Forest trees, red bird;
faerie dance, silk-haired;
see her there amongst the leaves,
wee? She’s shy by day
but needs sunbeams’ play.
Watching her brings joy to me.
When the crow calls once
and daylight’s not much,
when it’s time for her to go,
red bird nears on bough,
cocks his head, chirps, “Now.”
Soon they’re airborne, orange aglow.
When the owl hoots twice
and she’s snuggled nice,
her folks fly, sprinkling enchants.
In her dreams, she twirls
among sunbeams, whirls
in her joyful hidden dance.
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I read a poem by Shay in Alouette form recently and loved it and so decided to use the form today.
Mish is today’s host for dVerse’ Open Link Night.
Delightful, Lisa!
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Thank you, Dale 🙂
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My pleasure.
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This is as light and beautiful as a fairy. Love it.
That from seems interesting. Will have to try it out.
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Thank you and happy it turned out that way, Helene. I think you could write something awesome with this form.
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A delightful fantasy captured in word!
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Thank you, Beverly 🙂
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This is so beautiful and captivating, Lisa! ❤
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Lucy, many thanks. She is captivating!
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This sparkles, like her. I love the incorporation of the bird sounds, prompting her along.
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Thank you, Mish, for the feedback. I wanted to show her as intimately connected with nature and not separate from it as the viewer seems to be.
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A beautiful fairy dance Lisa, it reads like a song 💛
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Xenia, thank you. At the site where the form is it says it’s meant for just that, a song 🙂 ❤
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Ah. You’re using lots of my favorite characters and symbols here. I like the form. It’s charming and somewhat Yeatsian, I would say. It takes my fancy!
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Gay, I’m so glad you connected with it and am happy to see you at dVerse. Hope to see you more there 🙂
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I only ever catch her out of the corner of my eye.
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🙂 ❤ It was a rare and precious experience.
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Your poem is as light as the fairy ❤
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Marion, thank you ❤
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Very interesting–six lines per stanza, AABCCB. and it lends itself well to the lightness of your piece. I like the notion that fairies speak Bird, and can fly and flit around with them.
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Glenn it’s a fun form and I wish you’d write something using it. I like the camaradarie they share as well.
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A magical poem Li
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Thank you!
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You’re welcome
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What a delightful and magical poem. And the poetry form works so well.
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Thanks much, Grace, glad you like them.
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A fairy tale filled with enchantment…I am not sure I know the form but it reads light and airy.
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Thank you and glad you enjoyed the poem, Truedessa.
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In her dreams, she twirls
among sunbeams, whirls
in her joyful hidden dance. I like how you fit whirls in where it is natural…it could have sounded forced but you did it right.
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Thank you, Max. I had more fun writing this poem than I have had writing a poem in awhile. I like how it turned out.
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I can see forced from a mile away….and you making that sound natural was awesome…you didn’t take an easy way out to use it.
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🙂
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A happy dance!!!Let’s join!!
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🙂 Indeed!
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This is enchanting Lisa! How wonderful to read this straight after Helene’s poem. I am now full of the joys of spring, even if it feels more like autumn outside 🙂
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Ingrid thank you and glad you enjoyed Helene and my duet.
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a delightful magical piece of wistfulness!
thanks for the inspiration I will try this form
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Thanks and appreciate your comment. I hope you do!
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oh I will but probably next month … collecting unusual formats, like the one Kerfe did at David’s prompting!
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Yes, that is another cool one.
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That would be a treat! (K)
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Aww! Li, this is magically beautiful. ❤️
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So happy it pleases you, Punam ❤ It brought me joy to write it.
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The joy reached out and touched me. 😊❤️
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The form with your creative talent works beautifully. I would love to hear you read it. I can only imagine how it would delightfully flow …..
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Thanks so much, Helen. I may try to record it and see how it sounds.
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Wonderful words for a captivating scene.
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Thank you, Ken.
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A sweet and light poem of nature’s creatures! Well done Lisa.
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Thanks much, Dwight!
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You are welcome!
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Love it!
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Thank you.
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