dVerse Prosery Monday — In the Valley

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The hills so dry,
so dense the underbrush,
that where I pushed my way
the giant hush was changed
to soft explosion.
--Yvor Winters, from the poem,
On a View of Pasadena from the Hills.”
In the Valley

When would I learn to keep my mouth shut, especially when trapped by persons, places, and/or things? For instance, in a Caddy rolling through Death Valley on State Route 190 on an early Sunday morning – with no hat, sunscreen, or water.

None of that mattered when Billy dissed you. Said you deserved it. Said you never had been worth a spit. I practiced my mindfulness like the doctor taught me the last time I was locked up, and it worked – until it didn’t.

I grabbed the steering wheel and veered us off the road while screaming, “I hate you! Die!”

Billy pulled me out by the hair, said, “No, YOU die” and fishtailed away.

It’s noon now. Not a car in sight. The hills so dry, so dense the underbrush, that where I pushed my way the giant hush was changed to soft explosion.

[144 words]

Sanaa (aka adashofsunny) is today’s host for dVerse’ Prosery Monday. Sanaa wants us to write an up to 144-word story using the given quote.

43 Comments Add yours

  1. Very cool story and image, Li. ✨

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Nancy thank you <3

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  2. kim881's avatar kim881 says:

    I love the way you set the scene in the opening paragraph, Lisa, and the ending is so worrying. I hope she finds her way home safely.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Kim, thank you. I’ve known people who wait until you’re trapped like that to start in on the verbal abuse. I hope she does also <3

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      1. kim881's avatar kim881 says:

        You’re most welcome, Lisa. I can’t think of a worse place than Death Valley to be dumped like that.

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  3. That was a dark place to end with way too much light.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      I agree, Bjorn. I hope she finds a way out of that mess. Maybe a Sunday driver will happen along…

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  4. sanaarizvi's avatar sanaarizvi says:

    This is incredibly dark and brooding, I hope she can find a way out of that situation. Excellent use of the line, Lisa! ❤️

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Sanaa, thank you, I hope so also.

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  5. Wow. Lots going on here. Vivid and original. Very good.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thank you, Steve :)

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      1. They call it Death Valley for good reason I’m guessing

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        1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

          from Nat’l Park Svc website:
          Hottest, Driest and Lowest National Park
          In this below-sea-level basin, steady drought and record summer heat make Death Valley a land of extremes. Yet, each extreme has a striking contrast. Towering peaks are frosted with winter snow. Rare rainstorms bring vast fields of wildflowers. Lush oases harbor tiny fish and refuge for wildlife and humans. Despite its morbid name, a great diversity of life thrives in Death Valley.

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  6. authorstew's avatar authorstew says:

    Nicely done Li. Tough spot to get pushed to your limit

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thanks, Stew!

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  7. jaerose37's avatar jaerose37 says:

    A cleverly written and absorbing story – Jae

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Jae, thank you.

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  8. Gillena Cox's avatar Gillena Cox says:

    Great contrast in the paths

    Thanks for dropping by my blog, Lisa

    much love

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thanks much, Gillena, and you’re welcome.

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  9. Wonderful ♥️

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Caleb, thank you :)

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  10. Muted colours looking wonderful in that image. Love!
    😊❤️

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Gia, I love that image also. Glad you do also.

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  11. Sadje's avatar Sadje/ Sadie says:

    A very moving story Li

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Sadje, thank you. I feel bad for her, but if she makes it out alive, she’s better off without him.

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      1. Sadje's avatar Sadje/ Sadie says:

        Very true my friend. 😍

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  12. Prior...'s avatar Prior... says:

    yikes – quite a different ending and powerfulk – wow — the hills so dry indeed

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Yvette, I’m glad it held your attention, thank you.

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  13. Sunra Rainz's avatar Sunra Rainz says:

    Wow. A punchy powerful tale told wonderfully well. Brilliant, Lisa! 🤍

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Nina, many thanks and happy you liked it.

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      1. Sunra Rainz's avatar Sunra Rainz says:

        You’re welcome, Lisa!

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  14. judeitakali's avatar judeitakali says:

    Enjoyed this. Started with a captivating poem.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Jude, happy you enjoyed the story, thank you :)

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  15. Oh Billy, stop that shit. You gonna get yours one day.

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  16. lesleyscoble's avatar lesleyscoble says:

    I want to read the next chapter, please. 👏

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      lol! Thanks, Lesley.

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  17. pvcann's avatar pvcann says:

    A great story Li, and bears a follow on piece in my view. The telling belies the tension which builds slowly like a pressure cooker.

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    1. Lisa or Li's avatar Lisa or Li says:

      Thanks much for the feedback, Paul :)

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  18. Carol anne's avatar Carol anne says:

    Loved what you did for this prose piece Li! Bravo! xo

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