Tanka Tuesday Ekphrastic — Winter Farewell


Boughton, George Henry; The Lady of the Snows; Walker Art Gallery


Wander along beach in winter
to where I promised to forget.
Because a murmur hummed, I danced
in wonder’s song and broke my vow.

Another me, one calm and wise,
wanders along beach in winter.
A lady wrapped in finery;
defenses for ghosts lingered there.

Water frozen, doth not stir me;
roses are but stalks, hips, thorns that
wander along beach in winter.
Yet there on horizon, silhouette

made of pearl abalone, gleaming
against the dreary sky. You turn,
wave goodbye, ascend. I weep and
wander along beach in winter.

quatern form

Colleen Chesebro is the host of Tanka Tuesday.  Colleen says:

❄️ This week, using the painting as your inspiration, please write either a syllabic poetry form or a freestyle poem, including a syllabic form. ❄️

35 Comments Add yours

  1. What a beauty. Your words give the image life.

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  2. Badfinger (Max) says:

    Very good description of a beach in the winter Lisa…it’s like a closed amusement park.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Max. The artist builds a world there.

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  3. Sadje says:

    Beautifully written Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje, glad you like it.

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  4. memadtwo says:

    I like the circles within circles following the paths of the thoughts and emotions. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Kerfe ❤

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  5. Lisa, this is so good! I love the form and the story you tell fits so well with the painting. Bravo! 💛

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Colleen, thank you very much.

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  6. Elizabeth says:

    I think you had the same feeling as me. Beautiful poem.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I think you’re right, Elizabeth, thank you 🙂

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  7. balroop2013 says:

    I like the imagery that describes winter and transports me to beach. Beautiful poetry!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Balroop!

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  8. This is a cool form, Lisa! I love the story you told with it.

    Yvette M Calleiro 🙂
    http://yvettemcalleiro.blogspot.com

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Yvette 🙂

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  9. Jules says:

    A story that many have repeated in some way…
    when losing a lover or even just a friend.
    Well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Jules ❤

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  10. judeitakali says:

    I love the longing and admiration. Deeply reflective of the image. 👏🏽👏🏽

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Jude, thank you, much appreciated.

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  11. kittysverses says:

    “roses are but stalks, hips, thorns that
    wander along beach in winter.”
    Wow! Exquisite, Li. 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad you like that line, Kitty, thanks!

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  12. D.L. Finn, Author says:

    You brought the painting to life.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, D.L.

      Like

  13. I love how the form you chose to employ allows the refrain to slowly travel through the stanzas, like slowly walking through the snow…


    David

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    1. msjadeli says:

      David, very happy you enjoyed it. Thank you for the feedback, much appreciated.

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  14. willowdot21 says:

    Beautiful and evocative a lovely story 💜

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Willow, thank you ❤

      Like

      1. willowdot21 says:

        Hugs 💜💜🤗

        Like

  15. Lovely contrasts and story. Well done! ❤️

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Gwen!

      Like

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