Part of the prompts for today’s OctPoWriMo includes: “Have you ever had a moment in time that you wished you could stop and live in? Have you ever wished you could control time even if for just a little while? What would you do? What moment would you make last longer? Write about time and what you would do if you were in control of it. Today you get to be a Time Lord!”
One of the suggested forms is Loop Poetry is a poetry form created by Hellon. There are no restrictions on the number of stanzas nor on the syllable count for each line. In each stanza, the last word of the first line becomes the first word of line two, last word of line 2 becomes the first word of line 3, last word of line 3 becomes the first word of line 4. This is followed for each stanza. The rhyme scheme is abcb.
The first poem is the loop poem and the second, the one about wanting to make time stand still, follows it.
in the time of work
work time is measured
measured by purpose
purpose not treasured
*
appointments are scheduled
scheduled by quarter hours
hours for appointments
appointments not ours
*
meetings galore, hearings crunched in
in relentless marching outlook blocks
blocks solid with busy-ness
busy-ness of purpose, driven by clocks
*
lunchtime is rushed, hearings demand
demand to … be heard. mad hares rush
rush to the hearing, only to wait
wait, then listen until brain turns to mush
*
no time for vacation no time for days off
off means you need to find coverage for you
you when returned face the accumulated paperwork
paperwork that has bred like rats on the shelf
*
documentation report preparation
preparation of documents for files not eyes
eyes mostly skim carefully prepared reports
reports on the notes of professional spies
*
time for annual review, where you’re fed a view
view of the good, bad, and ugly of you,
you sit there and smile and you think all the while
while i’ve been here 25 years, only the supervisor is new
*
all those years have gone by, now the blink of an eye
eye now watering with happiness and relief
relief no more maulings, threatenings, the time grind
grind that didn’t make me quit. Time for disbelief.
*
in the time of retirement
retirement frees the constriction of time
time does its thing. i do mine.
sometimes we do lunch, and that’s fine.
*
* * *
wake, eyes closed, soft breath
light resting on my eyelids
i rise whenever
Wow!
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I don’t do well being a slave to the clock, but in this life, it has been my lot to have a clock attached to me like a dead albatross. This poem is so very true!
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glad you can relate to it, but not glad for the clock attachment. i retired in June and to go from the first poem to the second poem has been a real adjustment!
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I really like this form of poetry. I shall try it sometime 💕
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i like it also and will use it again.
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Another great poem and can so relate to this!
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glad it connected with you, Sam. the poem about your dad was so heartfelt
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Thank you!
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Jade, you’ve been looking into my brain haven’t you! ‘Paperwork like rats on a shelf.’ I relate SO HARD. To ALL of it. Fantastic use of the loop form too, it really highlights the ‘loop’ of work!
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didnt think about the loop of work until now. thank you for the insight 🙂
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I teally liked both poems.
I hate that you felt like this at work, glad it’s over for you now.
Hope you get more and more of those timeless moments 😊
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thank you Dawn. glad and hopeful also 🙂
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