dVerse — Poetics — Losing My Religion

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lose the stones in your pockets
lose the guilt that you choose
lose the grit in your sprockets
lose the rotgut in your booze
lose the shadow of your fear
lose the whine in your bellow
lose the cotton in your ears
lose the judgment on your fellows
lose the hunger of your want
lose the bucket lists of others
lose the plug that seals the font
lose the attitude that smothers

The title of my poem is the same as this R.E.M. song.  Top image is Michael Stipe.

Sarah is today’s host for dVerse’ Poetics. Sarah says:
Wikipedia says: anaphora(Greek: ἀναφορά, “carrying back”) is a rhetorical device that consists of repeating a sequence of words at the beginnings of neighboring clauses, thereby lending them emphasis.

I’d like you to pick one of these verbs as the repeating verb:
•remember
•dream
•eat
•choose
•love
•fear
•hope
•paint
•lose

Remember, these go at the START of the clause,

50 Comments Add yours

  1. Carol anne says:

    Love this, very nice poem Lisa! Xoxo

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Carol Anne!

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  2. Love this Lisa. You can almost rap it ☺️💕

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thank you!

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  3. ivor20 says:

    I’m always losing things … some good … some bad …

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    1. msjadeli says:

      C’est la vie! Thanks for reading and your comment 🙂

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      1. ivor20 says:

        My pleasure

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  4. Nice! Also, “Losing My Religion” is among my all-time favorite R.E.M. tunes.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad you enjoyed the poem and I love that song also. Thank you.

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  5. SelmaMartin says:

    This one is tremendous! May it echo in the caves of our souls for a long time. TY

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Selma, thank you very much 🙂

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  6. Sadje says:

    Oh yes, this is a brilliant poem Li

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sadje, thank you ❤

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re most welcome my friend

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  7. I love the rhythm created by the repetition. This is wonderful, Ms Jadeli

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thanks much, Lamittan.

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      1. Feel most welcome, Msjadeli.

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  8. This just flows so well. I didn’t even notice the rhyme scheme until I read it second time round, I just thought “that felt satisfying”. So many great lines, Lisa – I particularly liked the stones in your pockets and the bucket lists of others. It’s so good.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sarah, many thanks. Happy to hear you enjoyed it.

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  9. memadtwo says:

    A worthy list. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Kerfe.

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  10. Helen Dehner says:

    Words / to live by / immensely wise …. what a great Anaphora. {One of my favorite R.E.M. songs}

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Helen. I love that song also.

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  11. Rob Kistner says:

    I echo this power you wrote here Lisa — lose, lose, lose!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks and glad you agree, Rob.

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  12. Mish says:

    Nice one, Lisa. Losing the bucket list of others is especially striking. How easily we conform or strive for the dreams and expectations of others. It’s amazing how many things we can afford to lose!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Mish, thank you very much for reading and your thoughtful comment.

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  13. I really Like the flow of this and the rhyme as well- an added bonus!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Linda thanks much 🙂

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  14. Badfinger (Max) says:

    I love the origin of the song…the southern expression when people are getting stressed or pissed that someone or some situation is making them lose their religion…and it works on a deeper level.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Oh wow, Max, I didn’t realize that was a Southern expression. I just love the concept and of course that song 🙂

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      1. Badfinger (Max) says:

        I’ve heard it all of my life…lol an aunt or grandmother….”you are making me lose my religion!”

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  15. merrildsmith says:

    Great flow and good advice, Lisa!
    The cotton in the ears made me laugh because we have a family joke about cotton in the ears from long ago when my niece babysat our kids. 😀

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Merril, and happy to know you have a personal memory connected to it.

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      1. merrildsmith says:

        You’re welcome.

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  16. sanaarizvi says:

    This is absolutely stellar writing, Lisa. I especially resonate with; “lose the judgment on your fellows.”💝💝

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sanaa, thank you and glad you connected with it ❤

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  17. lillian says:

    LATE to the reading and posting for this prompt and then I found this.
    Ooooooooooooh what a good list you’ve given here! Every line, so good. Lose the cotton in your ears made me smile….but oh how that could apply to so many people and in so many ways!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Lillian, thanks for reading and your comment. That cotton surely does obstruct, you’re right.

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  18. Li, the rhyming and the flow are amazing! Some very good advice here.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Punam, thank you!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sara 🙂

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  19. calmkate says:

    powerful poem, hope you do manage to lose it all … baggage is so debilitating!

    One of my favourite REM songs, thanks 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Great comment, Kate. Glad you like that REM song, it’s a good’n.

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      1. calmkate says:

        they are so underrated Lisa 🙂

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  20. your words, flow and message wonderful ….Lisa! 💖

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Cindy, thank your for reading and glad you liked it.

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      1. You’re so welcome. It’s my pleasure LIsa! 💖

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