TSM 197 — Late Summer Berries


Photography by Kristine Wayman

a life noir of flickered shadows
wandered nightmares of dead forests
palette drained by traitor rainbows

wandered nightmares of dead forests
where once green danced, where fancies played
moan in still, stale airless chorus

where once green danced, where fancies played
hungry sunlight blushed tender flesh
naivete hacked with crime’s blade

hungry sunlight blushed tender flesh
bright prince, sprung foul beast in disguise
crumpled bloom, unprized wretch

dark prince, sprung foul beast, undisguised
late summer berries, seasoned womb
mums, asters, warm nights, mute cries

midnight visit, bloody bedclothes
crushed berries, a tiny tomb
a life noir now flickered shadows
palette drained by traitor rainbows

Today’s offering is in the pantanelle form, which was created by Ingrid Wilson.

Carrie is the host of The Sunday Muse.

38 Comments Add yours

  1. Carrie V. H. says:

    Dead forests are nightmares indeed! I love this Pantenelle form. I had never heard of it before. A powerful poem with intense imagery, and the repetition really magnifies the mood. So glad you joined in Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad you enjoyed it, Carrie. Thank you for offering such evocative images to write to.

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  2. Sounds all pretty dark and frightening, especially when you look at the bright red axe blade!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Christian, I know what you mean!

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  3. Helen Dehner says:

    We have so many burned out forest lands here on “my” high desert, it breaks my heart. This line in your beautifully composed poem brought tears to my eyes … “where once green danced, where fancies played” ~~

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Helen, that has got to be difficult to face. I feel sorrow just imagining looking out over it. My condolences.

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  4. memadtwo says:

    Like a fairy tale–the real ones, not the Disney versions. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      😦 the ax is such a potent symbol in fairy tales

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      1. memadtwo says:

        I never thought about it before, but it is.

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  5. Sherry Marr says:

    I love “where once green danced” so much! The later stanzas describe a heartbreaking scene. So well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Sherry. It is heartbreaking.

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  6. Sadje says:

    Such an evocative poem Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Sadje.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome

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  7. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    That is pretty dark and frightening… I like it! The picture also with the blood red blade standing out.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Max, I know you’ve been waiting for a dark and frightening story. This one is bad, but it isn’t it 😉

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      1. badfinger20 (Max) says:

        I hope you take this as a compliment…it has an Edgar Allan Poe feel to it….and that is great to me.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          🙂 ❤ I do take it as a compliment. Thank you, Max.

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  8. What a soul-searching piece! I love it so much!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you and glad you enjoyed it.

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      1. You’re most welcome.

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  9. Jim says:

    Fine poem, Lili. I’ll look into the form as I like to experiment.
    “a life noir of flickered shadows” in your beginning and the ending with nothing but bad or worse inbetween . I would call this a ‘dark poem. ‘
    ..

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Jim, thank you. I couldn’t agree more. The image sets the tone for me.

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  10. wyndolynne says:

    Gorgeous–the images were an unsettling mix of inviting and worrying. It felt like the translation of a picture book, all the color and movement clinging to the words.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for your wonderful feedback. I am liking what you are seeing.

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  11. Sunra Rainz says:

    Ooh, very evocative, Lisa. I hope that’s not a glimpse of the future to come. Green always seeks to grow regardless though, doesn’t it? Except maybe after a forest fire. You’ve given me food for thought this Sunday 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sunra, it is a blessing that green always seeks to grow. Let’s hope she finds her place in the sun again… Thank you for your thoughtful comment ❤

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      1. Sunra Rainz says:

        You’re welcome, Lisa 💖

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  12. Truedessa says:

    Dark and haunting piece of poetry but, I take comfort in knowing the green will grow again somewhere, somehow, it will survive.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for reading and your comment, Truedessa.

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  13. qbit says:

    “traitor rainbows” – that’s great! I love the form, creates so many interesting interactions across lines.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Q. I told Ingrid she had a winner with her form.

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  14. Syl says:

    Your poem pulled me in….
    hungry sunlight…
    So many powerful images.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Syl. Glad you connected with it.

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  15. Carol anne says:

    awesome! I loved your poem! I hadnt heard of that poetry form! ❤

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Carol Anne, thank you. It’s a fairly new form.

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  16. hedgewitch says:

    A fascinating form–the repetition is very effective, and I love how vividly your images stand out in those short, impactful bursts of phrase. I think my favorite is the opener, and next “…where once green danced, where fancies played..” Not a pleasant forest to wander in, but beautifully drawn.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Joy, thank you for the wonderful feedback and the kind words.

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