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Wrought with terror-saturated anxiety, she wondered how she would communicate the truth to Robert. Despite the barrier it would raise for eternity, she owed him at least that much.

She rolled the platen, then began typing:

Dearest Robert,

I gave birth to our son, Johnny, on 3/17/55. He left the hospital with his new parents the next day.

I received a letter on 3/17/73 from Mr. & Mrs. Ames, saying Johnny was killed in VietNam.

Please try to forgive me.

Mary

Mary pulled the loaded pistol from the drawer, walked to the car, and drove towards Veteran’s Memorial Cemetery.

 

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the thought-provoking host of Friday Fictioneers.

Today’s offering is connected to the story I wrote last week.  If you didn’t get a chance to read it, you can find it here.

77 Comments Add yours

  1. neilmacdon says:

    I wondered why she’s waited so long to tell him and to kill herself. Something must have triggered it. Perhaps the bird at the window? (though this story seems to follow last week’s typewriter prompt).

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    1. msjadeli says:

      She knew it would create a barrier at minimum and destroy their relationship at most, so she never told him. The ultimatum has forced her to be honest with the horrible secret. The communication in the photo is the phone, and the window is the barrier to it. Yes, it’s another chapter from last week’s story.

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  2. Sadje says:

    A poignant finale to the first part.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, yes, no happy endings 😦

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      1. Sadje says:

        Not every story has a happy ending

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  3. Wow. OMG! Now that was a gut punch. Nice one, Lisa!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Susan. Poor Robert 😦

      Like

  4. Mike says:

    A powerful and sad story,

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Mike.

      Like

  5. badfinger20 says:

    I would have never guessed that from the other one…good ending….as in effective.

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      1. badfinger20 says:

        Lisa I’ve gotten behind posts…I’ll catch up.

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  6. Tannille says:

    Oh wow this is powerful. Gut wrenching. Poor woman.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks for reading, yes, for her and her poor husband.

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  7. draliman says:

    Ouch, powerful stuff.

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  8. Powerful and totally believable. Great write.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Anthony.

      Like

  9. Carol Anne says:

    Bravo! I loved this one! ❤

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad you did, thank you!

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  10. memadtwo says:

    So many stories behind children birthed in the secrets required by the times…(K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Yes, Kerfe, too many 😦

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  11. Iain Kelly says:

    Powerful story-telling. Well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Iain.

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  12. pennygadd51 says:

    Mary is in a terrible place, but suicide is never the answer.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      She has been given her ultimatum…

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  13. What a desperately sad story. Well written and so poignant.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Susan.

      Like

  14. plaridel says:

    after all these years, she couldn’t fogive herself. what a terrible ending one’s life like that.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      She was given an ultimatum by her long lost son 😦

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  15. James McEwan says:

    I was stunned . It seems tragedy begets tragedy.

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  16. Dear Lisa,

    Tragic story. Well told. The letter is often and effective vehicle.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Rochelle, thank you much.
      Shalom,
      Lisa

      Like

  17. Dale says:

    All that heartache for nothing. He never knew about the now-dead son. Now he has to deal with the death of both. I don’t like her.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      It’s a terrible legacy to leave behind isn’t it. Those secrets that come back to haunt can be devastating.

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      1. Dale says:

        Terrible! And for naught!

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Dale, we don’t know the whole story…

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  18. Nobbinmaug says:

    There’s a consensus that she’s committing suicide, but who is she meeting in the cemetery? I got the sense she’s being blackmailed. Could the gun be for protection? Or to silence someone?

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Maybe we’ll never know…

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      1. Nobbinmaug says:

        Ooh! You tease!

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  19. What a sad story – very well written!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Clare.

      Like

  20. susanmehr says:

    Tragic, well penned.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Susan.

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  21. Russell says:

    This whole thing is super sad. Well written and all of that, but sad.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Life is a mixed bag for sure 😦

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  22. ceayr says:

    Sorry, but I am confused as to why someone would wait almost 50 years to tell about a death.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Maybe because they never told about the birth? People have their reasons for keeping secrets…

      Like

  23. That’s a gut wrenching story, well told.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Michael.

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  24. Wow, powerful stuff, I missed last week, really busy doing absolutely nothing, I shall seek it out

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    1. msjadeli says:

      There is a link at the bottom to connect you to it, Shrawl.

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      1. Just read it!! Ace! Well done 👍

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Thanks Shrawl! Sorry for the late response. Just found your comment in spam.

          Like

  25. Telling the truth afterwards… what a burden to carry.

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  26. granonine says:

    So Robert knew he had a son only after his son was dead. Yikes. Lots of twists and turns here.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      So many things she should have told him before now.

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  27. You express the tension of holding secrets over years so clearly, and the corrosive effect on the holder of the secret. A tragic ending. Nicely done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you for your comment.

      Like

  28. Wow! I’ve read them both now. Life is full of wrenching choices and some never let us go. Well done!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sascha!

      Like

  29. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh wow… there is so much heavy emotion in this piece. So tragic

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Laurie.

      Like

  30. Anonymous says:

    What a horrible ending to a fraught life

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thanks for reading and commenting. Secrets kept fester with all kinds of things.

      Like

  31. pvcann says:

    A twist I couldn’t have expected, delightful in the telling.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much. I enjoyed writing this story, and it felt good to write the end the way I did.

      Liked by 1 person

      1. pvcann says:

        That’s what shines through in the emotion and power of the characters. 🙂

        Liked by 1 person

  32. magarisa says:

    Powerful writing, Li. I went back to read the first one from a whole new perspective.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Magarisa.

      Like

  33. subroto says:

    Her secret came back to haunt her, nicely done.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, yes it did.

      Like

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