dVerse — MTB — Kiss of the Goddess

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Quail from your downward darting kiss
from Siegfried Sassoon’s, The Kiss

quail skitter in yesterday’s green
from under ferny parasols
your face flickers, a cinema,
downward; frayed cellulose reruns
darting confabulation’s myth
kiss me again, again ’til dust

kiss without bed of delusion
darting sparks; myth made manifest
downward wrung, convergence breathes life
your heart’s pulsing, our circuits linked
from felt to ineffable, gods
quail at their gestaltic folly

image: “The Kiss,” by Mark Stevenson

I decided to write the first stanza from front to back and the second from back to front.  I didn’t use 8-line stanzas, but I did use 8-syllable lines.  Thank you, Laura, for this very enjoyable challenge.

Laura is today’s host of dVerse’ Meeting the Bar. Laura says:
Choose ONE of the [below] lines and write a stanza(s) taking each word as the start of each successive line i.e. the first word begins the first line, the second begins the second and so on. Basically, we are taking the horizontal line and making it vertical- its vaguely acrostic and I’m not sure if this form has a given name.

• Since there’s no help, come let us kiss and part
• Shake hands for ever, cancel all our vows
• By freezing passion at its blossoming
• I guard her beauty clean from rust
• Quail from your downward darting kiss

Rules: You must keep the same sequence though you may reverse it
Your poem should preferably  be at least 2 stanzas long
Rhyme is optional but try to stick to the meter of your chosen line
And for those of you who like an extra challenge
Your chosen line will determine a stanza of either  6, 7, 8 or 10 lines which gives you the options of choosing a poetry form to match – see  the Poetry Forms Index
Suggestions: You might want to make it a ‘kiss and make-up’ poem given the day!

 

42 Comments Add yours

  1. I like th8s5 reflecting form, and I really like the film references in the first stanza.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sarah!

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  2. Paula Light says:

    Excellent Lisa! 💖

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Paula 🙂

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      1. Wow, this is amazing!

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Mary thanks much 🙂

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  3. rothpoetry says:

    You did a great job with the prompt Lisa. I love the art piece!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Dwight. I imagine that’s what swirling souls look like.

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      1. rothpoetry says:

        :>) You are right!

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  4. Jim says:

    I like your change of meaning of the Word Quail. I had those thoughts also, perhaps a picture of the bird. But I did not.
    Your reversal worked neat, clever!!
    ..

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Jim, thank you!

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  5. Gillena Cox says:

    Nice one.
    Thanks for dropping by to read mine

    Much💖love

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  6. Sadje says:

    Very good Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome my dear friend

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  7. memadtwo says:

    What a beautiful piece of art and your words illuminate it. I particularly like the second stanza. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Kerfe, thank you. I really hope there is a way for soul mates to reconnect it their next lives. What do you think about it?

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      1. memadtwo says:

        I’ve actually written something kind of on the subject for the next Kick-About. I think spirits survive but relationships in this life are rarely that clear. Don’t the Buddhists believe that you keep working on the relationships from your past lives? But the troubled ones, to make them better. I’d like to believe in reincarnation, but I’m not sure. I’ve certainly never had what I would call a soul mate. But I’ve had plenty of troubled relationships.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Thanks for your thoughts on it, Kerfe.

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  8. I love what you did here, Li! “ferny parasols” is awesome and the contrast between the two stanzas so palpable. ❤️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Punam, thanks very much and glad to hear that the living and afterlife stanzas were distinct.

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  9. Rob Kistner says:

    Wonderful piece Lisa, and your inversion is most effective! 👍🏼✌🏼

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Rob!

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  10. kim881 says:

    The first to jump out at me were the skittering quail – an inspired change of meaning, Lisa! I love the mirrored verses and the ‘frayed cellulose reruns’.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Kim thank you very much. As I look at it, it feels like the living stanza feels false and the beyond stanza feels real.

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  11. this poem was like a dance – a swirl of lovely words and good to see how the line prompt worked in reverse
    “kiss without bed of delusion” – delicious!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Laura, thank you so much. That is my favorite line also 🙂

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  12. dorahak says:

    A myriad of images and sensations pulsing with life — I loved it.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dora, thank you!

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  13. Mish says:

    Captivating in word choices and imagery. I especially love “from under ferny parasols your face flickers” and your two takes on “Quail”.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Mish thank you and glad you enjoyed.

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  14. I loved the graphic you chose for your poem Lisa. It was a perfect match for your flowing, fluttering words. Beautiful ☺️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Christine, thank you ❤

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  15. Sunra Rainz says:

    Love the combination of the image and your poem; such a sensory write. Love these lines:

    “your face flickers, a cinema,
    downward; frayed cellulose reruns”

    “your heart’s pulsing, our circuits linked”

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for your lovely comment, Sunra.

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  16. Leyde Ryan says:

    There’s so much that’s good in this that it’s hard to choose a favorite line…I’ll just tell you it thrilled me that you used the word parasols! It’s a wonderful word, and offers a lovely visual.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Happy you enjoyed the poem, Leyde, thank you 🙂

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      1. Leyde Ryan says:

        You’re welcome–my pleasure!

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  17. The film as a metaphor is so good, and I do love the reflected form.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Bjorn ❤

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  18. Margaret Schaff Bednar says:

    kiss me again, indeed! I like how you flipped the order!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Margaret, and glad you enjoyed it.

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