M is the host of dVerse today. M says:
So today, the prompt is Limbo – a word that has very different meanings. You need NOT incorporate both meanings, or even use the word itself – use a synonym, if it suits you. Since it’s been a long month, try to keep it under 100 words.
This is a Joseph’s Star form, a poetry form created by Christina R Jussaume on 08/06/07 in memory of her Dad..
i.
Trapped
in this space,
past, present, future’s
glue strip, all of me stuck fast;
even while admitting that
I crawled here alone,
eyes open,
blind.
ii.
I’m
dangling by
a wire o’er quicksand.
Were I to work my leg free
of its bite, I would then plunge,
pain-free, but smothered.
Which death
now?
Tao Talk 
It’s even worse… even if you plunge you will be back at the top again after the jump…
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Love this. Thank you for sharing.
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Glad you liked it, you are welcome.
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You’re cheery this evening! The two halves stand alone for me. The first one in particular; powerful.
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Thanks Jane. Going through a rough patch right now. The poetry helps.
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Poetry always helps :) I hope the spring brings a change for you.
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Limbo seems to resonate with darkness out here on the trail tonight. I like the idea of shape-poems, though they can be difficult to create.
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It’s hard to stay in the light with limbo. These were based on syllable count of 1-3-5-7-7-5-3-1
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Glenn, I tweaked the 2nd one. If you get a chance, take a look at it and see what you think.
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Nice lines: “I crawled here alone
eyes open,
blind” This presents the loneliness and delusion I imagine might be in limbo.
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Thank you, Frank. You might be right…
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This is a riveting write. As usual, I took an irreverent slant. I so admire those of you who lend it such substance.
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Thanks Beverly, lots left to purge…
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This was excellent Jade, dark and powerful. Love the piece, and the (nearly perfect) concrete form.
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Thank you, Rob. After what Glenn said, I started thinking maybe I should put synonyms in the right places to smooth out the 2nd one.
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…and I LOVE the painting!
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Thanks, I thought it went well with the content of the poems.
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Heavy choices seem to always leave us in limbo! Like your poetic form!
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Dark and powerful write, specially the first one. Enjoyed the form and shape of the words too. Hope you are doing well.
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Thank you Grace for the feedback and the concern. It’ll take awhile to get extricated from the glue strip, but there is no getting around that.
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Beautifully written
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Thank you, Sadje.
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My pleasure 😇
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eyes open, blind…how often we fall into the same patterns. (K)
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That is really good. Sorry you are having it rough right now.
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Max, thank you very much, it is appreciated.
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Love the glue strip image.. and the rest.
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Thanks Judy.
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Nice form. The picture it makes on the page echoes the dilemma – I like that. Of course, it’s a dilemma we can all imagine, and shudder from. The kind of question my boy asks at the dinner table…
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Thank you, Kim.
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you’ve captured that in-between angst – and from still inside, I gather, so am sorry for that, but not for this excellent, thought-provoking pen. Thanks for adding your voice
~ M
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Thank you very much, M, for the feedback and kind words. Your prompt was good for bringing some of it to light.
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Very impressive how you stuck within the form and still made two stanzas that leave the reader hanging on to every word
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Thank you, Laura, glad you connected with them.
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Dark and foreboding, no good ending here, only to choose the lesser of two evils.
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It’s a difficult place to be. Thanks for reading, Linda.
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I like the shape of the Joseph’s Star form, jade, especially the way each stanza starts and ends with one word, emphasising the words ‘trapped’ and ‘blind’ in the first stanza. I love the phrase ‘past, present, future’s glue strip’!
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Thank you Kim and didnt’ think of the star shape and the content, your view is appreciated.
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Excellent imagery, Li.
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Thank you, Punam.
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You are welcome!
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