dVerse — quadrille — Gethsemane’s Check

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Labyrinth in Grand Rapids, MI.  Photo taken August 5, 2020.

 

Gethsemane’s Check

A large carved brick disc is plopped in the
center of a near-urban churches’ garden.
Chartre-styled snakes undulate with
purple petunias at midday to wind chimes.
Highway noises call like trapped surf in
machined shells, far from the sea.
Only ants walk with me.

 

 

 

Victoria C. Slotto is today’s host at dVerse.  Victoria says:
So, I want to invite you to join me in celebration of this summer, putting aside the chaos that surrounds us for a few hours. Let’s hop into the garden of words and write a quadrille, a poem of exactly 44 words, excluding title, that uses any form of the word GARDEN.

68 Comments Add yours

  1. I like that you have a moment of peace even in the presence of the cityscape conundrum

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Bjorn, am trying.

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  2. Lucy says:

    Lisa, you astound me once again with the pure depth of your figurative imagery:

    “Chartre-styled snakes undulate with
    purple petunias at midday to wind chimes.”

    This is doing wonders for my mind’s eye! Such evocative lines in a wonderfully written poem. I especially enjoyed the last line, implying the walk with nature, including animals, in the garden. That is amazing. What a fantastic take on the prompt! It’s quite lovely. ❤

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad you enjoyed the poem, Lucy, thank you.

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  3. I adore the idea of walking with ants. Your words convey the peace in this space so well.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Linda. It’s a beautiful place except for that constant loud highway noise blotting out any chance of peace. The ants were oblivious to it, which should be a lesson to me. Will have to go back there early some weekend morning.

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      1. Perhaps you can use the noise as a mantra….

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        1. msjadeli says:

          Thanks for the idea. Will try it if I go back…

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  4. Mish says:

    I really like the unique comparison here…”Highway noises call like trapped surf in
    machined shells, far from the sea.” Yep, they can stay there…this place seems so lovely.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Mish.

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  5. Glenn A. Buttkus says:

    You had me at “highway noises”. This is very well penned; one of your best.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Glenn!

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  6. I found some layering in thia. The title, Gethsemane, and then the aloneness at the end of the poem strikes me deeply as Christ rebuked his followers for leaving him alone in his suffering. Maybe intended, maybe not, but poetry has a way of establishing connections for readers.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Victoria, I’m glad you made the connection. Seeking solace in suffering only to have it driven away by the loud highway noises. Not to diss ants, but I was hoping for another to walk with me (spiritual guidance/comfort) in the labyrinth.

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      1. We do need each other. And, from my perspective, God, to journey with us.

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      2. We do need each other. And, from my perspective, God, to journey with us.

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  7. lillian says:

    Love this! Most especially those last three lines! Living smack dab in the city of Boston in a high rise, I love finding a hidden away urban oasis! 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 I had gone over to GR to pick something up from my son’s house and learned of the labyrinth a few days before. When I mentioned it my son said he knew about it as he and his girlfriend had been there looking for Pokemons 🙂

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  8. sanaarizvi says:

    This is absolutely amazing in its use of diction! I love; “Chartre-styled snakes undulate with purple petunias at midday to wind chimes.” Wowww! 💝

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I called them as I saw them, Sanaa. I swear as soon as I began to walk past the chimes they created music.

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  9. I love that you can turn the highway sounds into the sounds of the sea. Such tranquility of mind.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Sarah.

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  10. calmkate says:

    the title caught me … you also wrote of this and that but the ants are your teachers!
    divine work Lisa 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Glad you connected with it. Thanks, Kate 🙂

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      1. calmkate says:

        a pleasure Lisa, take care 🙂

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  11. rothpoetry says:

    Beautiful Lisa… Love all the images you reflect in you poem. I liked this…
    Highway noises call like trapped surf in
    machined shells,

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Dwight.

      Like

  12. merrildsmith says:

    These urban gardens often bring such a sense of peace. Last year, we often took my mom to the garden belonging to a Mormon temple, which was next to her building in Philadelphia.
    I liked “Highway noises call like trapped surf in
    machined shells, far from the sea.” Perfect.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Merril. I’m glad your mom gained peace from the garden ❤

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      1. merrildsmith says:

        Thank you. She did.

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  13. rivrvlogr says:

    Even in small steps, walking that maze would be a peaceful practice.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      It was. It took longer than you might think. I need to try it again and shut out the noise of the highway, or do as Linda suggested, use it as a mantra.

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  14. memadtwo says:

    a labyrinth garden! How wonderful! (K)

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Kerfe, you might be amazed how many labyrinths are out there. There’s another one I want to visit this week about 50 miles south of here that also happens to be by an old some-say-haunted mansion. Hoping to take a lot of cool pics.

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      1. memadtwo says:

        I’m looking forward to seeing them!

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  15. gillena cox says:

    Ants from my experience in gardens are quite troubling creatures.
    Happy Monday

    Much✏love

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    1. msjadeli says:

      These little critters didn’t bring much peace 😦

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  16. Sadje says:

    Love this poem of yours! Only ants walk with me! 😉

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    1. msjadeli says:

      🙂 Thanks Sadje

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      1. Sadje says:

        You’re welcome Li.

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  17. badfinger20 (Max) says:

    That is a beautiful surrounding…it looks so peaceful!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      The church did a wonderful job with it and I’m sure I’ll be going back there.

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      1. badfinger20 (Max) says:

        I would love to have a garden like that in the backyard…somewhere to relax .

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        1. msjadeli says:

          I’m thinking about putting one in. The way the ground shifts here though no way would one like this one stay flat. Will probably use stones.

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          1. badfinger20 (Max) says:

            Yea our backyard is slanted but we could do it…it would have to be stones as well.

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  18. Lovely imagination! So soothing, very nice, Lisa 🙂

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Jay 🙂

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  19. Bill says:

    Oh, I loved your poetic description. Well done.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Bill.

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      1. Bill says:

        You’re welcome.

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  20. Dale says:

    So evocative, Lisa. Beautiful lines.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Dale.

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      1. Dale says:

        Pleasure is mine.

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  21. i can see. i can hear. i can feel. your words are alive.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, glad you connect with them 🙂

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  22. I love labyrinths! What an evocative feast for the senses you set for us! Brava!

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much, Frank 🙂

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  23. Raivenne says:

    Love your quadrille. Oh, I would the one to walk the labyrinth path with you and the ants. I’d be a modern day Minotaur standing in its center feasting on the beauty of the surrounds. I am completely charmed by the landlocked fish off to the side as out of place yet belonging as the urban sounds that remind us of another type of life.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      I love what you see with your eyes, Raivenne ❤

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  24. Beautiful snapshot, both the words and the visual! This caught my attention from the very beginning (“A large carved brick disc”) because of the sounds of the words.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you very much 🙂

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  25. lynn__ says:

    An inspirational poem of place…an oasis in spite of traffic and ants.

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    1. msjadeli says:

      Thank you, Lynn. I need to get back there and give peace another chance 🙂

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      1. lynn__ says:

        I’m curious…which church in GR?

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