dVerse — MTB — Cheating Shadows

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Shadow’s long fingers move with sun’s shadow
I parse your warm tanned lines with languid eye
Shallow thoughts wander in summer shallows
Why’s not a question I’m asking. Not why.

Not where, as here. Not when, as now. No knot.
Questions: how; how long. No other questions.
T
aut thrust’s dilection; practiced lessons taught
Suggestions exhausted; not suggestion.

Rose backlights eastern tree silhouette’s rows
Dreamless, slumber-blessed brought from fulfilled dreams
M
orning finds us blissed, yet grieved in mourning
De
ep reflection pools, flounders in the deep

Our spouses soon to know terminal hour
Dowered past is gone now cursed with dour

top image is by Rene Capone

This challenge was extremely difficult, but I enjoy a good challenge. I went with the English (shadow) sonnet without the iambic pentameter.

The musical selection is from Cake’s, “Showroom of Compassion” album (CD) that I’ve been listening to in the car the past few days.

Laura is today’s host for dVerse’ Meet the Bar.  Laura says:
Your challenge is simply(!):

  • write a sonnet poem of 14 lines and 10 syllables (iambic pentameter is optional extra)
  • choose the Italian, English or French rhyme form *
  • start and end each line with the same word (including derivatives and homophones)
  • put ‘shadow’ or its derivative in your title
  • use the notion of shadow as metaphor or reality somewhere in your poem

40 Comments Add yours

  1. Your sonnet is extraordinary and poignant. Truly blown away by it! 🏆

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Ami, thank you so much. Glad you connected with it.

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      1. Reena Saxena says:

        Beautifully penned!

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Thank you, Reena 🙂

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  2. Beautiful and thought-provoking! This was a really hard one today, but you rocked it! ❣️👏👏

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Tricia, thank you 🙂 I sweat blood on this one lol

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      1. You have to bleed to get this one right! ❣️

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  3. Sadje says:

    Very deep and thought provoking poem Li

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sadje thank you very much.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome my friend

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  4. It’s just incredible how you put these poems together based on instructions.

    I’m also intrigued by your song choice. There’s just something about this tune that drew me in – not quite sure what it is. Anyway, this prompted me to quickly look up Cake. Apparently, the album from which you took this song was self-released in 2011 and debuted at no. 1 on the Billboard 200 – that pretty remarkable!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Christian. Cake is one of my top 25 favorite groups, maybe even top 10. They have a very loyal following and don’t care much for our corporatocracy.

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      1. Sounds like I should check ’em out, Lisa. The pile keeps growing. I love it! 🙂

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        1. msjadeli says:

          ❤ YAY! I hope you do.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you! Much appreciated, Carol

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  5. rothpoetry says:

    You did an excellent job with this challenging prompt!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dwight, thank you!

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  6. Ain says:

    You went deep…deep…deep…and the poem was luscious for that..poetry of such valour controls..the reader is pulled and pulled. So interesting also cause it felt different …I agree that was tough, but you really created something there, from that prompt..

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Ain, glad you connected with the poem, thank you!

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  7. You’ve risen majestically to the prompt, managing to create a thought provoking piece that doesn’t lose itself under the weight of the challenge. Utterly impressed.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Darius. It was like trying to put a piece of Ikea furniture together. Hoping it would hold heavy things without collapsing.

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      1. You managed it well!

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  8. Not where, as here. Not when, as now. No knot.

    Lisa, this sonnet rocks my world. Amazing.

    -David

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, David 🙂

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  9. Lisa you did wonders with this shadow sonnet – a magical poem and a joy to read

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Laura!

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  10. memadtwo says:

    The shadows are strong in this one. Great atmosphere. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Kerfe. If it makes any sense at all it has succeeded! 🙂

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  11. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    That is deep!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Max, thank you 🙂

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  12. I loved the sonnet…my favourite lines are “Morning finds us blissed, yet grieved in mourning
    Deep reflection pools, flounders in the deep”

    Very deep!

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  13. Dale says:

    You made it look so easy! Wonderfully done!!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      You are kind, Dale. Thank you so much.

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  14. Xan says:

    Sonnets are so hard, and yet so worth it. This is very good. I whiffed on the prompt and wrote about shadows and not in the shadow form. I was told in school that never following the directions would get me in the end.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Alexandra, I’ve been watching Joseph Campbell and Bill Moyer’s series, “The Power of Myth” and see that the “rule breakers”, i.e. artists, are society’s Shamans. More than that, they are, as Princess Leia said, “our only hope.” So your teacher didn’t realize her prophecy but she’s right. 🙂

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  15. This is spectacular, you managed to go deep, love that you made it in such a journey into the night… I feel we were both on the same wavelength there by incorporating the shadow as a theme..

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    1. msjadeli says:

      High praise from you, Bjorn, thank you. I think you’re right about the wavelength.

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