabryangmailcom says:

    Oh, yeah, I know, Li. That actually WASN’T me. It is an anonymous person, so I was just laughing at your, “Thank you, someone,” ’cause they didn’t leave a name. It tickled my funny bone.

    But yeah, despite your groups and self-learning, I definitely think I have some knowledge gaps. Thank God I have you to help me fill them in. Even if I don’t pursue these things immediately, they’re definitely planting a seed. πŸ™‚ πŸ™‚

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    1. msjadeli says:

      LMAO glad to have tickled your funny bone πŸ™‚

      Liked by 1 person

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