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dVerse — Whispers from the beach


A gentle sizzled whoosh of roaring speech
That never takes a chance to stop and rest
A voice that always whispers from the beach

The sand, now zoo of footprints pressed upon
From webbed and clawed escapees of the sea
Do not forget when water sole was on

‘Twas muffled then in distant gurgled word
At most a sigh from stolen bits of breath
Before the days of legs and wings of bird

When all formed life knew water as its way
When wind and rain from clouds did tap with sound
No earth nor mount did rise to offer bay

Such days gone now may rise again with sun
Where laws of man may shrivel on their lips
Where claws and wings may shrink along with tongue

The pungent blue, now white with salted tears
Transcends the times of past and present fears
A gentle sizzled whoosh of roaring speech
A voice for now that whispers from the beach

Today’s offering is a modified terzanelle, where each of the 5 tercets end with the rhyme sets and the concluding quatrain includes the first and the third lines of the first tercet. I used 10-syllable lines with pentameter.

Laura Bloomsbury is today’s host for dVerse.  Laura says:
For today’s prompt the challenge is to choose AT LEAST THREE RHYME SETS which I’ve taken from the above. These are:-


Write your poem as a rhyming tercet of 3 line stanzas though a composite 9 liner or more would do just as well
– Strict meter is not a requirement but for an extra challenge try pentameter (10 syllables to each line)
– You do NOT have to follow the ordered sequence of the above
– You may reverse the order of the 1st & 3rd words but otherwise keep the integrity of each rhyme set

53 thoughts on “dVerse — Whispers from the beach

  1. “Writerly” indeed. A lot of work done with this, and it all pays off. Again the Sea theme towers over the rest out here. I like the line /when all formed life knew water as its way/. I cringe with syllable counts and feet, but you soar with all of it; kudos.

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    1. So very cool. I remember seeing a Jacques Cousteau special on octopuses years ago and never forgot it. How smart are they? I remember they could get into closed jars and escape some difficult traps in the lab.

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  2. The sound of this is lovely – I agree with Jane, you have the rhythm off perfectly. I liked the circular nature of the form reflecting the circular nature of the story you tell. Love it when form fits like that.

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  3. I agree with Jane about sticking to the rhythm and the rhymes, and I love how you start with a powerful sound, launching into the waves with a ‘sizzled whoosh of roaring speech’ and then turns to ‘whispers from the beach’ I also love the phrase ‘zoo of footprints’. But oh, the twist in the final stanzas, Jade-Lisa!

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    1. It’s actually a modification of one. In a regular one you’re using the words from the first tercet only to complete the rhyming down through it. Follow the link on it for more info. Glad you like it, Jude, thank you.

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  4. It makes my head spin to read your description of your poem! I’m a seat of the pants novice and your skill in manipulating your poem to meet such restrictions amazes me. Bravo

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    1. Beverly, I enjoy the challenge of meeting the technical minimum requirements, but I have a long way to go in those extra flourishes that the real poets have. With time and practice, one day those will also come. Thank you for reading and commenting. Glad you enjoyed my poem.


    1. Sara, my interpretation of, “rhyming tercet of 3 line stanzas though a composite 9 liner or more” could be 3 separate tercets on a related theme but not necessarily one poem? I may be wrong!


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