De Jackson, aka Whimsygizmo, is our host of dVerse this day. De says:
I want you to blow some kisses into your poems today… Whatever mood or form you choose, just be sure your poem gives that Q smackeroo: precisely 44 words, not including the title, and literally containing some form of the word “kiss.”
Hello Goodbye
At the docks,
with gulls calling,
water’s surface is
sun diamonds.
Our eyes connect,
our lungs draw
salt, our hearts are
a valentine balloon,
pulling up and away.
Our lips pulling
to kiss, completing
heaven’s circuit.
You wave as your
ferry leaves the dock.
Update on 2/13/19: I’ve changed the title to Goodbye Hello, which is more fitting.
Tao Talk 
I’m especially enamored of this choice of words:
“our lungs draw
salt”
Wonderful.
LikeLiked by 1 person
:) thank you very much De
LikeLike
I love the hearts being a valentine balloon
LikeLiked by 1 person
:)
LikeLike
This reads beautifully. De and Bjorn picked out my favourite lines already, but I’ll say it again, the imagery is wonderfully chosen.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Carol, glad you enjoyed it.
LikeLike
A parting kiss can be the strongest.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Especially when it’s just begun. I’m glad you picked up on that.
LikeLiked by 1 person
This is so evocative of the sea and ships. The quintessential place for partings. I love your images, the balloon, heaven’s circuit and the sun diamonds.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks Jane. You just reminded me. It’s been awhile since asking you about your selkie tale. What’s the latest on it??
LikeLike
It’s joined the growing pile of manuscripts that my agent says she loved reading but it doesn’t fit into an obvious box to make it an easy sell. I only seem to write books that are beautiful to read but hard to bracket.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Discouraging :(
LikeLike
You’re not kidding.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I was just saying to another author there must be a publisher out there that takes on multi-genre or other-genre types of books! If there isn’t there needs to be.
LikeLike
There are always small publishers who will take a book that isn’t an easy sell, but they won’t try and sell it. They’ll let the author do that and if it doesn’t work they’ve lost nothing. I don’t want a small publisher who won’t spend anything on promotion. It’s a guarantee of failure unless you are prepared to dip deep into your own pockets so the publisher can take 60% of the profits. Publishers who are going to spend money pushing a novel will only take on what they are certain will give them a profit. I just have to write books that are ‘less complex’ less ‘ambitious’ and an easier read.
LikeLiked by 1 person
thank you for the information. What you are saying is you have to “dumb down”. That is horrible.
LikeLike
Unless you’re famous, you have to fit into a mould. It’s unfortunate but true. Make the reader work a bit and the publisher won’t want to know.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I, too, enjoyed those salty lungs and valentine balloons. This particular piece seemed very cinematic to me as well.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Glad you enjoyed it and cinematic sounds like a good thing. As someone who watches a lot of movies, I probably think cinematic by now…
LikeLike
A lovely poem.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Sadje. This week will be lub-dub all the way ;)
LikeLiked by 1 person
Gt❤️
LikeLiked by 1 person
Great ❤️
LikeLiked by 1 person
:)
LikeLiked by 1 person
I love the imagery. The sun diamonds and salty air.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Maggie glad you enjoyed them
LikeLiked by 1 person
A scene that has happened so many times through the ages–but to each couple it’s something new (and painful). I liked the hearts as Valentine balloons.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Merril.
LikeLiked by 1 person
A sweet kiss goodbye. Completing heaven’s circuit… like it Jade! :-)
LikeLiked by 1 person
:) Thank you, Rob!
LikeLike
“our hearts are
a valentine balloon”
especially love this!!
LikeLiked by 2 people
Thank you Maria!
LikeLike
A cinematographic quadrille, Jade, with the gulls and sun diamonds. But what really strikes me are the hearts ‘a valentine balloon’ and the lips ‘completing heaven’s circuit’. The wave is ambiguous – is it a final goodbye?
LikeLiked by 1 person
I left it ambiguous on purpose. In my mind, the tension had been building up for awhile and finally, just as the person was leaving, the kiss happened. I’d like to think it is a beginning, even though the person is leaving for that moment <3
LikeLiked by 1 person
What a setting! I love the minute details of the scene and the corresponding emotional significance. This bit is so good: “our lungs draw/salt, our hearts are/a valentine balloon,/pulling up and away.”
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you very much for your kind words, Anmol, glad you enjoyed it.
LikeLike
Oh I love this! Especially; “Our lungs draw salt,” .. ❤️ *swoon*
LikeLiked by 1 person
:) Thank you Sanaa, glad you liked it
LikeLike
Wonderful description of the hellos and goodbyes at a dock….could be at an airport or train or bus station….these scenes are always full of love that is sometimes joyful and sometimes heart breaking.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you for the feedback, Lillian, yes exactly.
LikeLiked by 1 person
‘Lungs draw salt’ strikes a chord as my husband is a sailor! Wonderful imagery. ❤️
LikeLiked by 1 person
<3 So happy this connected with you, Punam!
LikeLiked by 1 person
You are welcome Li. 💞
LikeLiked by 1 person
Nice description: “our hearts are
a valentine balloon”
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Frank.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Good Bye
Hello
Kissing
Never
Coming
Yet Love Wins..:)
LikeLiked by 1 person
Is this an ending? Or a beginning? I think I really should have named it Goodbye Hello :)
LikeLiked by 1 person
Happy Valentines
To the Entire World
For Truest Love is
No Time Distance
Or Space The
Force
Of
Life For
All to Share
Some Folks
Limit this
Force to
3 Letters
Or one
Man Never Ever
Never Always Love
For
Me SMiLes
The Realest
Valentine
‘FRiEnD’
i Don’t wanna
Sound Braggy
But It’s a FacT
i Will
Not
deny
A FRED iN FRiEnD
Hehe.. For i
Will
Speak
Literal
Truth
iN LiGHT too..
Hehe thanks for
‘Putting up with
Me’ on the dVerse
Trail my favorite
Valentines
Wish to
My Wife Year
Round as she
Coined the
Term ‘Fredache’
For Her
Valentines
Wish For me..;)
LikeLiked by 1 person
<3 Sweet Indeed <3
LikeLiked by 1 person
To Love All To Serve All And not the ‘Trump Twilight
Zone’ for Humans
Falling
In Line
To Get on
His Promised
Land of Space Ship
ReMeMBeR Fred
Be nice
Love
‘The Adversary/
Enemy/Trump
To
But
Do
Remember
The Ultimate
Truth in Life
As Light at Least
God is a SMiLE
Of
Love
And at
Most A
HeARTY
Buddha
Belly Laugh
With Tao and
Namaste Life
To
You
Too my Friend
i am currently Feeling
All
Of
The
Valentine
Oxygen.. heHe..🌹💝🕺🙌🌈🏖🌲🎹😇🌷🌷
LikeLiked by 1 person
Yeah, your poem gets the nuances of those dang docks, comings and goings.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Excellent title! Completes it perfectly.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you, Jilly. I flipped the words this morning on the title and I think it fits it better.
LikeLiked by 1 person