#FF — That Magic Moment


PHOTO PROMPT Β© Krista Strutz

Jill and I took paddleboarding lessons from our neighbor, Jack, who led small groups on weekend excursions. After three seasons of local trips, we felt ready to embark on the big Alaska adventure. It would be just us three. We flew into Cordova airport and stayed at Jack’s cabin on Eyak Lake.

On our fourth day we spied a bald eagle resting on driftwood. Jill urged me to paddle closer so she could take a picture. Baldy and I locked eyes; I was feeling the magic timelessness of the moment.

I felt a paddle crack the side of my skull.

[100 words]

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the shining host of Friday Fictioneers.

43 Comments Add yours

  1. Dale says:

    You couldn’t just let him enjoy the moment… There was no room in the Jack and Jill scenario for a third wheel (or paddle), I see!
    Well done, missy!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Well, he *did* enjoy the moment… until he didn’t. lol. Thanks Dale!

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      1. Dale says:

        You know, as I pressed send, I thought… well, she DID let him enjoy the moment briefly… πŸ™‚

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    2. Vartika says:

      Oh!! Sad incident.. break the moment..

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  2. Anita says:

    All was going great.
    The pic was also in fate.
    But, why this sad end to the date?
    Cracked skull is scary. Hope he gets well soon.

    The Treasure Hunt- Anita

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Anita, I wanted to lull the reader and then surprise them. Glad to hear you are an optimist πŸ™‚

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  3. neilmacdon says:

    And he thought the bird of prey was the dangerous animal there!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Great comment, Neil!

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  4. Dear Lisa,

    I guess this Jack and Jill had more sinister intentions than fetching water. You took me by surprise with that ending. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rochelle, thank you for your wonderful comment.
      Shalom,
      Lisa

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  5. Ouch. A painful betrayal in more ways than one!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes! I hope Jack and Jill just think he’s dead but he survives then goes full commando revenge on them πŸ˜‰

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  6. Carol anne says:

    Lol! What a way to end the magic of the moment! ❀

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    1. msjadeli says:

      oopsie πŸ˜‰

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  7. athling2001 says:

    Oh no! What a way to end the moment! Well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Y’know I think the eagle was in on the plot also…. πŸ™‚ Thank you, Athling.

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  8. memadtwo says:

    You just can’t trust anyone it seems. (K)

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  9. granonine says:

    There was an ominous feel to this one very early on. I wasn’t surprised by the crack on the head. Just kind of–sad, I guess. You can’t trust anyone, it seems.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      When I named the wife Jill and the neighbor Jack… Why she just couldn’t have divorced him is a mystery…

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  10. Not the ending I was expecting, nor your subject! A great take Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Keith!

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  11. plaridel says:

    i guess taking a shot at the bird was a big no-no. πŸ™‚

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  12. James McEwan says:

    On the surface there is a gentle flow to the story, underneath a sinister premeditated evil exists.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I like the way you describe the story, James. Thank you for reading.

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  13. GHLearner says:

    And it all started so harmoniously. The hint about Jack and Jill should have given it away… πŸ˜€

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  14. Bear says:

    Funny, I’ve looked at this photo since wednesday, and just now saw the bald eagle. What I was seeing was a man in a baseball cap turned backwards and he was looking down at something. So much for trying to see the pic on my phone. Love your story!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Bear, I thought it was another person until I got a closer look at it. Thank you and glad you enjoyed the story.

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  15. pennygadd51 says:

    I didn’t realise the narrator was male and that he and Jill were an item, until I read some of the comments…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sorry, Penny. I assumed it was inferred by the guy locking eyes with the eagle in the image, but maybe not. I may have to rework it to make it more clear. Thank you for reading and your feedback.

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  16. Oh, you’re good at this! What fun! (Unless you’re the one being cracked upside the head, of course!) 🌞

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    1. msjadeli says:

      LOL thank you, Lisa πŸ™‚

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  17. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    Woo…I have to say I thought it was going to be a nature story…that ended abruptly lol.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      lol. And I hope it stays ended.

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  18. Dora says:

    Lisa,
    Two’s company, three’s a . . . . Do I sense a murderous intent here? Nothing’s ever as innocent as it seems, lol.
    pax,
    dora

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    1. msjadeli says:

      πŸ™‚ Hoping he’s just stunned and wakes up after they leave and finds a way back to a safe place.

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  19. Wow, whopping twist at the end. You lulled us in well with the natural beauty and serenity of the piece, only to smash it all to smithereens with a paddle and someone’s dark motive.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Michael. Great feedback.

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  20. the magic timelessness of the moment…good line until the last fatal twist. Good one Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Neel, thank you and am glad you enjoyed the story.

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