dVerse — OLN 297 — Daylight Dance

Forest Faery Greets the Sun by Digimaree | Faeries, Forest ...

Forest trees, red bird;
faerie dance, silk-haired;
see her there amongst the leaves,
wee? She’s shy by day
but needs sunbeams’ play.
Watching her brings joy to me.

When the crow calls once
and daylight’s not much,
when it’s time for her to go,
red bird nears on bough,
cocks his head, chirps, “Now.”
Soon they’re airborne, orange aglow.

When the owl hoots twice
and she’s snuggled nice,
her folks fly, sprinkling enchants.
In her dreams, she twirls
among sunbeams, whirls
in her joyful hidden dance.

 

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I read a poem by Shay in Alouette form recently and loved it and so decided to use the form today.

Mish is today’s host for dVerse’ Open Link Night.

54 Comments Add yours

  1. Dale says:

    Delightful, Lisa!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Dale 🙂

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      1. Dale says:

        My pleasure.

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  2. RedCat says:

    This is as light and beautiful as a fairy. Love it.

    That from seems interesting. Will have to try it out.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you and happy it turned out that way, Helene. I think you could write something awesome with this form.

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  3. Beverly Crawford says:

    A delightful fantasy captured in word!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Beverly 🙂

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  4. Lucy says:

    This is so beautiful and captivating, Lisa! ❤

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Lucy, many thanks. She is captivating!

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  5. Mish says:

    This sparkles, like her. I love the incorporation of the bird sounds, prompting her along.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Mish, for the feedback. I wanted to show her as intimately connected with nature and not separate from it as the viewer seems to be.

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  6. A beautiful fairy dance Lisa, it reads like a song 💛

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Xenia, thank you. At the site where the form is it says it’s meant for just that, a song 🙂 ❤

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  7. Ah. You’re using lots of my favorite characters and symbols here. I like the form. It’s charming and somewhat Yeatsian, I would say. It takes my fancy!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Gay, I’m so glad you connected with it and am happy to see you at dVerse. Hope to see you more there 🙂

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  8. Xan says:

    I only ever catch her out of the corner of my eye.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 ❤ It was a rare and precious experience.

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  9. writingwhatnots says:

    Your poem is as light as the fairy ❤

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Marion, thank you ❤

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  10. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    Very interesting–six lines per stanza, AABCCB. and it lends itself well to the lightness of your piece. I like the notion that fairies speak Bird, and can fly and flit around with them.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glenn it’s a fun form and I wish you’d write something using it. I like the camaradarie they share as well.

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  11. Sadje says:

    A magical poem Li

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome

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  12. Grace says:

    What a delightful and magical poem. And the poetry form works so well.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Grace, glad you like them.

      Like

  13. Truedessa says:

    A fairy tale filled with enchantment…I am not sure I know the form but it reads light and airy.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you and glad you enjoyed the poem, Truedessa.

      Like

  14. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    In her dreams, she twirls
    among sunbeams, whirls
    in her joyful hidden dance. I like how you fit whirls in where it is natural…it could have sounded forced but you did it right.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Max. I had more fun writing this poem than I have had writing a poem in awhile. I like how it turned out.

      Liked by 1 person

      1. badfinger20 (Max) says:

        I can see forced from a mile away….and you making that sound natural was awesome…you didn’t take an easy way out to use it.

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  15. Vandana Sharma says:

    A happy dance!!!Let’s join!!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Indeed!

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  16. Ingrid says:

    This is enchanting Lisa! How wonderful to read this straight after Helene’s poem. I am now full of the joys of spring, even if it feels more like autumn outside 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Ingrid thank you and glad you enjoyed Helene and my duet.

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  17. calmkate says:

    a delightful magical piece of wistfulness!
    thanks for the inspiration I will try this form

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks and appreciate your comment. I hope you do!

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      1. calmkate says:

        oh I will but probably next month … collecting unusual formats, like the one Kerfe did at David’s prompting!

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Yes, that is another cool one.

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  18. memadtwo says:

    That would be a treat! (K)

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  19. Aww! Li, this is magically beautiful. ❤️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      So happy it pleases you, Punam ❤ It brought me joy to write it.

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      1. The joy reached out and touched me. 😊❤️

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  20. Helen Dehner says:

    The form with your creative talent works beautifully. I would love to hear you read it. I can only imagine how it would delightfully flow …..

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks so much, Helen. I may try to record it and see how it sounds.

      Like

  21. Wonderful words for a captivating scene.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ken.

      Liked by 1 person

  22. rothpoetry says:

    A sweet and light poem of nature’s creatures! Well done Lisa.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Dwight!

      Liked by 1 person

      1. rothpoetry says:

        You are welcome!

        Liked by 1 person

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