dVerse Q235 — Whirled Peas

dreaming kwan yin (2021)

Whirled Peas

Soul curls, warm cushion
for pearl purse respite
in hardened world.
Soft for a girl
without fur,
naked cur,
unworthy,
unfurled,
unsure.
Here
whirled
peas makes
manifest cream,
love’s purest scheme.
Middlin’s construct, mesh
without outlying extremes,
without supreme agendas;
with fuzzy, cooperative dreams.

De Jackson (aka whimzygizmo) is today’s host for dVerse’ Quadrille Monday, where De would like us to write a 44-word poem using whirl.

44 Comments Add yours

  1. whimsygizmo's avatar whimsygizmo says:

    Loving your assonance and rhyme here. But my favorite element is that centered “Here”…perfection.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      De, so happy you enjoyed the poem, and appreciate you pointing “here” out <3

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  2. The poem looks like a chalice… and I just want to drink your words.

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  3. kim881's avatar kim881 says:

    Your whirled peas quadrille has a wonderful whirlwind shape, Lisa! I love the idea of ‘soul curls’ and ‘fuzzy, cooperative dreams’.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Kim so happy you like the poem, thanks!

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      1. kim881's avatar kim881 says:

        You’re welcome, Lisa!

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  4. I see a time telling hour glass with everything resting on

    “fuzzy, cooperative dreams”

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Laura, I love what you see <3

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  5. Dora's avatar Dora says:

    I love the way you construct “middlin’s construct,” Li. What contentment and serenity is here!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thanks so much, Dora, and I’m glad you’re feeling it in the poem.

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  6. Ron.'s avatar Ron. says:

    Shapely, tasty work, Li, even though I not a pea eater unless it’s whirled peas which I’ve been praying for my whole life…

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Ron, I hear you on whirled peas.

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  7. Dale's avatar Dale says:

    You are too clever for me. I love the shape of this poem, a beautifully curved female body, showing the two necessary sides of her that must come to play when necessary

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Dale, I love what you see. Yes, a balance within is insightful.

      I also am enjoying with others are seeing in it.

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      1. Dale's avatar Dale says:

        The best part of writing is the responses!

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  8. rothpoetry's avatar rothpoetry says:

    A very interesting take on the prompt, Lisa!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thanks, Dwight :)

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  9. I love the unique take on your poem, Li!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Cindy, thanks so such :)

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  10. “Middlin’s construct” likely refers to Middlin Landscape Construction, a high-end residential landscaping company in Melbourne, Australia. The company is owned by Ash Middlin and has been operating for over 15 years, specializing in a wide range of landscaping services including paving, decking, stonework, and poolscapes. 

    Or maybe not?

    So I had to give up seeking some overall meaning and just sink into the words and phrases, upon which it became delightful.

    Loved your choice of music too.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Rosemary, middlin’s construct is a phrase that has nothing to do with a construction company in AUS, sorry :) Glad you found it delightful and enjoyed the musical selection.

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      1. Well, it’s nice to have it demonstrated that AI can be so wide of the mark! LOL.

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        1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

          Haha! The day I battle with AI and it wins will be a sad day for me. Middlin’s construct to me means shaving off extremist views and building something of moderation that can work to build peace.

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  11. memadtwo's avatar memadtwo says:

    I like that it starts with soul and ends in dreams. And a whole world to discover between. (K)

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Haha love that. Thanks, K.

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  12. Truedessa's avatar Truedessa says:

    I too see a time hour glass filled with words for thought….finding a place of rest in a hard world.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Truedesssa, I like the idea of an hour glass filled with words … and finding a place of rest <3

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  13. marja's avatar marja says:

    With ” Soul curls, warm cushion” I immediately soften in the whirl of your poem

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Marja, happy to hear it, thank you.

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  14. I love the word flow and the urn-like shape. It both contains the words and allows their fluidity to overflow!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      WP, thanks so much for sharing what you see in the poem.

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  15. Gillena Cox's avatar Gillena Cox says:

    Enjoyed your shape poem Lisa

    much♡love

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Gillena, thank you <3

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  16. Great wordplay Lisa 👏

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  17. Lisa, “whirled peas makes manifest cream” feels to me like tenderness made tangible — it leaves me smiling.

    ~David

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