PHOTO PROMPT © Na’ama Yehuda
Chimes flutter at six. Each of us in the dorm are dressed in identical cream scrubs. We stand as one from straw floor pallets. We hygiene and breakfast. At seven we converge on the temple, to hang our egos at the door and cleanse our minds.
We sit cross-legged, eyes closed, and are instructed to meditate (i.e. absorb Master’s droning platitudes.)
Instead, my mind wanders to when I walked in on you and Mary; each detail clear until I raise the knife.
Whether in here or gen pop is irrelevant. I vow to remember the knife plunging into your heart.
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Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the swimming host of Friday Fictioneers.
Tao Talk 
Add a stab for me, OK?
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Sounds like they think prison time was a price worth paying.
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May be. I think wherever they are they are in prison with that kind of obsession.
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Those memories can be so intense~
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Dear Lisa,
I liked hang our egos at the door. She doesn’t sound like she’s sorry or ever will be. Hell hath no fury….Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Rochelle, like U2 sings, “stuck in a moment and can’t get out of it.” Thanks much.
Shalom,
Lisa
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You’re quite welcome, Lisa 💜
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I too liked the hanging of the egos at the door
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Thanks, Neil!
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I’ve been cheated on and had my heart broke…I suppose some people take it harder than others.
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I think in her case it drove her insane… Thanks for reading, Dawn.
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Quite the unexpected turn of events.
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It’s been awhile since I went this dark. Must be the eternal gray weather…
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Could be, but still a gripping tale
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Thanks, Sadje!
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You’re welcome
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Some people will never forget no matter what. I feel this could make a great psychological thriller.
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Thanks, T!
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Well, here I was thinking she was having a nice meditative moment. Haha. But then again, I suppose there are all kinds of meditative moments!
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Thanks for reading, Sascha. Indeed!
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This is insanely dark! She should have hung her ego at the door, forgiven, and moved on.
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Thanks much, Santosh! The thing with shoulds is what suits one may not suit another. When logic and heart separate, it gets even more complicated…
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When logic and heart separate… so well put.
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Thanks, Marleen 🙂
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Jealousy and infidelity certainly need a lot of meditation to cleanse the mind. I hope she washed the knife and disposed of it. A dark story.
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James, great comment and appreciate your support for the character. Thanks!
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That got dark in a hurry, a deep take on the prompt, well done.
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Thanks much, Mason.
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I’m not sure there will be enough meditational opportunities to cleanse that from his/her life anyway.
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Thanks, Sandra, I fear you are right.
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Quite the contrast here. High. (K)
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Thanks, Kerfe. Shades of “Clockwork Orange.”
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Yes.
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As long as her mind is free, she is no one’s prisoner. Not fully, at least. Good for that!
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Thank you, Na’ama! She is only imprisoned by herself, and only she can break the bonds.
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Indeed! Not easy, but still far more possible than for those who aren’t even aware that they are imprisoned!
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Looks like the meditation isn’t working too well. Great take.
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Thanks much, Athling!
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Ice cold.
I’ve heard that Mary and new guy are having a wonderful time.
So often in such circumstances, the knife is used for other forms of unpopular surgery.
Well done, Lisa.
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Thanks, Bill. Maybe I should have titled this Lorena’s Alternative Programming? 😉
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Maybe. 🙂
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Great story well written Lisa 🙂
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Thanks, AJ 🙂
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A dark turn…I see this one open for interpretation.
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Happy you see it is open like that.
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Your writing is always captivating. I’m not totally sure what the setting is but your word choice and phrasing is intense.
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Clare, thanks much for the high praise. Much appreciated!
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Wow. That turned pretty dark (good but dark).
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Thanks, James! Two of the pics we were given to choose from involved fire, so I ran with it. BTW, I’ve exchanged email with your publisher and will try to write a story. Thanks again for the connect!
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Glad you made a connection. Good luck.
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i wanted to believe that she was just having a bad dream.
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Yes, that would be someone’s nightmare wouldn’t it 😦
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Wow. Love this. Sounds like she is happier now, even locked up. Great subtlety here. She’s got her vengeance. Though it sounds like she can’t let go.
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Thanks a lot, Laurie!
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Loved this! I was on edge… Good take on the prompt, msjadeli.
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Thanks much, Brit!
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I’ve never seen hygiene used as a verb.
There are worse ways to leave a cult. The good old stabby stabby sure beats the Kool-Aid option.
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Thank you, Nobbin 🙂
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As Rochelle said, hell hath no fury like a woman scorned.
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Thanks, Alicia!
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She, or he, has zero intentions of ever feeling remorse. I love what you created here.
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Dale, I hope you are wrong, but you may be right. Thanks very much ❤
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I hope I am wrong, too. Then again, if she is there long enough, mayhaps… (I’ll pretend I didn’t read part 2)…
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