
an empty attic the sound of April showers thunderous rumblings train ticket rests on mantle old dog asleep at my feet

spring melancholy cold, soggy steps to station haze curtains river weeping willow fronds flutter
pale reflections mirror sky
top image by Jonas
The first renga has Colleen’s hokku and my wakiku. The second one is my hokku and Colleen’s wakiku.
Colleen is the host of TankaTuesday. Colleen says:
Renga or Renku features alternating stanzas, usually of 5-7-5 and 7-7 syllables.
The first part of the renga is a (5-7-5) haiku (hokku) written by your guest.
The second part of the renga is the host’s response (wakiku): (7-7). A cooperative poem, written by 2 or more poets. For this challenge, the poet can write both parts of the renku or work with another poet.
This form is spontaneous. It does not tell a sequential story. However, it is structured with a beginning, middle and end.
Hokku (starting verse), followed by linked verses, and ends with a tanka (small poem). Connected to the seasons. The hokku shows the season in which the gathering occurs. Somewhere within the renga, there should be verses referring to each of the seasons to create a complete circle. No title and no rhyming.
Your Invitation:
1. I’ll give you the hokku portion for the Northern … Hemisphere, and you write the wakiku portion. (I’ll add the kigo words to the hokku). See below
*** an empty attic the sound of April showers thunderous rumblings ***
2. BONUS: After you write the wakiku in reply to my hokku, please add your own hokku (haiku) on your post. In the comments on your post, I’ll add the wakiku portion!

I like those! I like how your hokku continues the story of the train.
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Thanks much, Lisa. I thought continuing the mood made sense.
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Oh, I really like this
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:) thanks, Robbie
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I like your response (wakiku) and the haiku (hokku). Look for ward to see Colleen’s response.
My attempt to respond:
longing increases, miles apart
reunion sparks, fills the heart
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oh my yes, thank you for expanding the narrative, Miriam <3
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You’re welcome, Lisa! It was fun. <3
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Oh, I really like this, Lisa. Very mysterious
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Robbie, thank you <3
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⭐️🌈
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Lisa, your wakiku is wonderful, the stillness and waiting, (we all stay in if we can with rain and thunder – last night here yakes!) and then the imagery in your hokku, love it – can’t wait for the response … 💞Suzanne
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Thanks so much for reading and your comment.
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Very scenic writing Li.
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Many thanks, Sadje.
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You’re most welcome
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The dog and the train ticket…very creative. Inspired writing !
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Rall, thank you very much :)
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Oh! I loved your entries and the feel it creates, Li. :)
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Kitty, thank you. Since Colleen set it inside, I decided to keep it near human dwellings.
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The attic thunderous sound?
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I think it rumbles in the emptiness of the attic? Not sure.
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That sounds better lol.
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:)
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There’s a story in your addition. I like that. (K)
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Thanks, K. The guidelines say no narratives but I couldn’t help it.
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It works for me.
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I love your addition. It’s perfect.
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<3
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💞
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I love the wakiku, Lisa. Here’s my wakiku:
weeping willow fronds flutter
pale reflections mirror sky
I’m creating a recap post of the all poets who joined in. Thanks so much. I love this form and it’s so creative when you have numerous poets joining in. 💖
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Colleen, I love your wakiku! and love the idea of a recap. I should go back through and add some to others’ also. Thanks again, for the prompt idea and your response.
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This is amazing. It is of a high intellectual refinement.
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Thanks much!
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This is lovely and you took us on your journey too 💜
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Willow, what a lovely comment. Thank you <3
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Beautiful, Lisa!
Yvette M Calleiro :-)
http://yvettemcalleiro.blogspot.com
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Thank you <3
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Ah, spring is a good time to travel – by train. We might be doing that later this month to visit our elder who is moving.
A nice contiuing story, the verse between Colleen and yourself :)
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Happy you enjoyed them, Jules. I’d love to take a cross-country train ride, but only if I have a sleeping car. Seems like it would be a hoot. Looking forward to poems that will sprout from your trip if you take it.
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