dVerse Poetics Tuesday — Heaven’s Pipe

Heaven’s Pipe

Celestial proof, faith’s gift preserved
Through cloth loomed from best of life
Quiet watching, joy from joy observed

Grok of love with warmth we’re curled
Strands of care protect each in strife
Celestial proof, faith’s gift preserved

Patience tested, yet huffs demurred,
Forget-full tender kisses in moonlight
Quiet watching, joy from joy observed

Fathomlessly from grace, unearned,
Weary travelers hear heaven’s pipe
Celestial proof, faith’s gift preserved

Palm 2 palm, paths through tall ferns
Exchange beach glass found in white
Quiet watching, joy from joy observed

Souls sheltered, sacred space, purred
Through seasons, unweighed and right
Celestial proof, faith’s gift preserved
Quiet watching, joy from joy observed

Villanelle form

Sanaa is today’s host of dVerse’ Poetics Tuesday. Sanaa says:
For today’s Poetics, I want you to write a poem about love as something quietly sacred — not just roses and hearts, but the small, unseen ways someone stays.

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  1. Carol anne's avatar Carol anne says:

    A beautiful vilanelle Li! An amazing flow of words!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thanks, CA. I feel like you’ve been stalking my posts today.

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  2. Dora's avatar Dora says:

    Li, I love the weaving of wisdom, emotion, and imagery to create a tapestry-like effect, or a warm blanket with which to wrap oneself in, light, comfortable and lived-in.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      <3 <3 <3 Dora, thank you for what you see in the poem.

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  3. poetisatinta's avatar poetisatinta says:

    Lisa, this is a beautiful villanelle, with a gentle, touch. The repetition creates a rhythmic, hypnotic quality that mirrors the ‘quiet watching’ brilliantly 💞

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Ange, thanks so much. The reciprocity is what it’s all about <3

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    2. A gentle, beautiful villanelle, Li, that weaves the strands of wisdom and grace. ❤️

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      1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

        Punam, I love your view of it, thank you <3

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  4. sanaarizvi's avatar sanaarizvi says:

    This is such a gorgeous vilanelle, Lisa! I love; “Fathomlessly from grace, unearned, Weary travelers hear heaven’s pipe Celestial proof, faith’s gift preserved.”

    Thank you so much for writing to the prompt 😍😍

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Sanaa thank you for the kind words and thank you for your wonderful prompt.

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  5. Ron.'s avatar Ron. says:

    Villanellaborally laudible creation. Love the flow.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Ron, I love your poetic terms. Thanks so much.

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  6. Gillena Cox's avatar Gillena Cox says:

    Luv you poem, and choice of form

    Thanks for dropping by my blog

    much love

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      You’re very welcome, and thank you <3

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  7. memadtwo's avatar memadtwo says:

    I love your refrain–to be seen is indeed a gift. And I like the painting too (k)

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  8. kim881's avatar kim881 says:

    There’s a hint of Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet in your gentle villanelle, Lisa, with the celestial references and ‘palm 2 palm’. I love the idea of:

    ‘Souls sheltered, sacred space, purred
    Through seasons, unweighed and right’.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Kim, thank you so much for the feedback and happy you liked that idea. It’s a fond dream for me <3

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      1. kim881's avatar kim881 says:

        My pleasure, Lisa!

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  9. Brendan's avatar Brendan says:

    Indeed … “joys observed” are “faith’s gift preserved.” A lovely thoughtful weave in this lively villanelle.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Brendan, I’m happy it resonates for you. High praise from you.

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  10. It is in trust we find love… excellent use of the Villanelle form

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Bjorn, 100%. Thank you.

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  11. subversopus's avatar subversopus says:

    Patience tested, yet huffs demurred,
    Forget-full tender kisses in moonlight

    Excellent line, and I loved the villanelle form emphasizing each stanza! Great job!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Cara, thanks so much.

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  12. Steve's avatar Steve says:

    This is very beautiful, Lisa. I liked your poem’s structure and rhythm, and the repeating last lines. Very rich and meaningful. The song was familiar from your Valentine’s post and I enjoyed listening to it again… I got more out of it on the second hearing. Lovely pairing with the poem.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Steve, thank you so much for your kind comment. Glad you enjoyed the 2nd listen on Thin Air. It’s a beauty.

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      1. Steve's avatar Steve says:

        My pleasure, Lisa.

        And yes, the song is a beauty, too.

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  13. lynn__'s avatar lynn__ says:

    Faith, joy, patience, grace and tenderness are the varied, lovely facets of love…your villanelle is a cut diamond, Lisa!

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Lynn, so very happy you enjoyed the poem, thank you <3

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      1. lynn__'s avatar lynn__ says:

        You’re very welcome, Lisa…it’s beautiful.

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  14. Sadje's avatar Sadje says:

    A very beautiful poem dear friend

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thank you, Sadje <3

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