#FF — Tower

PHOTO PROMPT © Na’ama Yehuda

Kari crossed Bílý Bridge at dusk via horse-drawn sleigh from the train station. It was mid-January. She hugged her soft leather bag close and shivered; it was only partially because of the cold. Craning her neck up as the sleigh lurched over snow-packed cobblestone, she imagined the castle, now a dark silhouette, towering over the village was watching – and waiting.

Tipping the driver generously after he helped her down, Kari toddled the shoveled sidewalk to the inn’s entrance. Registering, then settling in to her room, she wondered how long it would take for them to come for her.

[99 words]

Origin story: the moment I looked at the image I thought of Franz Kafka’s novel, “The Castle.” Looking for a little more detail for my story, I turned to wikipedia (where else?) and was filled with a range of emotions. I learned that Franz never finished the novel. I decided to change the protagonist to being female, even though I know that Kari may also be a male’s name. I know I left this as a cliffhanger, and if the opportunity presents itself there may be future installments.


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Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the creative host of Friday Fictioneers.

60 Comments Add yours

  1. Dale says:

    Funny how we were both inspired by books we read/are reading 🙂
    Well done, you!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Dale. I’d be nothing without books. Or probably some hermit living off grid in a cabin by a river…

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      1. Dale says:

        I feel ya, Sistah! 😉

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    Wonderfully Gothic

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Neil, thank you. Happy to please you 🙂

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  3. I assumed it was a cliffhanger. The only Kafka novel I have ever read is ‘Amerika’. I have never before heard of this one.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      The story surrounding the novel is just as fascinating as the novel itself. I’ve only read “Metamorphosis” but want to read more.

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      1. I have a book of his short stories. They are all good

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  4. Ain says:

    The ending went very Kafka, in a very real way, and all the rest of the tale therefore took on new meaning..very nicely sone.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ain. Question: I thought I downloaded your book yesterday but it is a virtually empty file when I opened it. Can you email it to me?

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      1. Ain says:

        Oh goodness I will check that immediately. That is terrible, will email yes and look what happened.

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  5. Michael says:

    What is a life without good books, you have encouraged me to visit my library

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Michael, so happy to hear it. Let me know how it goes.

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  6. Love a bit of Kafka, good stuff well reimagined

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Shrawl 🙂

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  7. memadtwo says:

    You did leave us hanging… (k)

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  8. Nice mysterious story, Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you 🙂

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  9. Sadje says:

    Deep, mysterious story

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  10. Sandra says:

    Intriguing. I want to read more.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sandra.

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  11. I like an open-end and this is a cracker!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Glad you like.

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  12. Liz Young says:

    As you say – a cliffhanger.

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  13. Beautifully written, Lisa. I loved the intrigue at the end.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Brenda!

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  14. Bill says:

    Well developed and suspenseful, Lisa. A hanger, indeed. Thanks for the explanation.
    Now we wait for the ‘and then…’

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Bill. I like the feel of this story and may expand it.

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      1. Bill says:

        Sounds like a good idea to me. 🙂

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  15. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    I love the imagery you have in this one…I’m cold just reading it.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Could you imagine living in a little village and waking up looking at a towering castle up on a hill? No thanks!

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      1. badfinger20 (Max) says:

        No…no…being looked down upon…in many different ways.

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  16. James McEwan says:

    a clip hanger indeed as I am unsteady on the edge looking over the cliff. Regards, your story reads well and is interesting.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      James, hold on tight. Thank you, much appreciated.

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  17. draliman says:

    You’ve set an ominous scene for a rather ominous-looing photo 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ali. Not sure if you read, “The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo” but I had that village the estate was in in my head to spur me on. That and that damned Kafka castle!

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  18. ahtdoucette says:

    Evocative setting. I feel as if Kafka would approve.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Anne, thank you. That’s high praise ❤

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  19. GHLearner says:

    I only read Metamorphosis. You set a great mood of undecided danger here. And then?

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Gabi. I’m not sure what next, the Muse is mum on it for now 🙂

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  20. Love the sleigh ride and sense of impending doom. It leaves a lot to the imagination. I like that.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Russell, thank you for reading and your comment.

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  21. plaridel says:

    you’ve left me hanging again by the ropes. 🙂

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  22. Laurie Bell says:

    Wow the cold really comes through in your descriptions here. Both in weather and mood. Fabulous

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Laurie!

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  23. Margaret says:

    They’re watching. They’re coming. The suspense is killing me.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      My work here is done. Thank you, Margaret 🙂

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  24. Dear Lisa,

    Nice buildup to the ominous ending that left me wanting more.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rochelle, thank you for your kind words.
      Shalom,
      Lisa

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  25. Who doesn’t like a bit of Kafka now and then. Yes, cliffhanger it is!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Neel, thanks much, glad you enjoyed the story.

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  26. pennygadd51 says:

    You capture the oppressive environment of the village, and the single-mindedness of the protagonist, and all in 100 words. Well done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Penny, thank you for reading and your thoughtful comment. I appreciate your feedback.

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  27. jillyfunnell says:

    Atmospheric, with a strong sense of unease. She has a leather bag and she tips the driver, so she’s not a poor person. But who’s coming for her? Tingle down the spine stuff.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Jilly!

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  28. Anita says:

    Great expression, Lisa.
    Do they come for her?
    Hope she is safe 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Anita. I think she is aware and prepared. We’ll have to wait and see what happens next…

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