#FF — Waterfalls

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Waterfalls

Willa sits in the cafe with black coffee and lemon tart. It is Joey’s eighteenth birthday. She’d made him lemon tart every birthday until his tenth.

Jim gave no hint he’d abscond with Joey. Jim had been served with papers at noon; by two they were gone. Had he been expecting it; to be so prepared?

Her phone dings with a text. It reads, “Mom. It’s Joe. I’m in Venezuela. I’m on my way home.” Attached is a photo of a handsome young man.

Her head falls to the table. The cup clatters to the floor. Her tears are waterfalls.

[100 words]

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the sunny host of Friday Fictioneers.  And I agree with Rochelle:

67 Comments Add yours

  1. Sadje says:

    Such a touching way to tell your story.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      ❤ Thank you, Sadje.

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      1. Sadje says:

        My pleasure

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  2. pennygadd51 says:

    I like the way you signal Willa’s deep love and sense of loss by the continuation of the birthday tradition she and Joe had shared. That text message must have stunned Willa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Penny. Stunned is a good word for it.

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  3. neilmacdon says:

    The waiting paid off

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  4. Iain Kelly says:

    Quite a few pent up tears released. Nicely done, touching story.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Iain thank you very much.

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  5. Is it good news that he’s heading home? All is not lost?

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Larry, now that he is an adult, his kidnapper father can’t stop him from going home anymore. In my view it is very good news — for him and for his mother.

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      1. That was the first thing I noticed. If he’s not a minor his father’s not in charge, but you used the word ‘kidnapper’ so that is a different world

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Parents can kidnap their children, especially if they leave without a trace or refuse to allow contact between the child and the other parent.

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  6. Oh what a lovely tale, you’ve smashed it!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Shrawl, thank you so much 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Tracey. Glad you connected with it.

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  7. memadtwo says:

    I hope he does make it home–Im sure there will be a long story to tell. (K)

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  8. Frank Hubeny says:

    I like how Willa continued to celebrate Joey’s birthday even after he left.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Frank.

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  9. rothpoetry says:

    Very well done Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Dwight 🙂

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  10. At last, she can get her life back on track. A poignant piece indeed, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Keith, many thanks. I like these kinds of happy endings and even write about them from time to time 🙂

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  11. plaridel says:

    i bet when they meet there’ll be more tears to cause a deluge. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      100% in agreement with you, Plaridel. Thank you for reading and your comment.

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  12. Badfinger (Max) says:

    That one is great Lisa… hope it’s a happy and lasting reunion.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I hope so also, Max. Glad you liked it, thank you.

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  13. Patricia Clair says:

    I loved this. Absolutely.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Patricia. Hoping this comment gets to you. The other one disappeared via the ghost in the WP machine.

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  14. Dale says:

    I could not ever come close to imagining the horror of this happening and the overwhelming elation to find out that you will see your long-lost son again. However did he get her cell number? 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Google 🙂 I can’t imagine it either. My ex-husband used to threaten it when the kids were little.

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      1. Dale says:

        LOL. Cell numbers are not always up there but we’ll say in this case it was!
        What a horrible thing. A friend of mine has her boys taken from her. She looked for them for over 10 years. They were in Beirut. Horrible thing

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Oh, I would say a fair number of them can be found if you know how to look for them. Especially if you are a law abiding citizen who doesn’t take any steps to hide them. Knowing her son was out there somewhere, I’m guessing she was making herself very findable also.

          Dale, that’s a downright shame that not only can parents steal children from the other parent, they are somehow allowed to leave the country without being stopped. Isn’t that what passports and border checks are all about. It sounds like they are back with her now? I hope the …. who ran off with them was prosecuted.

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          1. Dale says:

            You have a point on that one.
            As for my friend, they were living in the Middle East.
            She – don’t ask me why – never pressed charges.

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  15. Bill says:

    Such a sad yet believable story, Lisa. Such things do happen. Well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Bill, thank you. Yes, they do 😦

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  16. Danny James says:

    Nice touch. Lots of water to shed there.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Danny. I liked using them in both as the location where he had been living (not sure if that photo was taken in Venezuela or not but it looks like it) and also with the tears upon knowing he was returning to his home.

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  17. Linda Kreger says:

    Really great take on the prompt. No way to make up for eight lost years, but the future certainly looks bright!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Linda, thank you very much. I loved writing to that image.

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  18. GHLearner says:

    I like your interpretation of waterfall, what a moving story. These kidnappings happen far too often. It’s almost always a selfish act, not love for the kids.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Gabi you are so right about the selfishness of it. Thank you for reading and your thoughtful comment.

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  19. I love this! You built the tension so well and the ending was emotional and satisfying…to get her son back. Nicely done, Lisa!!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Brenda, thank you. So happy you enjoyed the story. I was happy for them ❤

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  20. James McEwan says:

    Sadness followed by overwhelming joy.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, James.

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  21. Really nice – full of scent, sound, and taste – lovely writing

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Jennifer.

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    2. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Jennifer. Hoping the comment gets to you. The other one(s) disappeared.

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  22. Forestwood says:

    Well that story made me think and work out various scenarios. Well done

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, glad you enjoyed the story.

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    2. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much.

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  23. Margaret says:

    I was drawn right into Willa’s situation by your words. Very powerful. I love that her lonely celebration of Joey’s birthday was the moment when everything changed for the better.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      ❤ Thank you, Margaret. The story wrote itself and I'm sure this actually happened at somewhere at sometime.

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  24. Sandra says:

    That was very moving. Can’t imagine how awful that must havew been.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sandra, thank you very much.

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  25. msjadeli says:

    Yes it did, Neil. Thank you.

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  26. msjadeli says:

    Thank you, Neil, yes it did.

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  27. msjadeli says:

    4th try on saying yes it did and thank you. WP is not cooperating.

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  28. Vartika says:

    Touching ! Well done Lisa

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Vartika 🙂

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  29. Dear Lisa,

    A touching story. Full of emotion. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rochelle, thank you very much.
      Shalom,
      Lisa

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  30. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh. Oh this is heartbreaking and joyous. I felt her reaction of shock. Beautifully done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Laurie, thank you very much. I’m happy when I hear someone has connected with a story.

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