TSM 180 — Night Walker

My darling, why did you go
to a place so dark?
I truly need to know.

Empty clangs, doves moan,
heels click, soul marked.
My darling, why did you go?

Night screams, blood flows
yet no answer, my sanity infarct.
I fervently need to know

incantation to transpose
from ghoul back to art.
My darling, why did you go?

Numbers terrify, a village vow
to kill a monster forever parched.
Time gone, I need to know

now as ending flames at my toes,
to death’s repose from grinding march.
He asks, “My darling, why did you go?
To be with you, as you already know.

 

Today’s offering is in villanelle form.  This one is a little dark and murky, a poem of love and madness as those often haunting things tend to be.

Carrie is today’s host for The Sunday Muse.  Thank you, Carrie, for this most evocative image!

39 Comments Add yours

  1. Sadje says:

    Very effective!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje!

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome

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  2. fireblossom32 says:

    Very Shocktober-ish!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thank you, Shay!

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  3. qbit says:

    ”To be with you, as you already know.” – Ah, yes. that ancient, dark pull.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Q, thank you for understanding.

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  4. Carrie V. H. says:

    This is chilling and oh so lovely dark Lisa. I like what Shay said, it is Shocktober-ish!!! That ending is perfection!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Carrie, the poem wouldn’t exist without your wonderful choice of prompt image. Thank you for it and for your kind words.

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  5. Beverly Crawford says:

    Careful with that sanity infarct! A great fun read.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Haha! If I felt sane, I’d start to wonder what was going on. Thank you and glad you enjoyed the read.

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  6. Portofino says:

    The Villanelle! I love writing forms… when time permits. Yours is dark and lovely (love and madness; magnetic poles that flip over, and over). Great one, Jade!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Charley, thank you! I like your way of describing love and madness.

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  7. memadtwo says:

    The repetition of “I need to know” is like its own incantation. I can hear that unhinged voice. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Kerfe!

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  8. Sherry Marr says:

    Love can be a source of madness at times. So well written.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sherry, thank you.

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  9. kaykuala
    a poem of love and madness

    Love this villanelle Jade! It has that typical repetition making dance to a tune.

    Hank

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Hank, thank you 🙂

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  10. …..making it dance to a….

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  11. wyndolynne says:

    A black&white horror/love story! Very, very cool.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Wyndolynne.

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  12. hedgewitch says:

    I love the mood here, ominous and full of dark October nights and their accompanying nightmares. The echo lines are perfect, and that last stanza totally chilling.You leave us feeling All Hallows is certainly coming soon.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Hedgewitch, so glad you enjoyed the poem. Thank you for the feedback.

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  13. nicely done Lisa in time for Halloween💖

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Cindy, thank you! As the weather gets cooler I begin to turn into a jack o’lantern (or is that jill o’lantern?)

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  14. Truedessa says:

    The use of repetition adds to the haunting question…where did you go?

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Truedessa thank you. It’s a messed up situation 😦

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  15. Susie Clevenger says:

    Delightful, dark fun…A perfect poem for October

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Susie 🙂

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  16. writingwhatnots says:

    I needed all the lights on to read this – deliciously dark and spine-tingling.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Marion thank you!

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  17. A deep, dark villanelle! Wonderful writing, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sara, thank you.

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  18. Helen Dehner says:

    The dark, murky villanelle … quite the recipe for a delicious write!

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      So glad you enjoyed the entree, Helen 🙂

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  19. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    I don’t know why…you know I don’t have much knowledge but Poe came to mind.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      lol you know that’s not true, Max. You have plenty of knowledge. There is definitely a very dark vein running through this one. Poe probably wrote a lot of his darkest work coming off of cocaine binges. I wasn’t coming off of a bender but I wasn’t feeling bright and shiny when I wrote this one.

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      1. badfinger20 (Max) says:

        Well I’m learning more…
        I think I figured it out…it was the way you repeated that line emphasizing it and driving it home.

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