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Reena’s Exploration Challenge #82 and dVerse Villanelle with Slant Rhymes — Black Hole

This poem is a villanelle with slanted rhymes that is being submitted to dVerse, as well as being part of Reena’s challenge.

Reena is the host of Reena’s Exploration Challenge.  Reena says:

I am not a fatalist. I’m not obsessed with darkness. Yet, a landmark development in astronomy this week inspires me to remain on the periphery of the theme, but not get sucked inside.
Credit: NASA, BBC News
See if you can explore the science, give it a new twist, write a fairy tale or fables around it, or give it a totally new meaning. Black holes do not exist only in space. Many of us have those in our minds, when we cut ourselves off from the world.
There is no restriction on the length or format of the piece. Write a post on your blog, and link it up here with a pingback, or copy-paste the blog link in Comments.

Black Hole

At times my soul shrinks small and pinched
My heart in grief its beat suspends
A curse that which leaves hope impinged

My faculties become unhinged
Down through the portal I descend
As darkened soul sinks small and pinched

Then plopped into the sludge, I cringe,
Suspended murk of blind revenge
Trapped by that which leaves hope impinged

My thrashes faint, with weakened limbs
I pray to loose from this foul clench
This hell of soul shrunk small and pinched

Within the murk, so foreign, strange
I hear a call, a warming drench
A sound which lightens hope impinged

Like fuel inside a rocket ship
It lifts me from the darkened trench
Hope restored from curse that wrenched
My soul now soars, no longer pinched.


28 thoughts on “Reena’s Exploration Challenge #82 and dVerse Villanelle with Slant Rhymes — Black Hole

  1. I like this and feel the variation of lines rather than repetition works well and also the slanted rhymes help open up rather than constrain. I found this a metaphorical black hole that could speak to the condition of the soul or the ‘dark night’. Your last line does restore and I like the use of wrenched. Wonder whether leaving out ‘My’ for my hope might help the line length and adds more of the eternal into hope?

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