TSM 181 — Revived

Their bodies turned traitor but their minds stay loyal.
Each Saturday at city center park, their tact
re-pledges under oak witnesses. It matters not
whose king is vanquished, but the thrill of life
through logic’s foreplay courses through veins.

Greyed skulls, capped heads bent,
rapt in concentration, they’re
alive once again

 

 

 

 

 

Carrie is today’s host at The Sunday Muse.

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38 Comments Add yours

  1. Portofino says:

    Cool poem! Captures the spirit exactly. https://youtu.be/uMVtpCPx8ow

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Awww that’s such a cute video.

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    2. writingwhatnots says:

      Love that video!

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    3. Truedessa says:

      Thanks for sharing the video, it made me smile.

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      1. Portofino says:

        You’re welcome!

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  2. fireblossom32 says:

    Yep, the game can be a reason for getting together, enjoying one’s self. There is no age limit on that!

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  3. Carrie V. H. says:

    Love the message in this and the truth it holds. Sometimes the competition is also comradery!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks Carrie, yes it’s the human connection that matters.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you 🙂

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  4. memadtwo says:

    Any reason to connect is a good one. (K)

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  5. Sadje says:

    A vivid description Li.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome

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  6. Anonymous says:

    Thr big bold brash game of life, game of survival! Intricate as any move in the life ov business

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I’m liking what you see here 🙂

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  7. robtkistner says:

    Come play chess with me Liss!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rob, I play chess only in my mind…

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    2. robtkistner says:

      Excellent Haibun Lisa. Sounds like a wonderful afternoon in the park.

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      1. msjadeli says:

        Rob, thank you 🙂

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  8. writingwhatnots says:

    I could just picture this scene – so well drawn.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Marion! I’ve always liked seeing groups in the park playing chess. They look engaged and enjoying themselves.

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  9. wyndolynne says:

    Great imagery & a breath of life in the morning. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thank you. So happy to give you a breath of life in the morning.

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  10. Helen Dehner says:

    Oh, the first line of your poem ~~ drawing me in, understanding full well the reality ~~ the importance of keeping brain exercises and communication going, in spite of our traitorous bodies. Great write, Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Helen, I’m happy you connected with the first line and agree with everything you say here. Thank you ❤

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  11. psyche says:

    “their tact
    re-pledges under oak witnesses”

    “the thrill of life
    through logic’s foreplay”

    “capped heads bent,
    rapt in concentration”

    I especially like these lines. Excellent piece.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Psyche, thank you very much.

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  12. Sherry Marr says:

    I can see a few old men, hunched over a board in the park, studying their moves.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thanks, Sherry. Did you see the video Charley put a link for in his comment? It’s quite fun.

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  13. Beverly Crawford says:

    I identiy with that first line!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I hear you, Beverly!

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  14. Truedessa says:

    Keeping the mind sharp is part of the game, even if the body is aging. But, for some reason “Saturday in the Park” is playing in my head.

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  15. qbit says:

    I love “oak witnesses”!!! So good.

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  16. You brought life to those stiff pieces!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      haha! Thank you, Sara.

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