dVerse — MTB — Mother always knows best.

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this, our living dream
we huddled ones without a home?
flocking, schooling, living rainbows.

back then
sweet with their secrets
of touch and time

We’ve been waiting for you. What took you so long?”
We may never know

parents weep at grave
to death’s fragrant song
doom’s dissonant stay
No more poem to write today

Top image:  photograph titled, “Little Lamb Sculpture,” by MM Anderson

I chose the 13 last lines from the last 13 poems I wrote. One of the lines is the title.

Laura is today’s host of dVerse’ Meet the Bar. Laura gives us two options and I chose this one:
take the very last/final line from each of your most recent poems and re-write them as a poem
– choose at least 12 poems (since it is the 12
th month!)
– keep each line intact, unadulterated
you may add preposition, conjunction or change of tense if it helps the flow
you may use enjambment to break a line
– the lines do not have to follow date order

 

57 Comments Add yours

  1. That last part with the parents at a childer’s grave… I can understand that there are no more poems.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Bjorn.

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  2. a sadly sweet joy to read Lisa not least:
    “back then
    sweet with their secrets
    of touch and time”

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Laura.

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  3. sanaarizvi says:

    Oh my heart this is so poignant ~

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  4. The last stanza is so powerful!

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  5. lillian says:

    That second stanza is delectable! The final stanza…more negative and very powerful!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Lillian, thanks much.

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  6. Grace says:

    That last 4 lines pulled my heart strings. So many ifs, we may never know.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Grace.

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  7. Ron. says:

    Final stanza (esp last 2 lines): Bella!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Ron, glad you enjoyed.

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  8. Helen says:

    Brilliant, Lisa … with a perfect ending!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Helen.

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  9. rothpoetry says:

    Very well done, Lisa. Love the music as well!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Dwight. I love how they sang it also.

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      1. rothpoetry says:

        You are welcome!

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  10. I really don’t know how you put these poems together based on what to me sound like pretty complicated instructions. What I do know is I like the performance of the choir. Did you know that Eric Clapton covered the tune as well in a reggae-flavored version?

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Christian this one was easy: take the last lines from your last 12 or more poems and try to put them in an order that makes “sense” and I use the term loosely. Yes, I know EC’s cover it and the female singer puts a great emphasis/spin on it. That’s probably the raggae version?

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      1. I guess I should have listened to EC’s cover before making my clever comment. It’s definitely not reggae. That said, to me, it does have an island/ Caribbean feel to it, though that’s my subjective perception! 🙂

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        1. msjadeli says:

          The version I’m thinking of is from his album, “There’s One in Every Crowd.” Looking at wiki, the two female backup singers are Yvonne Elliman (of Mary Mag in JChristSuperstar fame) and Marcy Levy. Not sure which one does the breakout vocals. I used to have this album many moons ago am pretty familiar with it. Wiki says it was album he made right after 461 Ocean Blvd. Yes, it has a Caribbean feel to it and starts out sounding kinda raggae.

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  11. Both sad and beautiful are these last lines that haunt, well done! 👏👏

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Tricia, thanks much.

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  12. Margaret Schaff Bednar says:

    The questions that never get answered… haunting, yes

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Margaret.

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  13. Sadje says:

    They work very well together.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Sadje. Lots of good found poems coming out of this prompt.

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      1. Sadje says:

        I’ll try it too.

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  14. merrildsmith says:

    Lovely and so very poignant, Lisa.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Merril.

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      1. merrildsmith says:

        You’re welcome, Lisa.

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  15. Hauntingly beautiful, Li! Your lines came together beautifully. ❤️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Punam ❤

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      1. My pleasure. ❤️

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  16. Sunra Rainz says:

    A lovely poem, Lisa, though bittersweet at the end. The last line is so fitting.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sunra. I was going to have the last line be what I turned into the title.

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      1. Sunra Rainz says:

        I would say that was definitely a good decision, as I prefer the last line you chose 🙂

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  17. memadtwo says:

    That third stanza especially resonates. (K)

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  18. Mish says:

    A heartrending piece yet so gently rendered. I love the way the dialogue found its way in so perfectly.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Mish, thank you.

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  19. lifelessons says:

    An intriguing prompt. Okay, perhaps I’m hooked…Going gathering.

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  20. poetisatinta says:

    Beautiful especially the last line ❤

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, AJ!

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  21. dorahak says:

    Beautifully arranged, Lisa. These last lines harmonize into such a poignant mixture of grief and hope for the future.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Dora, thank you very much.

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  22. pvcann says:

    Indeed, we may never know, but the question is a good one, what took you so long is both playful and a grief, beautiful poem.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Paul, many thanks ❤

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      1. pvcann says:

        My pleasure Lisa

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  23. Cute, cute, cute, cute , CUTE! 😍
    I just love that cute little lamb! 🥰

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad you like it, thanks, Gia!

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  24. Badfinger (Max) says:

    That got a little grim at the end…I like the change in it.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Max. It surreally made sense.

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