Tanka Tuesday — back then

resized tiny grey butterfly on orange flower 071422

back then
my copper skin
a silken instrument
played sweet under his spellbinding
but now
my color’s drained, a limp gray scarf
crumpled, numb, forgotten;
left to dream of
back then

Butterfly cinquain form

Colleen Chesebro is the host of Tanka Tuesday.  Colleen says:
Use Eugi’s theme, the gray scarf to write your choice of syllabic poem.

23 Comments Add yours

  1. mizuv's avatar Paula Light says:

    Excellent. Really felt this one 🦋

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Paula <3

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  2. Dale's avatar Dale says:

    Oh yes. I could so easily picture this with your wonderful words. Beauty.

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  3. poetisatinta's avatar poetisatinta says:

    The form really compliments your poem beautifully <3

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      AJ thank you. I chose the form first :)

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  4. Elizabeth's avatar Elizabeth says:

    I love the butterfly cinquain form, and you got a nice photo to go with it.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you. That plant grew up on its own in my yard and seeing that beautiful little butterfly on it was a lucky find :)

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      1. Elizabeth's avatar Elizabeth says:

        I love when Nature takes over the garden, always a beautiful surprise.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje <3

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      1. Sadje's avatar Sadje says:

        You’re welcome

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  5. Badfinger (Max)'s avatar Badfinger (Max) says:

    I feel like this a lot!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Sorry to hear it, Max!

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      1. Badfinger (Max)'s avatar Badfinger (Max) says:

        It’s all part of the aging process I guess.

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  6. Lisa, this butterfly cinquain is fabulous. Visually, it really grabs our attention. Love this!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Colleen.

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      1. You’re so welcome. I love the cinquain forms. They are so versatile.

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  7. Lisa's avatar Lisa says:

    I love how you used color to signify the change/continuation. The color drained in gray.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Lisa.

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