TSM 224 — oh, the light (piaku form)

oh, the light

plays
with soft brushes,
braised
tones, textures, nuance;
tickling shadows, paints its canvas

morning’s
rose dance with tangerine,
noon’s pale lemon splash,
evening’s
plum indigo wine

grey rain rags wash each surface clean
give respite behind sparked, grumbling clouds
peppered mirrors wave, refreshed,
wait on sole arbiter of beauty’s
holy cast

Written in piaku form.

Carrie is the host of The Sunday Muse.

37 Comments Add yours

  1. Sadje says:

    So beautifully colored Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje, glad you like it.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re most welcome my friend

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  2. Ali Grimshaw says:

    Lovely. Like a word painting. I especially like your last stanza.
    grey rain rags wash each surface clean
    give respite behind sparked, grumbling clouds
    peppered mirrors dance, refreshed,
    wait on sole arbiter of beauty’s
    holy cast

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ali.

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  3. some lovely adjectives Lisa in this painterly poem (we chose the same pic) but “tickling shadows” nails it for me

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Hey Laura, good to see you. Thank you for reading and your comment ❤

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  4. rothpoetry says:

    Very nice Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dwight, thank you.

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      1. rothpoetry says:

        You are welcome!

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  5. rothpoetry says:

    I love the picture!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Carrie finds some good ones to write to 🙂

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  6. Carrie V. H. says:

    This is utterly gorgeous Lisa! I love the life and vivid scene you have painted here!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Many thanks, Carrie. ❤

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  7. seanatbogie says:

    I am not a painter, but as a keen photographer I can relate. Everything is about the light.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sean, thank you. Well-said.

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  8. Jim says:

    You did well with the painting. I’d like to see the finished
    product, visually. You also worked it well with the Piaku form,
    I sort of like it. Really though, too many single (1’s) in Pi
    making syllables for me. I generally write a Pi poem or ditty
    on March 13, I missed this year, we were on a cruise having
    its Internet broken.
    ..

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks Jim, for your kind and thoughtful comment.

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  9. memadtwo says:

    Color and light are inseparable. Lovely. (K)

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  10. We may choose the colours but light decides what we see. Delightful, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Keith, well-said. Thank you 🙂

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  11. Wow, Lisa, you just keep blowing my mind how you put together these poems based on a photo!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Christian, thank you very much.

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  12. wyndolynne says:

    Love the combination of a new form and those amazing colors! Enchanting and vivid!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      So happy you enjoyed the poem, Wyndolynne, thank you 🙂

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  13. Helen says:

    Felt every texture, bathed in every hue … and the form ~~ blew me away. You are one intrepid poet.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Helen, what a lovely comment. Thank you ❤

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  14. Rob Kistner says:

    Love where you went here Lisa. I took a similar approach to this image. “wait on sole arbiter of beauty’s holy cast” .. strong line my friend. ✌🏼❤️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Rob! I had written sole arbiter of beauty down the day before about something else, and when I started writing this it worked its way in to this poem. Perfect example data mining riches in some of the most grimy dark holes one can find themselves in.

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  15. Susie Clevenger says:

    I see and feel the colors in this. You have written in artistic brush strokes of poetry. Beautiful

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    1. msjadeli says:

      ❤ Thank you very much, Susie.

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  16. This is so beautiful, Lisa, and I love the connection and contrast between the last two stanzas!


    David

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, David, glad you enjoyed that aspect ❤

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  17. Sunra Rainz says:

    Love the turns of phrase throughout this poem, Lisa! Especially this section:

    “morning’s
    rose dance with tangerine,
    noon’s pale lemon splash,
    evening’s
    plum indigo wine”

    And love those “grumbling clouds” too! “-)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Sunra, thank you ❤

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