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#FF — An edge

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Supposed to be til death do they part, maybe it would have been if either would have been more tolerant; less critical. While they figured out neither were either, two sons were born.

She was a lousy wife, a good mother, and a sloppy housekeeper.

He was a lousy husband, a decent dad, and determined to have full physical custody.

The State favors keeping arrangements the way they have been. She was a stay-at-home and he worked full-time.

Needing an edge, he began taking photos of the messes.

The custody investigator laughed at the photos; her bruises, not so much.

[100 words]

This is a fictionalized true story.


Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is the welcoming host of Friday Fictioneers.

60 thoughts on “#FF — An edge

    1. Thanks for the comment, Iain. Around here, DV is not taken as seriously as it needs to be. There would have to be a treatable injury. Depending on how severe the injury was, a judge would be more likely to grant a personal protection order (restraining order) than police involvement.

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  1. Excellently done. Domestic Violence is still often seen as “just a private matter” when it ought to be taken seriously RIGHT AWAY, and when the health of the children ought to be directly measured in proportion to the violence (physical and otherwise) they are exposed to.
    Lousy housekeeping needs to be pretty extreme to harm most children. Domestic Violence harms them almost by default, and with a dose-effect.
    Well done!

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    1. The husband was blind to the violence. He felt her housekeeping was her duty and she had failed. He felt it was his right. When asked by the investigator about the violence, he said, “I thought that’s what you wanted.” 100% true!

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    1. No it isn’t not by a long shot. And they get tired of hearing shaming questions like, “Why don’t you just leave him?” It’s a messed up situation and yes the kids suffer a lasting legacy from it 😦

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  2. What a powerful punch these 100 words were Jade! Wow! I can see the purple bruises clearly. I’m in awe of writers who can deliver such impact with such few words. This is an entire memoir.

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  3. Interesting story. When I read memoirs from adults who grew up with fighting parents (not necessarily DV), I find that all think parents should remain together for the sake of the kids.

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    1. It’s a no-win situation. Kids idealize their parents no matter what, and in an idealized scenario the family would remain intact and live happily ever after. It’s very difficult to compete with that fantasy. I feel sorry for every child of divorce, regardless of the reasons for the split.

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      1. It dawned on me one day (years ago) that I was the first person in my family to be raised by both biological parents. Death (most often), desertion, or divorce took their toll.

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  4. Fictionalised true, I think there’s many examples and he’s that nasty and full of himself he doesn’t realise two can take photos. I hoope he gets everything that’s coming to him, which won’t include the kids. well written with a very satisfactory end.

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    1. Unfortunately the investigator didn’t think much of the bruises and believed him when he said, “I thought that’s what you wanted.” It did stop him from getting primary custody but he still got the standard amount, which was every other weekend, a few hours one weeknight, half of every school holiday, and two whole weeks in the summer.


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