dVerse MTB/Form — Ballata — Summer Water

resized lotus on pond at waterfall 20240723_182551

summer water moves dynamic
sun-warmed from spring’s thaw
obedient to seasoned laws
compared to winter blues, it’s manic
summer water moves dynamic

sheeting boulders as it falls,
tinkling streamlets into ponds
buoys fish, all things aquatic
summer water moves dynamic

light plays over surface, draws
mirrored ripples worth applause
integral to soul’s choreographic
summer water moves dynamic

A poem about “summer water” could get quite lengthy.  Today’s poem limits itself. 

Grace is today’s host of dVerse’ Meeting the Bar.  Grace wants us to write a poem using the Ballata form

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  1. kim881's avatar kim881 says:

    I love the pace and rhythm of your Ballata, Lisa, especially the drumming of the word ‘dynamic’ that echoes throughout, and the way you slipped in ‘choreographic’!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      lol thanks, Kim, and glad you saw that dance move :)

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      1. kim881's avatar kim881 says:

        You’re most welcome, Lisa!

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  2. Oh, this is so good Lisa. As the other Kim says, you have a great rhythm gong. It echoes that of the water. You’ve nailed this one!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Kim, so happy you like it :)

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  3. I can hear the watery sounds in your poem Lisa and I love this rhyme pair

    “light plays over surface, draws
    mirrored ripples worth applause”

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Laura thanks much <3

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  4. Lovely! Mentally it engages all my senses.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Dana, thanks much. It’s a beautiful place to spend time.

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  5. memadtwo's avatar memadtwo says:

    S oul’s choreographic–exactly what waterfalls reflect. The one in your photo is magical. (K)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks, K. It’s a part of the gardens that doesn’t get a lot of traffic during the week.

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  6. Grace's avatar Grace says:

    Lovely soothing rhythm and energy with manic, dynamic and choreographic. Those are challenging end rhymes, so hats off to you.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Grace, thanks so much <3

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  7. Nice poem, Lisa. I also like your clip of Frederik Meijer Gardens. I have a lot of time listening to flowing water. It’s so soothing!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Christian. I enjoy it also.

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  8. Rob Kistner's avatar Rob Kistner says:

    Dynamic write Lisa… ☺️😉✌🏼🫶🏼

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Rob :)

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  9. brazannemuse's avatar brazannemuse says:

    I love listening to water, I can hear it play in this poem

    💞Suzanne

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Suzanne, thanks much, glad you can :)

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  10. Sadje's avatar Sadje says:

    A beautiful and seamlessly flowing poem Li.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Thanks much, Sadje <3

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      1. Sadje's avatar Sadje says:

        Most welcome my friend

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  11. Dale's avatar Dale says:

    Oh yes, Lisa. Love this one. It moves beautifully.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Dale, so glad you like the poem <3

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  12. This is gorgeous, Lisa. Your imagery is lovely.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Nancy, thanks much <3

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  13. A beautiful feel to this, hearing the water, seeing the fish and aquatic life floating in the summer water dynamic. So calming to read.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Di, it is all of those things that make the place so relaxing. Thank you <3

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  14. pvcann's avatar pvcann says:

    Some fine word play Li (and what a gorgeous video)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Paul, thanks, happy you enjoyed it. My granddaughter loves that spot also.

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  15. The words flow, the rhyming is top-notch and the video amazing! What’s not to love.❤️

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Punam, thank you <3

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      1. My pleasure, Li. ❤️

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  16. Dora's avatar dorahak says:

    You make us fall in love with “summer water,” Lisa. Beautifully composed, my friend.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar msjadeli says:

      Dora, thanks very much.

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      1. Dora's avatar dorahak says:

        My pleasure! ❤️

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