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dVerse — MTB — cosmos tryptych

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Triptyque: Soleil / Lune / Terre by Rosalinda Alvarez

 

sun

distant being propels fright’ning
umbra whit’ning
thissing, thatting
tai qi singing

moon

little cousin orbits, dreamspars,
envies solstar
begs for lightcrumbs
physics grace comes

earth

tiny bubble at the whim of
maths and godlove
bounces lyrics
song’s mysterics

 

minute form

Laura is today’s host of dVerse’ Meet the Bar.  Laura says:
And so for today’s MTB prompt you should choose ONE of these threesomes:
• Sun; moon, earth
• Godhead Trinity/God/Father, Jesus/Son, Holy Spirit
• Yin, yang, oneness

We are writing without any set rule for rhyme or meter:
— A poem with THREE separate and distinct stanzas
— Each stanza numbered or subtitled with the reference word
— Include the reference word within the stanza if not subtitled

40 Comments Add yours

  1. Ron.'s avatar Ron. says:
    March 9, 2023 at 4:33 pm

    Mind blown.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 9, 2023 at 4:52 pm

      Thanks much, Ron.

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  2. Gillena Cox's avatar Gillena Cox says:
    March 9, 2023 at 5:14 pm

    OMG! This is awesome and Verse 3 is my favourite

    Much💜love

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 10, 2023 at 12:50 pm

      :) Gillena, thanks very much.

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  3. Kathy at writingpresence's avatar Kathy at writingpresence says:
    March 9, 2023 at 5:17 pm

    Exceptional! Perfectly matched by the triptych art.
    I LOVE “mysterics” – and the marble marvel’s music x Thank you!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 10, 2023 at 12:51 pm

      Kathy, so happy you enjoyed the post :)

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  4. Carol anne's avatar Carol anne says:
    March 9, 2023 at 6:57 pm

    this is great Li! I love it! <3

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 10, 2023 at 12:55 pm

      Thank you. Thank Laura also for the creative prompt.

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  5. rothpoetry's avatar rothpoetry says:
    March 9, 2023 at 7:37 pm

    Nicely done, Lisa.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 10, 2023 at 12:57 pm

      Thanks much, Dwight :)

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      1. rothpoetry's avatar rothpoetry says:
        March 10, 2023 at 8:18 pm

        you are welcome.

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  6. memadtwo's avatar memadtwo says:
    March 9, 2023 at 7:54 pm

    At the whim of maths…aren’t we all. I love the way this dances. (K)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 10, 2023 at 12:57 pm

      Thanks, K <3

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  7. Christian's Music Musings's avatar christiansmusicmusings says:
    March 9, 2023 at 8:39 pm

    The clip of that marble machine is just incredible. I like your poem as well! :-)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 10, 2023 at 1:00 pm

      Thanks, Christian! The marble machine is a labor of love and a symbol of creativity just like the cosmos is.

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  8. Brendan's avatar Brendan says:
    March 10, 2023 at 4:58 am

    Well done Lisa – the essence of all three distilled into a divinely pouring form.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 10, 2023 at 1:02 pm

      Wow! I’m happy it pleases you.

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  9. Laura Bloomsbury's avatar Laura Bloomsbury says:
    March 10, 2023 at 5:12 am

    what a delightful rhyming Syszgy
    ” tiny bubble at the whim of
    maths and godlove”
    I shall always think of earth as such from now on

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 10, 2023 at 1:05 pm

      <3

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  10. Jane Dougherty's avatar Jane Dougherty says:
    March 10, 2023 at 7:37 am

    This definitely has a dance beat to it!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 10, 2023 at 1:06 pm

      Imagining Eminem rapping it and then adding some more to it… Thanks, Jane!

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      1. Jane Dougherty's avatar Jane Dougherty says:
        March 10, 2023 at 2:36 pm

        xxx

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  11. merrildsmith's avatar merrildsmith says:
    March 10, 2023 at 11:19 am

    A bouncy triptych. I particularly like the final stanza.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 10, 2023 at 1:32 pm

      Thanks, Merril!

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      1. merrildsmith's avatar merrildsmith says:
        March 10, 2023 at 3:30 pm

        You’re welcome!

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  12. poetisatinta's avatar poetisatinta says:
    March 10, 2023 at 12:36 pm

    Great this is crying to be spoken aloud :)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 10, 2023 at 1:36 pm

      Maybe at the next OLN :)

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      1. poetisatinta's avatar poetisatinta says:
        March 11, 2023 at 2:08 pm

        Yes go for it!

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  13. Rob Kistner's avatar Rob Kistner says:
    March 10, 2023 at 12:59 pm

    This is so potent and so captivating Lisa! Excellent piece my friend.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 10, 2023 at 1:37 pm

      Thank you very much, Rob <3

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  14. Jim's avatar Jim says:
    March 10, 2023 at 9:02 pm

    My favorite will generally be the Moon, it makes my fangs come out, makes me howl, and sometimes makes me bite ladies on their necks. I like it being the orbiting little cousin of the sun.
    ..

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 11, 2023 at 12:04 am

      Ooh, lunacy can be fun the way you do it.

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  15. M Jay Dixit's avatar M Jay Dixit says:
    March 11, 2023 at 7:16 pm

    🤯 this was so clever, so creative, short and sweet too!!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 11, 2023 at 9:51 pm

      Jay, thank you!

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  16. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)'s avatar Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:
    March 12, 2023 at 11:14 am

    I think it all ends with the earth where we belong after all.

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  17. Giadreams (themoviemylife.com)'s avatar Giadreams (themoviemylife.com) says:
    March 12, 2023 at 5:37 pm

    I like the happy face in the image. 😊

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 12, 2023 at 5:39 pm

      Thanks, Gia!

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  18. paeansunplugged's avatar paeansunplugged says:
    March 13, 2023 at 2:18 am

    I so love what you have done here, Li! Marvellous! ❤️

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:
      March 13, 2023 at 9:50 am

      Thanks, Punam!

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      1. paeansunplugged's avatar paeansunplugged says:
        March 14, 2023 at 3:03 am

        My pleasure.

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