#FF — Cleared


PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

The knock sends arrows of dread shooting through my body and the sound of a train begins to grow in my head. Mary and “the crew,” with their trucks and their cameras, are early. Although Mary was a weak-willed child that was easy to control, she’s grown up to be just like her dearly departed mother; loving, but bossy.

Mary started watching, “Hoarders” on TV and is convinced they can help her help me. Doesn’t she realize every item in this house is a memory of her mother?

Mary watches the trucks fill and thinks, “we’re finally rid of her.

[100 words]

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the steadfast host of Friday Fictioneers.

59 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    I’m not entirely convinced mother died of natural causes and I fear for Mary

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Interesting hypothesis, Neil. Thank you 🙂

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  2. Badfinger (Max) says:

    I have a suspicion that criminal activity was afoot before…hopefully not in the future.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I have a suspicion also…

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  3. Sadje says:

    There are always two sides to a story

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Well-said, Sadje.

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  4. CGraith says:

    There’s a novel in this!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thanks, CG!

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  5. memadtwo says:

    A bit of a conflict here…(k)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Agreed, and I had no plans of ending it that way!

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      1. memadtwo says:

        Writing works like that I find.

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  6. calmkate says:

    ooh I like a good twist, well written Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Kate, thank you very much. I liked looking at the pics you posted today (?) of the birds. That first one is such a beauty!

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      1. calmkate says:

        thanks Lisa, I had no idea why nobody was commenting … have turned the comments on now! There were many more colourful birds but they flit about so much I couldn’t get a decent pic 🙂

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Cool on turning your comments back on. You got some good ones.

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          1. calmkate says:

            thanks so much!

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            1. msjadeli says:

              You’re welcome 🙂

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  7. Dear Lisa,

    Mary has rather simplistic expectations, doesn’t she? Nice perspective on the cluttered prompt. (I couldn’t wait to get out of that place 😉 )

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rochelle, it’s a great picture to write to. I thought it was my back room at first 😉 Thank you.
      Shalom,
      Lisa

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      1. We all have those spaces, don’t we…sigh. You’re very welcome, Lisa.

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  8. James McEwan says:

    Sometimes you have to let go, hoarding is stressful. Well for me at least.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I’m getting better about it in a couple of ways. One is I usually successfully resist adding more to it. The other is that, since I realized my sons have little to no interest in a lot of things I’ve been holding onto for them, when I go through a cleaning jag, I toss more than ever. Maybe by the time I’m 100 years old, I’ll only have my rocking chair, a bed, and a few books left to dispose of. Thanks for reading and your comment.

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      1. James McEwan says:

        I tried that, giving things slowly to charity only to have my daughter ask where one of her childhood toys was. She was not happy it went to Oxfam. You just can’t win. Thanks.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          James, you just reminded me that one of my sons still hasn’t forgiven me for giving one of his childhood bikes to a poor kid in our neighborhood, and this was after he was grown and riding an adult-sized bike. He hadn’t looked at that bike in years but randomly was in the garage one day and asked where it was. lol

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  9. There’s a lot going on beneath surface in your story Lisa!

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  10. dorahak says:

    Great twist ending! A haunting can be a pain or a pleasure: perhaps it was time for the junk to go in more ways than one.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Dora, indeed!

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  11. Danny James says:

    I don’t think so!

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  12. authorfleurl says:

    Letting go of clutter can be a challenge. As has been said already, this story has the bones of a good novel! Nicely done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks very much, Fleur.

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      1. authorfleurl says:

        You are welcome 😊

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  13. granonine says:

    Oh! Mary was not a fan of her mother! Great twist and it could lead to so many different tales 🙂

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  14. Delightful twist. It seems as if Mary’s days will soon be brighter.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Alicia. May be.

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  15. Tannille says:

    I kind of read the story as the grandmother having psychological issues, rather than something sinister. But maybe there is a body to be found amongst that mess. 😀 Well played story, L.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      T, I like where your mind took this. Thanks! 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Neel, thanks much!

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  16. Sounds like she might be better just selling the house and moving to totally exorcise her mother. Lots of conflicting emotions here, I can tell. I’d like to read more of the story. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks for the lovely comment and glad you enjoyed the story.

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  17. Oh dear, mum wasn’t well loved by her daughter.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      It surely seems that way!

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  18. plaridel says:

    the last line was a killer. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Good choice of words. Thanks, Plaridel!

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  19. Bill says:

    Oh, that we could see inside the minds of others. Our loving kin may just be waiting. Fun story, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Bill! You just never know!

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  20. Oooh so much going on here! Very well done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you 🙂

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  21. I like this. I’m a bit slow with what to do re. linking back … I can’t find the blue frog SMH … hopefully I can work it out and do another one.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you. If you follow the highlighted “Friday Fictioneers” it will take you to the main post for it. You use the http address there to lead others to it in your own post. Once you write your story on your blog, you use the http address of it for the Mr. Linky link that you will find at the main post. Hope that helps.

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  22. Thanks. I’ll try this.

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  23. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh nicely layered with the two points of view. That last line is so telling

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Laurie!

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  24. Heather Musk says:

    Ooh, I wonder what Mary will be plotting next … This is full of intrigue.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Heather. You just never know…

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