#FF — Chilled Return


PHOTO PROMPT © Dale Rogerson

On Christmas Eve morning, Richard heard the iron gates of Ionia Prison slam shut behind him. He walked two miles to the bus depot, then rubbed life back into his now-numb hands before buying a ticket to Montague.

Richard stopped for a cuppajoe, then went to the cemetery, where he visited his folks. He hopped a local bus to White Lake and walked to the gazebo.

Snow dusted the area. He sat down. Without looking, Richard’s hand went to their carved initials on the wall. Noticing crystals forming on the water, he wondered if he’d be able to find her…

[100 words]

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the steady host of Friday Fictioneers.

54 Comments Add yours

  1. Dale says:

    Such wistfulness… I hope he does. (Without knowing what crime he committed, of course…)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Dale.

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    I’m not sure. I’m kinda hoping he can’t find her…

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I’m glad you caught the ambiguity there.

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  3. pennygadd51 says:

    Very ambiguous story. The absence of explicit good intentions in your story implies the opposite…I hope she’s nowhere around and that he doesn’t find her! If she wanted to be found, she’d have kept in touch while he was in prison.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Astute assessment, Penny!

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  4. badfinger20 says:

    Well if his intentions are good I hope he finds her…as long as he didn’t stop at a store to buy duct tape and chloroform.

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      1. badfinger20 says:

        Well you didn’t hint much toward dark…I just had to steer it there a little lol.

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        1. msjadeli says:

          I left it open on purpose, for whoever is reading to fill in the blanks. We see where your mind took it 😉

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          1. badfinger20 says:

            Yep! My mind automatically does stuff like that…and it gets me in trouble when I don’t filter.

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            1. msjadeli says:

              lol. Just messin with ya.

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  5. neilmacdon says:

    A chilling story, Jade. Beautifully and subtly executed

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Neil, thank you very much.

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  6. mitchteemley says:

    Intriguing beginning.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Mitch.

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  7. Sadje says:

    You’re so good at creating the perfect environment for your stories Li.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sadje, very kind words.

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome 😉

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  8. draliman says:

    He’s out, he’s done the memories thing and now he’s coming for her…

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  9. granonine says:

    I think, if she’s smart, she disappeared from him on purpose. That simple fact that he doesn’t know where she is says that she’s afraid of him, and that he means her no good.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, Linda, all of the above!

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  10. Dear Lisa,

    You leave me wondering if she wants to be found. Vivid details. I could feel the cold in my own fingers.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rochelle, I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
      Shalom,
      Lisa

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  11. memadtwo says:

    We don’t know the before, but I hope the after is a good one for all concerned. (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I hope time in prison has given him time to think about things…

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  12. plaridel says:

    after a long absence, she has moved on. there’s no sense of trying to find her anymore.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for reading and commenting, Plaridel. I tend to agree with you.

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  13. Russell says:

    Oh, he’s up to no good. Great take on the prompt!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Russell! I think you’re right.

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  14. pvcann says:

    The intriguing start of a great story. engaging and left me wanting more.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Paul, thank you. It could be a good start, maybe it will.

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      1. pvcann says:

        Maybe indeed 🙂

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  15. Mysterious. I’m not sure I want him to find her. I imagine she doesn’t want him to either. Nicely told beginning of a much longer tale! =)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks Brenda!

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  16. Laurie Bell says:

    I wonder, would she want to see him?
    Intriguing set up here.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks, Laurie. I’m thinking of continuing the story; if not in FF, elsewhere.

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  17. I like the way you build up the story Jade, I felt drawn in, and wanting to know what happened next. Nicely done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks and glad you liked it, WWM 🙂

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  18. Lynn Love says:

    Feels like the start of a much bigger story – so much left to tell! As others have said, a wonderful sense of ambiguity there. Fabulous

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Happy you enjoyed the story, thank you!

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      1. Lynn Love says:

        My pleasure 🙂

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  19. csheldonblog says:

    Ah to many questions, where is she, and why was he in prison..

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  20. Love it. I’m rooting for him. Almost wonder if there’s a yellow ribbon there somewhere . . .

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    1. msjadeli says:

      You never know 😉 Sorry for the late response, I just found your comment in my spam folder.

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  21. magarisa says:

    You’ve told us so much without spelling it out… I feel a chill imagining what he may have done or will do. Excellent storytelling, Li.
    Merry Christmas!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Magarisa thank you 🙂 Happy Holidays to You!

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      1. magarisa says:

        You’re welcome, Li. Happy Holidays to you too!

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  22. Michael says:

    I enjoyed the unanswered question, I believe if she wanted to be found she would waiting outside the prison gate.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I believe you’re right — if he’s the man he was when he went to prison…

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  23. Carol Anne says:

    a great story! Loved it! ❤

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