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The Wheel
Rolling along green in a golf cart with boot-licking lackeys, cracking crude jokes about wives, he can’t figure out which he disdains more, weak twitterings of lackeys or how uncomfortably tight his pants are after lunch. He lets out an onion-garlic belch, feels bile erupt, as sharp pain radiates up his left arm.
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He’s lying on his back on cold concrete when he opens his eyes. Far above, postage-stamp kaleidoscopes whirl with grim faces.
What is this place? How did I get here?
The faces speak as one: GUILTY.
As the floor gives way, he smells death and burning brimstone…
[100 words]
Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the host of Friday Fictioneers.
Tao Talk 
I see what you mean, Lisa. In my tale, the faces weren’t of judgment but welcome.
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James, I guess it depends on who is arriving?
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Loved this story! If only…
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Thanks. Indeed!
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Loved this Li! Way to go it is fabulous! 😊😊💜💜
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Thanks, CA!
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You have managed to tell a very vivid story in only a hundred words! This is very well done
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Thanks so much, Lisa <3
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And just like that he’s dead and earning his destiny. You introduced a vivid character so well, that I don’t feel bad that they deemed him GUILTY.
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Hey Clare, good to see you at FF. Thank you for your thoughts on this vivid character.
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Thanks you, Lisa! Happy New year! I’ve been managing house moves and helping my daughter-in-law with minding my grandson as the birth of my third grandchild approached. Too much going on, but I miss the challenge of FF and all of you. I learn so much from everyone else’s writing.
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Clare, real life wins over virtual life every time. You are welcome, and you have been missed.
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Great story, Lisa. When the end comes, it comes fast if we’re ready or not. Clearly this guy wasn’t ready.
-David
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David, thanks very much. I’m sure he wasn’t.
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Oh my! Way to imagine a way to go. So descriptive and evocative!
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Dale, that room really gives me the creeps, which was a good start for the story. Thank you <3
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Funny how some find comfort and others the creeps. In love that
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Yes, it is.
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😊
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Wishful thinking.
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Exactly. The story felt so good to write.
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🙂
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I think someone should have been nicer in his life before moving on to then next. Great story.
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Will, I echo those sentiments. Thank you.
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I hope this is who I think it is and that he’s where he deserves to be!!!!!
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Judy, it is, and I agree.
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;o)
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You paint a vivid tale of reckoning, Lisa.
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Thanks, Nancy.
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Judgement first, trial second?
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He’s gone through every earthly trial already. He’s at the Heavenly Supreme Court now for his final judgment.
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I love this Lisa the ending is perfect 👏🏻
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Why thank you, Ange. I think so also. Too good for him, really, but I’ll take it ;)
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Dear Lisa,
In the end you reap what you sow. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Rochelle, exactly. I kind of imagined a wheel of karma when I wrote it. Thanks much.
Shalom,
Lisa
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A fitting exit.
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YES. Thanks, Sandra, I tried to give him one.
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I think you know who I am hoping this is…..
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You are thinking right, and I hope so also. Thanks, V!
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Clearly his golf skills were lacking, hence the guilty verdict. Never mind, his friends will join him soon.
A clear and entertaining story.
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James, in total agreement that many heads will be rolling when this circus is over. Thank you.
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Your first paragraph had such great details and sensory items and then your masterful writing took a turn – as the character did – well done
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Prior, many thanks, glad you liked the story.
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🙂
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And there he was, gone! Wow!
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Good riddance to him. Thanks, Keith.
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i’m not sure if he deserved that untimely passing, but such was his fate.
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Plaridel, I think he earned it.
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Excellent story. The day comes for all of us where all the power, all the weaseling out of justice and accountability won’t work any more and it will be over. And for this particular one that day cannot come too soon, and hardly anyone will cry for him, and there will only bad memories of his time on earth.
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Yes!
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Oh dear, gone to… that place. Very nicely done, Li!
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haha! They’ve been waiting for him for awhile. Thanks, Dear Chris.
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Well, that was grim. ;)
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Thanks, Dawn :)
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Sounds like he got what he deserves
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Better than he deserved.
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